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**"Sponsorship of legislation section is only one sentence. It should be merged somewhere else or expanded a bit." |
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the President on the day before the war. Another link might be provided showing that Kerry, along with other Democratic Primary Candidates promised to not to criticise the President during the War." |
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Latest revision as of 03:34, 21 October 2005
- Develop 2004 Election section
- Extend "Senate" section
- Comments from Peer Review:
- "Overall it faces a difficulty of covering a bit too much of the less important topic. For example the campaigning for congress section is very detailed considering he lost and in comparison to his successful bids for Lt Gov. and Senate getting only a few sentences. The campaigning for congress section is also difficult to understand and follow for anyone not already familiar with the details. Maybe it should be in news style to give the important details up front."
- "Way too many one sentence paragraphs."
- "Sponsorship of legislation section is only one sentence. It should be merged somewhere else or expanded a bit."