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'''Reviewer:''' [[User:Ppt91|Ppt91]] ([[User talk:Ppt91|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Ppt91|contribs]]) 18:46, 20 June 2023 (UTC) |
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⚫ | Very excited to start this review of another valuable contribution by the nominator. From my first impressions, the article is very well written (which is to be expected from this author), makes extensive use of reliable scholarship, and covers the subject in great (but not excessive) detail. The visual material is also really helpful. I don't anticipate major edits, and my comments will likely focus on organization and structure, which I think can be improved somewhat to make the article a bit more accessible to a non-specialist reader. I plan to have the first batch of my comments by tomorrow if not earlier and I am looking forward to working together! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 18:46, 20 June 2023 (UTC) |
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:::@[[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] It looks like we're done! Thanks so much for your hard work. The only item that remains is "Duchy of Athens could briefly describe the geographical/political context for unfamiliar readers", which does not stand in the way of GA and just a suggestion which you may consider adding later on. As for my review, this is an excellent article and congratulations on another valuable contribution in your area of expertise! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 14:28, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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⚫ | Very excited to start this review of another valuable contribution by the nominator. From my first impressions, the article is very well written (which is to be expected from this author), makes extensive use of reliable scholarship, and covers the subject in great (but not excessive) detail. The visual material is also really helpful. I don't anticipate major edits, and my comments will likely focus on organization and structure, which I think can be improved somewhat to make the article a bit more accessible to a non-specialist reader. I plan to have the first batch of my comments by tomorrow if not earlier and I am looking forward to working together! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 18:46, 20 June 2023 (UTC) |
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:@[[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] Checking in, as I know you have been busy with other work. It looks like only a few things left here, but please let me know if you have any questions or if there is anything I can do to facilitate the process. I'll look forward to passing it whenever you're ready. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 18:00, 1 July 2023 (UTC) |
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::Thanks for the check-in: I got back last night, and will have some time later on to look at this. Expecting to be able to give a fairly straightforward "yes, done" to all that remains. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 06:39, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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===General comments=== |
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Regarding structure of the article, I am wondering whether the nominator would be willing to adjust/edit some of the sections. It might be a good idea to include '''Date''', '''Inscription''', and '''Construction '''into one large section titled '''History '''with subsections '''Dating''', '''Construction''', and '''Inscription'''. That way, the reader will be able to navigate the content more easily while the modern content of '''Excavation '''can remain as is. Below is my suggestion for content organization as bullet points. I am open to other ideas, but I would like to see content moved around for more clarity. |
Regarding structure of the article, I am wondering whether the nominator would be willing to adjust/edit some of the sections. It might be a good idea to include '''Date''', '''Inscription''', and '''Construction '''into one large section titled '''History '''with subsections '''Dating''', '''Construction''', and '''Inscription'''. That way, the reader will be able to navigate the content more easily while the modern content of '''Excavation '''can remain as is. Below is my suggestion for content organization as bullet points. I am open to other ideas, but I would like to see content moved around for more clarity. |
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* BCE and CE should be linked |
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** I think that would go against [[MOS:OVERLINK]], since those are both commonly-understood terms: it's certainly unusual across Wikipedia (by way of comparison, see [[Archimedes]] and [[Chariot Racing]], two randomly-picked Greece FAs: neither does it). [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 19:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
** I think that would go against [[MOS:OVERLINK]], since those are both commonly-understood terms: it's certainly unusual across Wikipedia (by way of comparison, see [[Archimedes]] and [[Chariot Racing]], two randomly-picked Greece FAs: neither does it). [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 19:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* Link choregos in quote; it’s separate from the monument already linked [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 15:00, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
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⚫ | *:* Generally re linking, a few words of explanation. One, I am aware of [[MOS:OVERLINK]], which I think I've mentioned a few times before, including my propensity to link more than generally advised. However, I find that specific guidance to be quite limiting. Its definition of "general terms" is very expansive and has resulted, at least from my GAR experience, in underlinking of phrases that a reader can find very helpful. In particular, the examples listed there to me seem contrary the following guidance {{tq|A good question to ask yourself is whether reading the article you're about to link to would help someone understand the article you are linking from.}} On the one hand, we're encouraged to break the rules if it makes en-wiki better, but on the other, everyone seems to be self-policing the linking guidance to a point where it has a detrimental effect on the (particularly unfamiliar) reader. And the evidence used support the rule relies on a single study from 2016 which is hardly a sampling sufficient enough to make a unilateral judgment regarding the ways in which people navigate en-wiki. I think it is perfectly fine to link BCE or CE to further WP's educational mission and I generally think the same for every term I include in this review. Of course, if you're strongly opposed based on your own judgement of the term's potential usefulness, I will be happy to concur, but I would also appreciate it if we could avoid referencing [[MOS:OVERLINK]] policy for every link suggestion I make in the review moving forward. |
