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'''Reviewer:''' [[User:Yellow Evan|Yellow Evan]] ([[User talk:Yellow Evan|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Yellow Evan|contribs]]) 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
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Per request, I am reviewing this article. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
Per request, I am reviewing this article. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*"Hurricane Alma had the latest development of the first storm since 1941." what kind of opener is this? Something does not seem grammatically correct here. I'd change "had" to "saw" here personally. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*"Hurricane Alma had the latest development of the first storm since 1941." what kind of opener is this? Something does not seem grammatically correct here. I'd change "had" to "saw" here personally. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*", one of which struck a house and a parked car." and " smashed many cabin cruisers and smaller vessels against the rocks" should be cut from the lead as IMO it goes too indepth. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]]
*", one of which struck a house and a parked car." and " smashed many cabin cruisers and smaller vessels against the rocks" should be cut from the lead as IMO it goes too indepth. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]]
*"and at 1200 UTC on August 26, a tropical depression developed offshore southeast Florida." "southeast Florida" to "southeastern Florida coast". [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*"and at 1200 UTC on August 26, a tropical depression developed offshore southeast Florida." "southeast Florida" to "southeastern Florida coast". [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*"At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane; the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h) at this time." to "At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane. Meanwhile, the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h)." [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*"At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane; the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h) at this time." to "At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane. Meanwhile, the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h)." [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*""report.[2]" should be plural" [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]]
*""report.[2]" should be plural" [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]]
*At the end of the impact section: "in coastal sections of the state.[10]" "in" to "along" as you use "in" too much " [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*At the end of the impact section: "in coastal sections of the state.[10]" "in" to "along" as you use "in" too much " [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*Ref 10 should be in cite report, not web. It's dumb, I know. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<font color="#66666"><sup>''P''acific</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<font color="#66666"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></font>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
*Ref 10 should be in cite report, not web. It's dumb, I know. [[User:Yellow Evan|Y]][[User talk:Yellow Evan|E]] [[2012 PHS|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''P''acific</sup></span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Yellow_Evan|<span style="color:#666660;"><sup>''H''urricane</sup></span>]] 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
:*Alright, I addressed all of the above comments. Thanks for the review, YE.--[[User:12george1|12george1]] ([[User talk:12george1|talk]]) 06:23, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
:*Alright, I addressed all of the above comments. Thanks for the review, YE.--[[User:12george1|12george1]] ([[User talk:12george1|talk]]) 06:23, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC) Per request, I am reviewing this article. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Hurricane Alma had the latest development of the first storm since 1941." what kind of opener is this? Something does not seem grammatically correct here. I'd change "had" to "saw" here personally. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • ", one of which struck a house and a parked car." and " smashed many cabin cruisers and smaller vessels against the rocks" should be cut from the lead as IMO it goes too indepth. YE Pacific Hurricane
  • "and at 1200 UTC on August 26, a tropical depression developed offshore southeast Florida." "southeast Florida" to "southeastern Florida coast". YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane; the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h) at this time." to "At 0600 UTC on August 29, Alma strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane. Meanwhile, the storm also attained its maximum sustained wind speed of 100 mph (155 km/h)." YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""report.[2]" should be plural" YE Pacific Hurricane
  • At the end of the impact section: "in coastal sections of the state.[10]" "in" to "along" as you use "in" too much " YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 10 should be in cite report, not web. It's dumb, I know. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:17, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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