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I shall take a look at this article to spot any errors to be resolved.
I shall take a look at this article to spot any errors to be resolved.

===Plot===
*"...world of Far Eden as Joule Adams (Erika Soto)..." Source?
::{{done}}
*"...and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)..." Source?
::Removed.
*"...Joule Adams (Erika Soto), one of the colonists, and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)..." could be interpreted as {{dark red|...Joule Adams (Erika Soto), her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow), and one of the colonists...}}. I suggest changing the sentence into "{{green|...one of the colonists Joule Adams (Erika Soto) and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)...}}".
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|...reactivate a terraforming pylon she learns has been offline...}} > {{green|...reactivate a terraforming pylon '''that''' she learns has been offline...}}
::{{done}}
*"On the order of Victor (Alex Fernandez)..." Source?
::Removed.
*"{{dark red|...they '''get''' agitated.}} > {{green|...they '''become''' agitated.}}
::{{done}}
*"...Kai Brehn (Harry Shum)..." Source?
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|Corebot Duncan enters, lamenting the death of his human companion and...}}" > "{{green|Corebot Duncan enters, lamenting the death of his human companion''',''' and...}}"
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|are long gone''';''' having been destroyed by Victor.}}" > "{{green|are long gone''',''' having been destroyed by Victor.}}"
::{{done}}

===Development===
*David Dedeine, Scott Green, Takuya Shiraiwa, Eric Weiss, Berenger Fish, Masahiro Yasuma, Kevin Choteau, Jack Mathews <s>(possible misspelling of "Matthews")</s>, Marc-Antoine Bernard-Brunel, Todd Keller, Shinsuke Komaki, and Patrice Bourroncle are only talked about in the main infobox, rather than both that and in the "Development" section.
::Not misspelling. These names come from the closing credits.
:::Can you use [[Template:Cite video game]] in the infobox? [[User:Gamingforfun365|<span style="color:yellow"><s><span style="color:#185618">Gamingforfun</span></s></span><sup><u><span style="color:red">3</span><span style="color:green">6</span><span style="color:blue">5</span></u></sup>]] [[User talk:Gamingforfun365|(<u>talk</u>)]] 02:10, 13 December 2016 (UTC)
::::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|...its animation state machine system Mecanim for...}}" > "{{green|...its animation state machine system''',''' Mecanim''',''' for...}}"
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|...for "The Legend of Zelda: Symphony of the Goddesses"...}}" > {{green|for ''The Legend of Zelda: Symphony of the Goddesses''...}}"
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|...September 13, 2016 in...}}" > "{{green|...September 13, 2016''',''' in...}}"
::{{done}}
*"{{dark red|...September 27, 2016 by...}}" > "{{green|...September 27, 2016''',''' by ...}}"
::{{done}}


===Reception===
===Reception===
*I find the section to be using a lot of quotations. I suggest paraphrasing some parts of it.
*I find the section to be using a lot of quotations. I suggest paraphrasing some parts of it.
::{{done}}
*Any sales information to cover as well?
*Any sales information to cover as well?
::Microsoft doesn't release sales information.
::Microsoft doesn't release sales information.
*There are reviews that can be added to the "Reception" section; they include [http://www.ign.com/articles/2016/09/13/recore-review IGN's review], [http://venturebeat.com/2016/10/09/recore-review/ VentureBeat's review], [https://www.gamestm.co.uk/reviews/recore-review/ GamesTM's review], [http://www.hardcoregamer.com/2016/09/12/review-recore/225487/ Hardcore Gamer's review], [http://www.gameinformer.com/games/recore/b/xboxone/archive/2016/09/14/recore-review-game-informer-xbox-one.aspx Game Informer's review], [http://www.egmnow.com/articles/reviews/recore-review/ EGM's review], [http://www.shacknews.com/article/96823/recore-review-auto-pilot Shacknews' review], [http://www.slantmagazine.com/games/review/recore Slant Magazine's review], and [http://metro.co.uk/2016/09/13/recore-review-loading-now-6124744/ Metro's review]. Now, (EDIT: I know what you may be thinking: that) that is a lot of reviews in my opinion, but, at least, a few of the given sources (such as IGN and EGM) would do.
::{{ping|User:Gamingforfun365}} I have to tell you. I don't think any more review summaries are going to add anything. I'm trying to write the one from EGM and it contains exactly the same praises and criticisms currently cited in the section. The case is the same for IGN. It has already been established what critics think of the game. [[User:Cognissonance|Cognissonance]] ([[User talk:Cognissonance|talk]]) 19:35, 13 December 2016 (UTC)
:::Very well. [[User:Gamingforfun365|<span style="color:yellow"><s><span style="color:#185618">Gamingforfun</span></s></span><sup><u><span style="color:red">3</span><span style="color:green">6</span><span style="color:blue">5</span></u></sup>]] [[User talk:Gamingforfun365|(<u>talk</u>)]] 20:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)


===Sources===
===Sources===
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::No replacements exist. Removed them.
::No replacements exist. Removed them.