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⚫ | *::* I do see your point. There's an accessibility trade-off in adding links: firstly, creating a mosaic effect of black and blue text (or whatever alternative a given user's browser might create) compromises readability, particularly for viewers with certain conditions and visual impairments. There's also a clarity trade-off: we tell readers that we've linked things which will have some level of value to them if they click on them: the lower we make that threshold of value, the less confident they will be that clicking on the link is worth their time, and it becomes harder for them to tell really useful links from those that are less so. As you point out, nobody's under any obligation to follow practically any of the site's guidelines, but it's generally a good udea to respect [[WP:CONLEVEL|large-scale community consensus where it exists]]. Please do point out if you think there are any other cases which would be worth a link. I'm happy to handle them case by case, though I'll be quite open and say that I think [[WP:OVERLINK]] is worth following because it's generally good sense, not simply because it's a guideline. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 17:01, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:::Thank you for your thoughtful response. I guess my worry is with the consensus which in this case seems to me a bit outdated (again, relying on a single study from 2016) and that [[WP:CCC]] may be in order. But that's not something we can, unfortunately, address here. In any case, I think we managed found a pretty good middle ground. :) [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:15, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* “Its construction marked the beginning of a new phase in the Acropolis's use, in which it came to be seen more as a potential defensive position than in the religious terms that had marked its use in the Classical period.” Might be a good idea to split into two sentences for clarity |
* “Its construction marked the beginning of a new phase in the Acropolis's use, in which it came to be seen more as a potential defensive position than in the religious terms that had marked its use in the Classical period.” Might be a good idea to split into two sentences for clarity |
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** Possibly, though the 'obvious' fix - "Its construction marked the beginning of a new phase in the Acropolis's use. In this phase, the Acropolis came to be seen more as a potential defensive position than in the religious terms that had marked its use in the Classical period" - introduces a new problem of being repetitious. Did you have a particular formulation in mind? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 19:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
** Possibly, though the 'obvious' fix - "Its construction marked the beginning of a new phase in the Acropolis's use. In this phase, the Acropolis came to be seen more as a potential defensive position than in the religious terms that had marked its use in the Classical period" - introduces a new problem of being repetitious. Did you have a particular formulation in mind? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 19:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
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** The date of construction (which is relevant here) is (now) mentioned; the date of demolition is more controversial and is discussed under the Beulé Gate's construction, to which it's most relevant. In terms of context, is there something particular you had in mind that would be relevant to this monument, rather than the 'original' Choragic one?? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 20:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
** The date of construction (which is relevant here) is (now) mentioned; the date of demolition is more controversial and is discussed under the Beulé Gate's construction, to which it's most relevant. In terms of context, is there something particular you had in mind that would be relevant to this monument, rather than the 'original' Choragic one?? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 20:43, 22 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Further to this, I've added a little bit as to what the original monument looked like: it's helpful to be clear that it ''wasn't'' a gate, I think. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 17:02, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
*:Further to this, I've added a little bit as to what the original monument looked like: it's helpful to be clear that it ''wasn't'' a gate, I think. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 17:02, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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⚫ | *:* Generally re linking, a few words of explanation. One, I am aware of [[MOS:OVERLINK]], which I think I've mentioned a few times before, including my propensity to link more than generally advised. However, I find that specific guidance to be quite limiting. Its definition of "general terms" is very expansive and has resulted, at least from my GAR experience, in underlinking of phrases that a reader can find very helpful. In particular, the examples listed there to me seem contrary the following guidance {{tq|A good question to ask yourself is whether reading the article you're about to link to would help someone understand the article you are linking from.}} On the one hand, we're encouraged to break the rules if it makes en-wiki better, but on the other, everyone seems to be self-policing the linking guidance to a point where it has a detrimental effect on the (particularly unfamiliar) reader. And the evidence used support the rule relies on a single study from 2016 which is hardly a sampling sufficient enough to make a unilateral judgment regarding the ways in which people navigate en-wiki. I think it is perfectly fine to link BCE or CE to further WP's educational mission and I generally think the same for every term I include in this review. Of course, if you're strongly opposed based on your own judgement of the term's potential usefulness, I will be happy to concur, but I would also appreciate it if we could avoid referencing [[MOS:OVERLINK]] policy for every link suggestion I make in the review moving forward. |
