User talk:Oklamert

For my wiki article evaluation I would like to look at the Cuba - United States relations wiki page. I choose to do this page because I have ties to Cuba and am very interested in the developing diplomatic talks between the United States and Cuba in recent months.

The first thing I noticed when I began reading the Wikipedia article was the first sentence. "Cuba and the United States of America have had an interest in one another since well before either of their independence movements." The phrase "had interest in one another" sounded like the author was talking about two teenagers in love, not two countries. It seems like the wording should be changed to "have had diplomatic ties to each other" or something along those lines. Also, at first it didn't discuss the recent developments and I was worried that it hadn't been updated, but as you read down through the contents it does discuss the recent political developments in more detail. The sentence, "The United States does not have formal diplomatic relations with Cuba.." is also false and while the article addresses these changes later on, it seems like it should be changed in the opening paragraphs to reflect the more current stance.

Other than a few issues I found with wording, the article does a good job of being neutral and does not pick sides. There is no argument or justification for the revolution or communist takeover. It chronologically is written well, beginning with pre 1959 takeover, through the cold war, and finally addresses Obamas new relationship with the Cuban government. The references at a glance seem to legitamate sources of news and info, such as published books and the BBC.

Overall I would give the article an A-. Maybe I am a bit bias that they don't begin with the new developments, I am still learning how Wikipedia is structured! Oklamert (talk) 18:13, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

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