Talk:Hyperspace/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 21:10, 18 December 2021 (UTC)

I'm planning to do a full review fairly soon, but here are some initial observations:

• Significant alternative titles should be presented in bold per MOS:BOLDALTNAMES. I would suggest either bolding the ones that redirect to the article (nulspace and overspace) and removing the rest from the WP:LEAD or removing all of them from the WP:LEAD since a whole bunch of them are mentioned in the "Later depictions" section.
• I would link to Amazing Stories Quarterly in the WP:LEAD.
• I wouldn't personally use the image of the magazine cover in the "Early depictions" section at all since it is fairly tangential to the subject of Hyperspace, but regardless of that it seems to be an issue of Amazing Stories Quarterly and not Amazing Stories as the caption says.
• The first paragraph of the "Early depictions" section does not seem to be fully supported by the cited source, and it is also not really about hyperspace.

TompaDompa (talk) 21:10, 18 December 2021 (UTC)

C/e done. What do you think is not supported in that paragraph? _{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 10:29, 19 December 2021 (UTC)

A specific detail would be the use of demons in Somnium, but more generally (and importantly), the notion that these types of space travel using a fictional existence outside what humans normally observe are precursors to hyperspace is the kind of analysis that really needs to come from the sources. TompaDompa (talk) 00:36, 20 December 2021 (UTC)

Ahm, you are right. Perhaps I referenced the Somnium part then got distracted and forgot to verify the rest. You are right, this is ORish and cannot be kept for now. I've removed it from the body. The full paragraph is below, for reference by others. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 11:04, 20 December 2021 (UTC)