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⚫ | *::* I do see your point. There's an accessibility trade-off in adding links: firstly, creating a mosaic effect of black and blue text (or whatever alternative a given user's browser might create) compromises readability, particularly for viewers with certain conditions and visual impairments. There's also a clarity trade-off: we tell readers that we've linked things which will have some level of value to them if they click on them: the lower we make that threshold of value, the less confident they will be that clicking on the link is worth their time, and it becomes harder for them to tell really useful links from those that are less so. As you point out, nobody's under any obligation to follow practically any of the site's guidelines, but it's generally a good udea to respect [[WP:CONLEVEL|large-scale community consensus where it exists]]. Please do point out if you think there are any other cases which would be worth a link. I'm happy to handle them case by case, though I'll be quite open and say that I think [[WP:OVERLINK]] is worth following because it's generally good sense, not simply because it's a guideline. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 17:01, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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More to come soon. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 19:33, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
More to come soon. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 19:33, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* Great job summarizing all of the scholarship here. I wonder, is it possible to mention current scholarly consensus at the outset? Infobox mentions 3rd to 4th c. I recognize it might be challenging, but I was thinking of a sentence along the lines of "Contemporary scholars generally agree that the gate was originally constructed in..." If not something you're comfortable with or you think it's an oversimplification, no pressure to add. |
* Great job summarizing all of the scholarship here. I wonder, is it possible to mention current scholarly consensus at the outset? Infobox mentions 3rd to 4th c. I recognize it might be challenging, but I was thinking of a sentence along the lines of "Contemporary scholars generally agree that the gate was originally constructed in..." If not something you're comfortable with or you think it's an oversimplification, no pressure to add. |
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** I'm not sure there really ''is'' much of one, unfortunately, beyond Graindor's conclusion that it's late Roman: the issue really turns on whether you link the Marcellinus inscription to the gate. To give a scholarly consensus, we'd need a secondary source saying what that consensus was (not simply a preponderance of sources taking one side), and I haven't seen that yet. I think the issue is still a bit too live. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 09:09, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* I think you should briefly identify when and where the archaeologists mentioned here lived and worked, "nineteenth-century French..." and so on |
* I think you should briefly identify when and where the archaeologists mentioned here lived and worked, "nineteenth-century French..." and so on |
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** They all have a brief introduction; the main reason I haven't introduced Beulé more fully is that he gets more biography around the excavation (which is when it really helps the reader to know what he's doing in Athens and who his supporters are), but he does get "the gate's discoverer". I think "The gate's discoverer, the French archaeologist..." would be inelegant and a little excessive at this point: it's only necessary at this point to introduce what he's doing in this story. Generally speaking, it's good for clarity if these introductions keep to around three words or so. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 09:09, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* {{tq|An inscription found on a stone later reused in the Ottoman fortifications of the Acropolis preserves an inscription commemorating Flavius Septimius Marcellinus for having constructed "the gateway to the Acropolis, from his own resources."}} This sentence is a bit clunky and I think a repetition might have sneaked in. Also, period should be outside of the quotation mark (as much as that irks and confuses me on daily basis), i.e. <u>from his own resources".</u> |
* {{tq|An inscription found on a stone later reused in the Ottoman fortifications of the Acropolis preserves an inscription commemorating Flavius Septimius Marcellinus for having constructed "the gateway to the Acropolis, from his own resources."}} This sentence is a bit clunky and I think a repetition might have sneaked in. Also, period should be outside of the quotation mark (as much as that irks and confuses me on daily basis), i.e. <u>from his own resources".</u> |
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** It goes inside the quotation when the quotation is itself a complete sentence, which is the case here, or outside if it's not: see [[MOS:LQUOTE]] for a fuller explanation. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 20:26, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
** It goes inside the quotation when the quotation is itself a complete sentence, which is the case here, or outside if it's not: see [[MOS:LQUOTE]] for a fuller explanation. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 20:26, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:::Glad we figured it out. Again, I am not a fan of this policy, so sorry if that seemed pesky. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 20:53, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
*:::Glad we figured it out. Again, I am not a fan of this policy, so sorry if that seemed pesky. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 20:53, 23 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* might say a few more words about Panhellenic games? |
* might say a few more words about Panhellenic games? |
