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{{ping|Fossiladder13}} Before I continue the review, I'll give you time to perhaps simplify the prose for accessibility, and to implement [https://www.manchester.ac.uk/discover/news/new-fossil-reveals-origin-of-arthropod-breathing-system/ this source] that was published in February 8th. [[User:Wretchskull|Wretchskull]] ([[User talk:Wretchskull|talk]]) 16:31, 11 February 2022 (UTC) |
{{ping|Fossiladder13}} Before I continue the review, I'll give you time to perhaps simplify the prose for accessibility, and to implement [https://www.manchester.ac.uk/discover/news/new-fossil-reveals-origin-of-arthropod-breathing-system/ this source] that was published in February 8th. [[User:Wretchskull|Wretchskull]] ([[User talk:Wretchskull|talk]]) 16:31, 11 February 2022 (UTC) |
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{{ping|Wretchskull}} Ok I edited it a bit, is there anything else that could be improved?. |
{{ping|Wretchskull}} Ok I edited it a bit, is there anything else that could be improved?. |
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*Arthropod is linked twice in the lede. |
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*Is there a reason why the first pararaph has references but the second one doesn't? Consistency is needed; either add refs to the second paragraph or, preferably, remove refs from the lede and make sure they're incorporated in the body. |
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"[...] biramous limb evolution.[3]" --> "[...] biramous limb evolution."[3] |
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*[https://copyvios.toolforge.org/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&title=Erratus&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=1&use_links=1&turnitin=1 No copyvio found]. |
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**Ref 2 doesn't support that "Erratus on the other hand has a set of primitive legs". It may sure be phylogenetically primitive, but that isn't stated by the source. Am I missing something? |
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**Why does ref 6 have a url to the site as a separate link rather than being clickable through the title? |
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**I didn't find any other issues. |
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{{ping|Fossiladder13}} Ping me when you're done. [[User:Wretchskull|Wretchskull]] ([[User talk:Wretchskull|talk]]) 13:58, 13 February 2022 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Wretchskull (talk · contribs) 16:31, 11 February 2022 (UTC)
This is a highly technical article that isn't accessible to normal readers; work will be needed on prose.
- Lede
- Link arthropod and nektonic.
- The lede could probably be expanded considering the amount of info in the body.
- History of study
- Link carapace and euarthropod.
- Citations come after punctuation; quotation marks included.
- Classification
- The last sentence is unreferenced.
- Add a comma after "however".
- Paleoecology
- Link Cambrian period and fauna.
- General
- Is there any info on the etymology of "Erratus sperare"?
@Fossiladder13: Before I continue the review, I'll give you time to perhaps simplify the prose for accessibility, and to implement this source that was published in February 8th. Wretchskull (talk) 16:31, 11 February 2022 (UTC)
@Wretchskull: Ok I edited it a bit, is there anything else that could be improved?.
- Lede
- Arthropod is linked twice in the lede.
- Is there a reason why the first pararaph has references but the second one doesn't? Consistency is needed; either add refs to the second paragraph or, preferably, remove refs from the lede and make sure they're incorporated in the body.
- History of study
"[...] biramous limb evolution.[3]" --> "[...] biramous limb evolution."[3]
- References
- No copyvio found.
- Spotchecks:
- Ref 2 doesn't support that "Erratus on the other hand has a set of primitive legs". It may sure be phylogenetically primitive, but that isn't stated by the source. Am I missing something?
- Why does ref 6 have a url to the site as a separate link rather than being clickable through the title?
- I didn't find any other issues.
@Fossiladder13: Ping me when you're done. Wretchskull (talk) 13:58, 13 February 2022 (UTC)