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I am currently in the running start program in EVCC. I am a senior from MGHS. My goal is to graduate college with a Bachelor's Degree in Aerospace Engineering, then apply as an intern for Boeing. My hobbies are playing basketball, cooking, and spending time with my family.

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Article Review

I explored the Wahl Clipper page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its shortage in citations, its completeness, and its advertising tone.

Citations

There were a few citations on the page, one of which lead to the products website and the other to an article. The external link below led to Wahl Clipper website, similar to the website cited in the article. The page can use more dependable citations and external links to bolster the statements and "facts" in the article.

Completeness

The article consisted of little information about the product. Wahl clippers have different variations of which, each type of Wahl clipper has its own function or purpose. Only one type of the Wahl clipper was presented, the "Super Taper", described in a biased claim with no evidence to support it. The article's history description was very brief. The citation listed below included the history of the product and company, information that could have been added to the article.

Language

With the citations and external links leading to similar websites, it presented an advertising style because of the link and citation. The article's "product" heading included biased language such as, the clipper is very useful in the barber world and the clipper is one of the most popular clippers barbers use around the world. These claims did not have any sufficient evidence to back them up. This means the claims are just an opinion on the product, making their claims biased as well.

Summary

Ultimately, this article requires a great amount of work to be done. It presented a large amount of information yet only a few sentences were cited. The citations and external link that were provided lead to the product's website which made it seem as if the article was advertising Wahl Clipper products. The language used in the article heading's description were somewhat biased due to claims that were stated. The "products" heading lacked information about what types of Wahl Clipper products there were and their uses. For example, the Wahl Professional 5-Star Shaver's purpose is to "shave" or "bald" the clients hair down to a stubble. Shortage of brief descriptions like these prevent the article from being complete.

(The question/suggestion for the talk page [1])

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 I am currently in the running start program in EVCC. I am a senior from MGHS. My goal is to graduate college with a Bachelor's Degree in Aerospace Engineering, then apply as an intern for Boeing. My hobbies are playing basketball, cooking, and spending time with my family. {{student editor|course = [[Wikipedia:Wiki_Ed/Everett_Community_College/English_Composition_(Winter)]] }}
+=Article Review=
+I explored the [[Wahl Clipper]] page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its shortage in citations, its completeness, and its advertising tone.
+=== Citations ===
+There were a few citations on the page, one of which lead to the products website and the other to an article. The external link below led to Wahl Clipper website, similar to the website cited in the article. The page can use more dependable citations and external links to bolster the statements and "facts" in the article.
+=== Completeness ===
+The article consisted of little information about the product. Wahl clippers have different variations of which, each type of Wahl clipper has its own function or purpose. Only one type of the Wahl clipper was presented, the "Super Taper", described in a biased claim with no evidence to support it. The article's history description was very brief. The citation listed below included the history of the product and company, information that could have been added to the article.
+=== Language ===
+With the citations and external links leading to similar websites, it presented an advertising style because of the link and citation. The article's "product" heading included biased language such as, the clipper is very useful in the barber world and the clipper is one of the most popular clippers barbers use around the world. These claims did not have any sufficient evidence to back them up. This means the claims are just an opinion on the product, making their claims biased as well.
+=== Summary ===
+Ultimately, this article requires a great amount of work to be done. It presented a large amount of information yet only a few sentences were cited. The citations and external link that were provided lead to the product's website which made it seem as if the article was advertising Wahl Clipper products. The language used in the article heading's description were somewhat biased due to claims that were stated. The "products" heading lacked information about what types of Wahl Clipper products there were and their uses. For example, the Wahl Professional 5-Star Shaver's purpose is to "shave" or "bald" the clients hair down to a stubble. Shortage of brief descriptions like these prevent the article from being complete.
+(The question/suggestion for the talk page [https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Wahl_Clipper])