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So, strange situation because I've already said I'd review this for GA but in parallel we have a PR, so I'll leave my comments here and see what happens, bearing in mind I'll review with minimum GA and beyond in mind (thinking of FA in other words...)
So, strange situation because I've already said I'd review this for GA but in parallel we have a PR, so I'll leave my comments here and see what happens, bearing in mind I'll review with minimum GA and beyond in mind (thinking of FA in other words...)
*Move citations to comply with [[WP:CITE]], immediately to right of punctuation.
*Move citations to comply with [[WP:CITE]], immediately to right of punctuation.
:{{Done}} One obvious one changed, one questionable one adjusted. I assume this doesn't apply to infoboxes, tables and lists, which don't have punctuation.
*Avoid prose within the parentheses. If it's worth being there, flow it.
*Avoid prose within the parentheses. If it's worth being there, flow it.
*"This made Albion virtually an automatic choice..." - says who?
*"This made Albion virtually an automatic choice..." - says who?
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:{{Done}}
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*Yuck, World War I - English should refer to this as First World War. Same with its successor.
*Yuck, World War I - English should refer to this as First World War. Same with its successor.
:These are the actual article titles, so are you saying this is an Americanism? Is "World War One" acceptable, i.e. dropping the roman numeral?
:[[Image:Nuvola_apps_filetypes.svg|30px]]These are the actual article titles, so are you saying this is an Americanism? Is "World War One" acceptable, i.e. dropping the roman numeral?
*"...this particular "Double"...." - needs further clarification - you mean winning the FA cup and being relegated? It's not clear.
*"...this particular "Double"...." - needs further clarification - you mean winning the FA cup and being relegated? It's not clear.
*"...hailed as "The Team of the Century"..." - this is some claim. I'm sure the citation helps but you have to justify it in the text.
*"...hailed as "The Team of the Century"..." - this is some claim. I'm sure the citation helps but you have to justify it in the text.
*"...there followed the club's longest ever continuous run in the top flight of English football, a total of 24 years." - cite it please.
*"...there followed the club's longest ever continuous run in the top flight of English football, a total of 24 years." - cite it please.
*En-dash - I saw a 1972-1973 instead of a 1972–73 there....
*En-dash - I saw a 1972-1973 instead of a 1972–73 there....
:{{Done}}
*"..of 1500–2000..." not keen, perhaps "between 1,500 and 2,000..."
*"..of 1500–2000..." not keen, perhaps "between 1,500 and 2,000..."
:{{Done}}
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Revision as of 01:36, 17 November 2007

Previous peer review for this article can be found at Wikipedia:Peer review/West Bromwich Albion F.C./archive1

West Bromwich Albion F.C.

I have pretty much re-written this article since the last peer review and believe I have addressed the vast majority of the points raised. Looking for GA as soon as possible, along with any advice and help to get it up to FA. Thanks. --Jameboy 16:48, 11 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

There's a lot of choppy sentences with too many commas - I'll show you how to reduce commas by switching clauses.cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:02, 13 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

So, strange situation because I've already said I'd review this for GA but in parallel we have a PR, so I'll leave my comments here and see what happens, bearing in mind I'll review with minimum GA and beyond in mind (thinking of FA in other words...)

  • Move citations to comply with WP:CITE, immediately to right of punctuation.
 Done One obvious one changed, one questionable one adjusted. I assume this doesn't apply to infoboxes, tables and lists, which don't have punctuation.
  • Avoid prose within the parentheses. If it's worth being there, flow it.
  • "This made Albion virtually an automatic choice..." - says who?
  • Be consistent with season descriptions, you have 1910–11 and then 1919–1920.
 Done
  • Yuck, World War I - English should refer to this as First World War. Same with its successor.
These are the actual article titles, so are you saying this is an Americanism? Is "World War One" acceptable, i.e. dropping the roman numeral?
  • "...this particular "Double"...." - needs further clarification - you mean winning the FA cup and being relegated? It's not clear.
  • "...hailed as "The Team of the Century"..." - this is some claim. I'm sure the citation helps but you have to justify it in the text.
  • "...there followed the club's longest ever continuous run in the top flight of English football, a total of 24 years." - cite it please.
  • En-dash - I saw a 1972-1973 instead of a 1972–73 there....
 Done
  • "..of 1500–2000..." not keen, perhaps "between 1,500 and 2,000..."
 Done
  • Heed WP:HEAD for headings - "Notable Fomer Players" -> "Notable former players"
 Done
  • In that table, link the positions, consider reformatting so it looks pleasant, make it sortable.
  • Wowwwweeee, one manager for 1520 games. Incredible. (That's just an observation, no action required!)
  • Ensure citations relating to multiple pages of books have consistent "pp", not just "p".
 Done

That's it for now. Let me know if I can help more. The Rambling Man (talk) 00:27, 17 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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