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Beginning read-through today. Will report back soonest. [[User:Tim riley|Tim riley]] ([[User talk:Tim riley|talk]]) 07:27, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
Beginning read-through today. Will report back soonest. [[User:Tim riley|Tim riley]] ([[User talk:Tim riley|talk]]) 07:27, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

Nothing borderline about this GAN. Impressively referenced, easy to ready, no discernible POV, well-illustrated, and neither too long nor too short. A few minor points before I complete the formalities:

*General
**Spelling – you use a mixture ize/ization and ise/isation endings. In an English article I'd go for the latter if I were you (though I do know what Fowler said on the subject!)
**Piping of "Sir" in knights' titles – inconsistent. I think [[John Vanbrugh|Sir John Vanbrugh]] is much easier on the reader's eye than Sir [[Robert Walpole]], which breaks the flow rather jarringly, but one way or the other you should be consistent.
*Lead
**the title Queen of France – might cause the casual reader a moment's pause: perhaps "the nominal title"?
*Glorious revolution
**Sarah has become "Lady Churchill" without explanation. It might be less confusing for the reader (and just as correct) if you called her Sarah Churchill at this mention.
*William and Mary
**"According to James…." Bit of a tease, here. Did he say whether he gave her his leave?
*Reign
**"Disassociated"? Strange word! Why not just "dissociated"?
*Two party politics
**"Unloyal"? The word is, I find, in the OED, but this is the first time I have ever met it. Wouldn't the familiar "disloyal" do?
*War of the Spanish Succession
**" By signing the Treaty of Utrecht…" – It isn't clear to me how the two parts of this sentence relate to each other.
*Legacy
**"… indicate that she chose ministers and exercised her prerogatives wisely" – I think you ought to say within your text whose judgment this is. For such a very broad claim a second source to back up Waller would be good, too.
**"Chauvinist" – you mean "male-chauvinist". Ordinary chauvinism is excessive nationalism.
[[User:Tim riley|Tim riley]] ([[User talk:Tim riley|talk]]) 10:34, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs · count) 07:27, 25 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Beginning read-through today. Will report back soonest. Tim riley (talk) 07:27, 25 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nothing borderline about this GAN. Impressively referenced, easy to ready, no discernible POV, well-illustrated, and neither too long nor too short. A few minor points before I complete the formalities:

  • General
    • Spelling – you use a mixture ize/ization and ise/isation endings. In an English article I'd go for the latter if I were you (though I do know what Fowler said on the subject!)
    • Piping of "Sir" in knights' titles – inconsistent. I think Sir John Vanbrugh is much easier on the reader's eye than Sir Robert Walpole, which breaks the flow rather jarringly, but one way or the other you should be consistent.
  • Lead
    • the title Queen of France – might cause the casual reader a moment's pause: perhaps "the nominal title"?
  • Glorious revolution
    • Sarah has become "Lady Churchill" without explanation. It might be less confusing for the reader (and just as correct) if you called her Sarah Churchill at this mention.
  • William and Mary
    • "According to James…." Bit of a tease, here. Did he say whether he gave her his leave?
  • Reign
    • "Disassociated"? Strange word! Why not just "dissociated"?
  • Two party politics
    • "Unloyal"? The word is, I find, in the OED, but this is the first time I have ever met it. Wouldn't the familiar "disloyal" do?
  • War of the Spanish Succession
    • " By signing the Treaty of Utrecht…" – It isn't clear to me how the two parts of this sentence relate to each other.
  • Legacy
    • "… indicate that she chose ministers and exercised her prerogatives wisely" – I think you ought to say within your text whose judgment this is. For such a very broad claim a second source to back up Waller would be good, too.
    • "Chauvinist" – you mean "male-chauvinist". Ordinary chauvinism is excessive nationalism.

Tim riley (talk) 10:34, 25 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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