Talk:Roswell High School (Georgia)/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be reviewing this article's GA nomination. Here are some initial suggestions for improvement:

• Per WP:LEAD, an article of this size should be about three or four full paragraphs summarizing all the main points of the article.
• There are some MoS problems. A good copyeditor should be able to fix them. If all the other points get addressed, I am willing to do this myself.
• "Band" and "Drama" need citations.
• "In 2008 the Hornets finished fourth in the state." - ref?
• "Roswell also won a Track and Field State Championship in 1961 while finishing second in 1957 and 1974." - ref?
• Any stat, record, or championship needs a source.
• A couple of the notable alumni need sources.
• Only the first word in a header should be capital unless it is a proper name.

That is it for now. I'll give the article seven days for improvement. When these issues are addressed, I'll add some more suggestions. Nikki♥311 23:55, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

Thank you. I have a question though. I am having trouble finding citations for state runner-ups except for the very recent ones. The information was taken from the banners hanging in the school gym. Should I just take them out and focus on the state championships? AUburnTiger (talk) 17:45, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

Hmmm. I'm surprised that information isn't available on the school's website. If a source can't be found for runner-ups, I'd remove them. The championships are the important information, anyway, IMO. Nikki♥311 03:22, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

Let me know here when you are ready for me to look back over the article. Nikki♥311 02:51, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

I think everything has been address, so whenever you can go back over it, feel free. AUburnTiger (talk) 02:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Part 2

Lead

• "The current building is the oldest in use high school building in north Fulton as several new schools have opened in the county and Milton High School moved to a new campus in 2006.[6]" - this seems rather detailed for a lead. I'd cut it off at "The current building is the oldest in use high school building in north Fulton.[6]" as long as the explanation is in the article elsewhere.

History

• Maybe a quick mention of why Roswell King is important and the school/city is named after him.

Campus

• Is there a source for "will include 10 new classrooms and a new band room. Once completed the school will have a 1,900 student capacity, and will eliminate the need for several of the portable classrooms."?

Students and faculty

• "In that year, the student population was 68% white, 15% African American, 12% Hispanic, and 5% Asian. Roswell has a relatively large immigrant population, including students from Russia and other former Soviet republics, Korea, and African nations." - source?

Broadcast and Video Production

• There aren't supposed to be external links in the prose, so the link to The Hive needs to be moved to the external links.

Athletics

• Endashes (WP:DASH) need to be used in the win/loss records.
• "the three most popular high school sports in Georgia." - source?
• "Blessed Trinity, though not a true rival, sometimes plays Roswell in sports such as soccer. The two schools are less than a mile a part and usually draw a large number of fans when they meet." - source for "large number of fans" and "not a true rival"?
• The list about competitive sports should be turned from a bulleted list to a prose list.
• "26 appearances in the state playoffs" - source?
• The first time the AJC is mentioned, it should be written long hand with a link to Atlanta Journal Constitution.
• "One Roswell golfer played the entire tournament with a patch over one eye due to an injury and still had the best finish of the team." - not sure if this is even worth mentioning, but it needs a source if it stays

Nikki♥311 23:46, 13 January 2009 (UTC)