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** Done: it turns out that it's a little more complicated than I thought, so I've put the key info in body text and added a footnote for the minutiae. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 08:26, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* Acropole - L'occupation française à Athènes (16-27 juin 1917) - Athènes - Médiathèque de l'architecture et du patrimoine - APOR104697.jpg does not mention that it is in the public domain; it includes Licence Ouverte 1.0, but I am a bit unclear on the original source (Médiathèque de l'architecture et du patrimoine) because it was uploaded by a private user and not through an official GLAM collaboration with the institution; might be a good idea to include public domain tags |
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** It's a French government project: [https://www.culture.gouv.fr/Mentions-legales everything on that site is licensed under CC 3.0]. As such, anyone can upload it anywhere: it doesn't have to be put here by the institution. The Commons page previously gave the licence as 4.0; I've now corrected it to 3.0. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* all other images look fine |
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* repetition in {{tq|The existence of a lower route to the Propylaia had become clear during the operations to clear and repair the monuments of the Acropolis following the end of the Greek War of Independence in 1829.}} |
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** I'm not seeing the repetition, I'm afraid? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Meant in "clear" being used twice, albeit for different reasons. Can we substitute the verb "clear" for another one? [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:43, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*::Aha: yes, changed to ''evident''. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:49, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* the next sentence sounds a bit clunky; I am also not sure using past perfect and past simple together works so well in this case; maybe {{tq|In 1846, the French architect and archaeologist Auguste Titeux [fr] began working on revealing the staircase leading up to it from the Beulé Gate, even though archaeologists did not generally acknowledge the existence of a second gateway.}}; feel free to suggest your own alternative to clarify the original sentence |
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** Agreed on the tenses; I've made an edit. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* {{tq|modern structures}} are these discussed earlier? I recall medieval, but am having trouble remembering which ones where the modern structures |
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** I suppose you could count the Ottoman bastion at the Temple of Athena Nike, but otherwise they haven't, as our account more-or-less stopped in the medieval period. People carried on building on the Acropolis, but not really on the gate. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* what are your thoughts on mentioning that it was Plutarch who claimed Mnesikles was the architect of the Propylaia? Also, is it redundant to mention Mnesikles was an Athenian architect? Again, I am intentionally asking what might seem like simplistic questions imagining myself as an uninformed reader (which is not to say I am a specialist, either, and the seminar I took on classical Greek and Roman art and architecture, while fascinating, was possibly the most challenging one in all of my grad school coursework...) |
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** That would seem like adding unnecessary doubt: Plutarch might be the original source, but the name of Mnesikles is pretty universally attached to the monument. He's already introduced as "the architect of the Propylaia": I think "the Athenian architect of the Propylaia" would be clunky and potentially ambiguous (does it imply the existence of a non-Athenian architect of the Propylaia?). [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Got it! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:44, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* I think "approval" might sound better than "blessing" unless Pittakis did not have actual authority here? |
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** The question of authority is... complicated... in this period. Pittakis probably had more authority than anyone else, but it's a running theme of Greek archaeology into the 20th century that nobody's really sure exactly who has the final say on what can be done, or whose permission needs to be sought before doing something radical. To me, "approval" implies something a bit more formal and bureaucratic than we can reconstruct from the sources, and Pittakis was certainly never one for bureaucracy. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:{{tq|that nobody's really sure exactly who has the final say on what can be done, or whose permission needs to be sought before doing something radical}} is this something worth mentioning in the article? Sounds like an interesting aspect of the whole process. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:45, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*::I'd struggle to find it phrased so starkly in a source, unfortunately. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:48, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:::No worries and certainly not required for GA! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:53, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* looks like "fortified wall" is only used once so it might be a good idea to link it to "Defensive wall" |
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** I'm not sure this is quite what that article is about: it seems to specifically focus on walls ''around'' cities or settlements, whereas this was a wall ''within'' one. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Fair! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:45, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* should the name be mentioned for "Greek Minister for War"? |
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** I'm not totally sure who it was, unfortunately! The name isn't mentioned in the source, and the composition of the Greek government in this period is often a bit murky. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) |
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* can we use a direct quote for {{tq|of wanting to blow up everything on the Acropolis}}? |
