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Hello {{u|APK}} and {{u|FuzzyMagma}}, your work on this GA is exceptional for any modern artist born in Sudan. I don't think we have similar ones with a GA status, and one other artist that would deserve this IMHO is [[Ibrahim El-Salahi]]. I have tried in the past to ce his bio, but am not satisfied so far. Somehow the several editors who have been working on it have created a text that is not nearly as coherent as this one on Mohammad Omer Khalil. So if you have time and interest in El-Salahi to improve it to GA status, that would be a big service to anyone interested in his work and modern art by Sudanese painters. Cheers, [[User:Munfarid1|Munfarid1]] ([[User talk:Munfarid1|talk]]) 19:57, 7 December 2024 (UTC) |
Hello {{u|APK}} and {{u|FuzzyMagma}}, your work on this GA is exceptional for any modern artist born in Sudan. I don't think we have similar ones with a GA status, and one other artist that would deserve this IMHO is [[Ibrahim El-Salahi]]. I have tried in the past to ce his bio, but am not satisfied so far. Somehow the several editors who have been working on it have created a text that is not nearly as coherent as this one on Mohammad Omer Khalil. So if you have time and interest in El-Salahi to improve it to GA status, that would be a big service to anyone interested in his work and modern art by Sudanese painters. Cheers, [[User:Munfarid1|Munfarid1]] ([[User talk:Munfarid1|talk]]) 19:57, 7 December 2024 (UTC) |
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:{{u|Munfarid1}}, thank you for the kind words. I was introduced to Ibrahim El-Salahi at the same place where I first saw Khalil's work, at the ''African Modernism in America'' exhibition mentioned in this article. [[:File:Vision of the Tomb, 1965, Ibrahim El-Salahi at Phillips 2023.jpeg|This]] is the one I saw. If I have time, I'll try to look over his article at some point. There are some additional names I mentioned [[Wikipedia talk:WikiProject African diaspora/Archive 6#Article suggestions|here]] if you're familiar with their work and want to create an article. I started four. [[User:APK|APK<span style="display:inline-block;transform:rotate(30deg)"> <span style="color: #000080;">'''hi :-)'''</span></span>]] ([[User talk:APK|<span style="color:#1a1a1a">talk</span>]]) 05:25, 8 December 2024 (UTC) |
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Nominator: APK (talk · contribs) 04:41, 24 November 2024 (UTC)
- I added some comments below. almost there FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:59, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: FuzzyMagma (talk · contribs) 09:50, 29 November 2024 (UTC)
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Comment: 27.5% similarity with this source but mainly for names
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[edit]- short description, better be "Sudanese visual artist (born 1936)"
- you can add his Arabic name "محمد عمر خليل", I linked the Arabic page now to this article at Wikidata. use the template Langx
- his date of birth can be expanded to the 8 January 1936 from this source
- consider adding an infobox and add Khalil website
- " ... a Sudanese-born artist", the link is to "Sundanese" (Indonesia) change it to "Sudanese".
- link "School of Fine and Applied Arts" to College of Fine and Applied Art (Khartoum), and the category Category:College of Fine and Applied Art (Khartoum) alumni.
- "He continued his studies in mosaics at the Academy of Fine Arts.", he attended two Academies of fine arts so better rephrase for clarity.
- " .. , especially in North American and Europe." change it to ", especially in North America"
Done APK hi :-) (talk) 04:44, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
Biography
[edit]- "in 1936 in the Burri Almahas neighborhood", remove the "the" before the name of the place. It is more like saying "the Manhattan"
- link Khartoum's School of Fine and Applied Arts to College of Fine and Applied Art (Khartoum)
- link "Sudanese Ministry of Education" to Ministry of Education (Sudan)
- Khartoum Technical Institute in Sudan is today known as the Sudan University of Science and Technology
- " .. his time spent in Italy and New York City has greatly influenced his works", change to "have greatly influenced"
- link "The New School", "Tacoma Art Museum"
- " .. School in 1981, New York City's Limited Art Editions in 1984" change to "in 1981, and New York City's"
- " .. Osaka, where he won bronze prize" change to "the or a bronze prize"
- you can add he also won the Nile Award for Arab Innovators in 2019, according to this source (in Arabic).
Done APK hi :-) (talk) 04:44, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
Selected works
[edit]- It would be better to put the art work at the 1960s to 1980s section to show an example of his work at that period.
- add the template "Authority control" at the end to retrieve information from Wikidata.
Done APK hi :-) (talk) 04:44, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
Verification and spot checks
[edit]- ref 1 verified
- ref 2 verified
- ref 3 looks like a self written CV (WP:PRIMARY verging on being WP:BLPSPS). In this instance it may be acceptable but can you tell me why you think it should be considered with emphasis on reliability? FuzzyMagma (talk) 21:00, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
- I see your concern, but in this case, the source provides valuable info not found elsewhere and it's nothing that is controversial. APK hi :-) (talk) 04:44, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
- source 4 does not support this sentence “During the rest of the decade, Khalil's work was shown in Israel, Iraq, the United Kingdom, and Norway.”FuzzyMagma (talk) 07:52, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
- Fixed, not sure how I screwed that one up. APK hi :-) (talk) 08:04, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
- ref 9 verified
- ref 10 verified
Congrats on this GA!
[edit]Hello APK and FuzzyMagma, your work on this GA is exceptional for any modern artist born in Sudan. I don't think we have similar ones with a GA status, and one other artist that would deserve this IMHO is Ibrahim El-Salahi. I have tried in the past to ce his bio, but am not satisfied so far. Somehow the several editors who have been working on it have created a text that is not nearly as coherent as this one on Mohammad Omer Khalil. So if you have time and interest in El-Salahi to improve it to GA status, that would be a big service to anyone interested in his work and modern art by Sudanese painters. Cheers, Munfarid1 (talk) 19:57, 7 December 2024 (UTC)
- Munfarid1, thank you for the kind words. I was introduced to Ibrahim El-Salahi at the same place where I first saw Khalil's work, at the African Modernism in America exhibition mentioned in this article. This is the one I saw. If I have time, I'll try to look over his article at some point. There are some additional names I mentioned here if you're familiar with their work and want to create an article. I started four. APK hi :-) (talk) 05:25, 8 December 2024 (UTC)
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