:1. Clearly written, in good prose, with correct spelling and grammar
- Lead
- "It is the only city in the US, with a population of 250,000 or more, to increase the circulation number of Sunday newspapers in 2007." - grammar; remove the commas by "US" and "more". DoneBobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:02, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The settlement originally began at present-day Lambert's Landing but was referred to as Pig's Eye, when Pierre "Pig's Eye" Parrant established a popular tavern there." - grammar; consider rephrasing to "The settlement originally began at present-day Lambert's Landing, but was referred to as Pig's eye when Pierre "Pig's Eye" Parrant established a popular tavern there." DoneBobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:02, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- History
- "...from the local Dakota tribes in 1805, in order to establish a fort." - grammar; consider omitting the comma. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Fort Snelling was built on the territory in 1819..." - On or in? Not done 'Territory' here is used like 'property', as in, 'The fort was built on the territory that had been ceded.' The alternative, 'The fort was built in the territory that had been ceded' doesn't sound right when replaced with quasi-synonymous 'property': 'The fort was built in the property that had been ceded.' Feel free to disagree, though. BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "In 1847 a New York..." - Consider adding a comma after 1847. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...the western Rondo neighborhood was obliterated by the construction of Interstate 94..." - tone; consider replacing the word "obliterated" with the word "demolished". Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The tallest buildings were constructed in the late 1980s such as Galtier Plaza (Jackson and Sibley Towers), The Pointe of Saint Paul condominiums, and the city's tallest building, Wells Fargo Place (formerly Minnesota World Trade Center)." - Consider rephrasing to "The tallest buildings, such as Galtier Plaza (Jackson and Sibley Towers), The Pointe of Saint Paul condominiums, and the city's tallest building, Wells Fargo Place (formerly Minnesota World Trade Center), were constructed in the late 1980s." Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The 1990s to 2000s saw a continuation of the tradition of ushering new immigrant groups to the city." - tone; consider rephrasing to "In the 1990s and 200s, the tradition of bringing new immigrant groups to the city continued." Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:33, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Geography
- Neighborhoods
- Climate
- Demographics
- "The Irish would become prolific in politics, city governance, and public safety much to the chagrin of the Germans and French..." - Consider adding a comma after safety. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "In 1850, the first of many waves of Swedish immigrants passed through Saint Paul..." - tone; consider rephrasing to "In 1850, the first of many groups of Swedish immigrants passed through Saint Paul..." Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "A large group settled in Swede Hollow which would later become home to Poles, Italians and Mexicans." - Consider adding commas after Hollow and Italians. Done and done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Mexico opened a foreign consulate in the 2005." - Consider removing the word "the", or consider adding the word "year" after the word "the". Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...comes from Irish, German, Scottish, and French Canadian settlers who in time would be bolstered by Hispanic immigrants." - Consider adding commas after who and time. Done and done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "For every 100 females there were 93.6 males." - Consider adding a comma after females. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:04, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Economy
- Culture
- "The city is associated with the Minnesota State Fair located in nearby Falcon Heights as the fair grounds are..." - Consider adding a comma after Heights. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:01, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "who lived in Merriam Park from infancy until early 1960." - Consider adding the word "the" after until. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:01, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Other notables include playwright August Wilson who lived in the city from 1978 until 1990. He wrote much of his decalogue of plays about the African-American experience in the 20th century during this time, premiering at the Penumbra Theatre. Other 20th century notables include renowned painter LeRoy Neiman and photographer John Vachon.[68]" - Consider revising to "Other notable residents include playwright August Wilson, renowned painter LeRoy Neiman, and photographer John Vachon." Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:01, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...the city boasts popular Irish pubs with live music such as Shamrocks, The Dubliner and O'Gara's." - Consider adding a comma after Dubliner. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:01, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Saint Paul hosts a number of museums including the University of Minnesota's Goldstein Museum of Design;[75] The Minnesota Children's Museum;[76] The Schubert Club Museum of Musical Instruments;[77][78] The Minnesota Museum of American Art;[79][80] The Traces Center for History and Culture;[81] The Minnesota History Center; The Alexander Ramsey House; The James J. Hill House; The Minnesota Transportation Museum; The Science Museum of Minnesota; and The Twin City Model Railroad Museum." - Consider placing a comma after museums, and consider replacing all of the semicolons with commas. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:01, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Media
- Sports
- "Saint Paul hosts a number of professional, semi-professional and amateur sports teams." - Consider adding a comma after semi-professional. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:34, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Citing the history of hockey in the Twin Cities and teams at all levels, Sports Illustrated affectionately called Saint Paul the new..." - Italicize Sports Illustrated. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:34, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- ..."it was named the best overall sports venue in the U.S. by ESPN." - Remove both periods in the word US. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:34, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...Hall of Fame outfielder Dave Winfield, Hall of Fame infielder Paul Molitor, pitcher Jack Morris and catcher Joe Mauer." - Consider adding a comma after Morris. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:34, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Minnesota's oldest athletic organization, the Minnesota Boat Club resides in the Mississippi River..." - Consider adding a comma after Club. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 00:34, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Government
- State and federal
- "Many state departments and services are headquartered throughout Saint Paul such as the Minnesota Department of Natural Resources." - Consider adding a comma after Paul. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 01:17, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Minnesota is represented by Amy Klobuchar, a former Hennepin County Attorney, a Democrat, and Al Franken, a former comedian and satirist, a Democrat." - Consider rephrasing to "Minnesota is represented by Democrat Amy Klobuchar, a former Hennepin County Attorney, and Democrat Al Franken, a former comedian and satirist." Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 01:17, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Education
- "...include three public and eight private colleges and universities, and five post-secondary institutions." - Consider removing the comma. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:30, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Well-known colleges and universities include: the College of Saint Catherine, Concordia University, Hamline University, Macalester College, and the University of St. Thomas." - Consider removing the colon. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:30, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Those languages are English, Spanish, Hmong and Somali." - Consider adding a comma after Hmong. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:30, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The district runs 82 different schools including 52 elementary schools, twelve middle schools, seven high schools, ten alternative schools and one special education school..." - Consider adding a comma between schools and including, and between schools and "and". Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:30, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...including Early Childhood Family Education, GED Diploma, language programs and various learning opportunities..." - Consider adding a comma after programs. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:30, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Transportation
- "Residents utilize Interstate 35E running north-south, and Interstate 94 running east-west." - Consider removing the comma. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "...but will not have its own line, the Central Line along University Avenue until 2014." - Consider adding a comma after Avenue. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Jesse Ventura brought up the city's roadways during an appearance on the Late Show with David Letterman while Governor of Minnesota.[115]" This sentence doesn't make sense. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "Some of the city road design is the result of the..." Consider replacing city with city's. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The airport serves three international, twelve domestic, seven charter and four regional carriers[123]..." - Consider adding a comma after charter. Done BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "The airport, also known as Holman Field, is a reliever airport, run by the Metropolitan Airports Commission." - Consider removing the comma after the second use of airport. Hallelujah BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 06:45, 19 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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