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** Unfortunately not, and it's only attributed in the source to "a newspaper": given that the source is in French and finding Greek newspapers from this period is a tricky business, I wouldn't be confident of tracking down the original. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* should be {{tq|of archaeology".}} |
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** Quite right; corrected. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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Spot checks next and then I'll think we'll close to being done! :) [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:06, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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===Spot checks=== |
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* no issues with Copyright according to Earwig; I have no reason to doubt the accuracy and reliability of used sources based on the consistently high quality of the nominator's work, but I don't have access to scholarly publications used in the article and I'd like to see support for the following in order to satisfy GAR guidelines |
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* footnote 15 {{tq|An inscription found on a stone later reused in the Ottoman fortifications of the Acropolis preserves an inscription commemorating Flavius Septimius Marcellinus for having constructed "the gateway to the Acropolis from his own resources".}} |
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* footnote 29 {{tq|Hurwit has called the construction of the gate a "turning point" in the Acropolis's history, suggesting that it represented a renewed emphasis on the Acropolis's role as a strategic fortification rather than as a religious sanctuary — making the site now "a fortress with temples".}} |
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* footnote 46 {{tq|The discovery of the gate prompted scholarly celebration in France, and was reported with enthusiasm in the French press. The French writer and philhellene Jean Baelan has written that his work turned Beulé into "the standard-bearer for national honour in the field of archaeology."}} |
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** ''Beulé était devenu le porte-drapeau de l'honneur national dans le domaine de l'archéologie'' [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:52, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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===Construction=== |
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* link suggestions: spring, siege, in situ |
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** Done for ''in situ'', as it has a specialist meaning in archaeology. I think the others are too everyday - or, put another way, too undifferentiated from the words we're not going to link in the article - to justify a link; the costs outweigh the benefits to me. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 18:07, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Great! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:17, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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* if possible to say more about the geisa, that I think would be quite helpful |
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** Do you mean to explain what they are? I think this is an example where the technical term is so specific that explaining it isn't worth the clunkiness: I think it's clear enough in context that we're talking about parts of the building, but glossing as "the parts of the entablature that project out on the top of the frieze" would be about the best I can do, and I think that would simply be explaining the obscure with the obscure. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 08:48, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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* more political context would also be helpful for Frankish rulers |
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** Just added a bit on the Duchy and its rulers: the actual chain of ownership is pretty complicated (it basically goes back and forth between various western European aristocrats, kings and mercenary companies), but I don't think it's particularly important here. |
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* any specific reason as to why the nationalities of Tasos Tanoulas and Jeffrey M. Hurwit are excluded? |
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** I've put them in; there's no compelling reason to include them either, but it's a bit odd to establish a pattern for introductions and then break it. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 18:07, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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Last section coming soon. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 16:49, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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===Excavation=== |
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* could we add a few more words of explanation to the French School of Athens; looking at the non-referenced article, I see it being one of the seventeen foreign archaeological institutes in the city and the oldest foreign institute in Athens; is that correct? |
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** Done. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 10:45, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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* when did the king and queen visit? |
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** After the discovery, but the source isn't specific. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:40, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*:Got it. Was his rise to fame, so to speak, also bolstered by their visit? Could we say "Following the discovery, the site ..., and Beulé's excavation helped secure his scholarly reputation."? [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:48, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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*::Not from the source we have, unfortunately. I'll have a look around and see if any other sources explicitly make the connection, and edit that in if so. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 06:40, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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* overall, I wonder if there is more to be said about the political relationship between France and Greece at that time? It seems that the alliance with the Great Powers might be worth mentioning given the extent of French coverage and scholarly celebration you describe here; curious to hear your thoughts on this |