'''Status: Reviewing...'''
'''Status: Done'''

<s>All right. I have finished reviewing the article. It looks good, but would look good enough to deserve the GA-status after all the issues have been addressed.</s> [[User:Gamingforfun365|<span style="color:yellow"><s><span style="color:#185618">Gamingforfun</span></s></span><sup><u><span style="color:red">3</span><span style="color:green">6</span><span style="color:blue">5</span></u></sup>]] [[User talk:Gamingforfun365|(<u>talk</u>)]] 02:06, 13 December 2016 (UTC)
:'''Wait!''' Forget what I said. I read that there are reviews that can be added to the "Reception" section; they include [http://www.ign.com/articles/2016/09/13/recore-review IGN's review], [http://venturebeat.com/2016/10/09/recore-review/ VentureBeat's review], [https://www.gamestm.co.uk/reviews/recore-review/ GamesTM's review], [http://www.hardcoregamer.com/2016/09/12/review-recore/225487/ Hardcore Gamer's review], [http://www.gameinformer.com/games/recore/b/xboxone/archive/2016/09/14/recore-review-game-informer-xbox-one.aspx Game Informer's review], [http://www.egmnow.com/articles/reviews/recore-review/ EGM's review], [http://www.shacknews.com/article/96823/recore-review-auto-pilot Shacknews' review], [http://www.slantmagazine.com/games/review/recore Slant Magazine's review], and [http://metro.co.uk/2016/09/13/recore-review-loading-now-6124744/ Metro's review]. Now, (EDIT: I know what you may be thinking: that) that is a lot of reviews in my opinion, but, at least, a few of the given sources (such as IGN and EGM) would do. '''Now''', I am {{done}}. Sorry about that. [[User:Gamingforfun365|<span style="color:yellow"><s><span style="color:#185618">Gamingforfun</span></s></span><sup><u><span style="color:red">3</span><span style="color:green">6</span><span style="color:blue">5</span></u></sup>]] [[User talk:Gamingforfun365|(<u>talk</u>)]] 02:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)
::Very well. I shall now give this article a {{pass}}. [[User:Gamingforfun365|<span style="color:yellow"><s><span style="color:#185618">Gamingforfun</span></s></span><sup><u><span style="color:red">3</span><span style="color:green">6</span><span style="color:blue">5</span></u></sup>]] [[User talk:Gamingforfun365|(<u>talk</u>)]] 20:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Gamingforfun365 (talk · contribs) 00:34, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I shall take a look at this article to spot any errors to be resolved.

Plot

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  • "...world of Far Eden as Joule Adams (Erika Soto)..." Source?
 Done
  • "...and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)..." Source?
Removed.
  • "...Joule Adams (Erika Soto), one of the colonists, and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)..." could be interpreted as ...Joule Adams (Erika Soto), her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow), and one of the colonists.... I suggest changing the sentence into "...one of the colonists Joule Adams (Erika Soto) and her corebot Mack (Jonathan Lipow)...".
 Done
  • "...reactivate a terraforming pylon she learns has been offline... > ...reactivate a terraforming pylon that she learns has been offline...
 Done
  • "On the order of Victor (Alex Fernandez)..." Source?
Removed.
  • "...they get agitated. > ...they become agitated.
 Done
  • "...Kai Brehn (Harry Shum)..." Source?
 Done
  • "Corebot Duncan enters, lamenting the death of his human companion and..." > "Corebot Duncan enters, lamenting the death of his human companion, and..."
 Done
  • "are long gone; having been destroyed by Victor." > "are long gone, having been destroyed by Victor."
 Done

Development

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  • David Dedeine, Scott Green, Takuya Shiraiwa, Eric Weiss, Berenger Fish, Masahiro Yasuma, Kevin Choteau, Jack Mathews (possible misspelling of "Matthews"), Marc-Antoine Bernard-Brunel, Todd Keller, Shinsuke Komaki, and Patrice Bourroncle are only talked about in the main infobox, rather than both that and in the "Development" section.
Not misspelling. These names come from the closing credits.
Can you use Template:Cite video game in the infobox? Gamingforfun365 (talk) 02:10, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
 Done
  • "...its animation state machine system Mecanim for..." > "...its animation state machine system, Mecanim, for..."
 Done
  • "...for "The Legend of Zelda: Symphony of the Goddesses"..." > for The Legend of Zelda: Symphony of the Goddesses..."
 Done
  • "...September 13, 2016 in..." > "...September 13, 2016, in..."
 Done
  • "...September 27, 2016 by..." > "...September 27, 2016, by ..."
 Done

Reception

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  • I find the section to be using a lot of quotations. I suggest paraphrasing some parts of it.
 Done
  • Any sales information to cover as well?
Microsoft doesn't release sales information.
@Gamingforfun365: I have to tell you. I don't think any more review summaries are going to add anything. I'm trying to write the one from EGM and it contains exactly the same praises and criticisms currently cited in the section. The case is the same for IGN. It has already been established what critics think of the game. Cognissonance (talk) 19:35, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Very well. Gamingforfun365 (talk) 20:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

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 Done
  • I do not consider sources 12 and 21, Windows Central and Film.Music.Media respectively, to be reliable sources. They should be replaced with better ones.
No replacements exist. Removed them.

Status: Done

All right. I have finished reviewing the article. It looks good, but would look good enough to deserve the GA-status after all the issues have been addressed. Gamingforfun365 (talk) 02:06, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Wait! Forget what I said. I read that there are reviews that can be added to the "Reception" section; they include IGN's review, VentureBeat's review, GamesTM's review, Hardcore Gamer's review, Game Informer's review, EGM's review, Shacknews' review, Slant Magazine's review, and Metro's review. Now, (EDIT: I know what you may be thinking: that) that is a lot of reviews in my opinion, but, at least, a few of the given sources (such as IGN and EGM) would do. Now, I am  Done. Sorry about that. Gamingforfun365 (talk) 02:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Very well. I shall now give this article a  Pass. Gamingforfun365 (talk) 20:27, 13 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]