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** I think the bit added on the French school probably now covers this, as it also foreshadows how the French were keen to get a 'win' over the British. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 10:45, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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** Normally, the idea of doing these spot-checks is to ask for a direct quotation of material summarised or paraphrased: the direct quotations are already there, so I'm not sure what you're asking for with the later two of these. I've put in the French original for Baelan, if that's helpful? [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:52, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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**:@[[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] Of course, I was clearly rushing. I had these in a separate document to collect all possible issues with {{tq|".}} (i.e. quotations and periods edits) throughout the article and erroneously copy-pasted them here without double checking. Below are the ones I wanted to ask about. (I will count the French quote from above as one, so only including two more.) |
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**:* footnote 3 {{tq|According to the Greek archaeologist Tasos Tanoulas, part of the strategic rationale behind the gate's construction was to safeguard the approach leading to the klepsydra, a spring on the Acropolis which provided it with a safe supply of water in case of siege.}} |
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**:** "Tanoulas sees the fortification of the Klepsydra spring as a key reason to take such concern for the western approach to the Acropolis". [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 11:03, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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**:* footnote 26 {{tq|The American archaeologist and philologist Walter Miller suggested in 1893 that the gate may have been built to replace an older, now-lost gateway, which he hypothesised would have been less strongly fortified.}} [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 22:08, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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**:** "Beulé's gate is, therefore, a later and probably stronger substitute for a gate that had been there before". [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 11:03, 2 July 2023 (UTC) |
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:@[[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] I think that is it on my end. I'll put the review on hold just to give you time, but happy finalize the process as soon as you're ready. Once I have responses to the last few sections, your reply to the image question, and the selected spot checks, we should be done! [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:30, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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::Thanks - I'll be away from tomorrow, I'm afraid, for most of next week. I should be able to get back to it next weekend, if you're happy to forbear for that long. [[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] ([[User talk:UndercoverClassicist|talk]]) 21:41, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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:::@[[User:UndercoverClassicist|UndercoverClassicist]] Totally happy to wait, but it seems like you've already responded to a lot of my most recent comments, so if you have the energy and time for what remains, I see no issues with finishing up as soon as today. [[User:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:DimGray"><span style="font-family:Rockwell;font-weight:bold;color:White;">Ppt91</span></span>]][[User talk:Ppt91|<span style="background-color:White"><span style="color:DimGray;"><sup>talk</sup></span></span>]] 21:51, 24 June 2023 (UTC) |
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- @UndercoverClassicist It looks like we're done! Thanks so much for your hard work. The only item that remains is "Duchy of Athens could briefly describe the geographical/political context for unfamiliar readers", which does not stand in the way of GA and just a suggestion which you may consider adding later on. As for my review, this is an excellent article and congratulations on another valuable contribution in your area of expertise! Ppt91talk 14:28, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
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Very excited to start this review of another valuable contribution by the nominator. From my first impressions, the article is very well written (which is to be expected from this author), makes extensive use of reliable scholarship, and covers the subject in great (but not excessive) detail. The visual material is also really helpful. I don't anticipate major edits, and my comments will likely focus on organization and structure, which I think can be improved somewhat to make the article a bit more accessible to a non-specialist reader. I plan to have the first batch of my comments by tomorrow if not earlier and I am looking forward to working together! Ppt91talk 18:46, 20 June 2023 (UTC)
General comments[edit]Regarding structure of the article, I am wondering whether the nominator would be willing to adjust/edit some of the sections. It might be a good idea to include Date, Inscription, and Construction into one large section titled History with subsections Dating, Construction, and Inscription. That way, the reader will be able to navigate the content more easily while the modern content of Excavation can remain as is. Below is my suggestion for content organization as bullet points. I am open to other ideas, but I would like to see content moved around for more clarity.
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More to come soon. Ppt91talk 19:33, 23 June 2023 (UTC) Date[edit]
Ppt91talk 20:03, 23 June 2023 (UTC) Images[edit]
Spot checks next and then I'll think we'll close to being done! :) Ppt91talk 21:06, 24 June 2023 (UTC) Spot checks[edit]
Ppt91talk 21:26, 24 June 2023 (UTC) Construction[edit]
Last section coming soon. Ppt91talk 16:49, 24 June 2023 (UTC) Excavation[edit]
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