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Lunar Lander (1979 video game) is currently a Video games good article nominee. Nominated by Pres N at 17:01, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Indrian (talk · contribs) 22:04, 25 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll even review this one in the next few days. I promise! Indrian (talk) 22:04, 25 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@PresN: Okay, right off the bat before I do an in depth review there is a gaping hole in converge with the development section. There was a "Making of" in Retro Gamer back in issue 79 that includes a lot of further insight from Rich Moore. Without incorporating material from that source, this article does not meet the "broad in coverage" criteria. Indrian (talk) 22:09, 25 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Indrian: Aargh, so it is. I completely agree, that would be required. Give me a bit to track it down, please! --Pres N 02:19, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Indrian: Alright, added, though I'm sure I've introduced a few grammar problems. --Pres N 04:06, 26 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the additions! Let's get this knocked out!

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"Lunar Lander is a single-player Lunar Lander arcade game" - I know the point being conveyed here, but stating Lunar Lander is a Lunar Lander game probably feels unnecessarily reflexive to the layman and reads somewhat oddly. If you want to call it a "Lunar Lander" game, then perhaps reword it to say "Lunar Lander is a single-player arcade game in the Lunar Lander subgenre."
"earning points for safe or difficult landings" - Do you earn points for just attempting a difficult landing even if it is unsuccessful, or do you earn points for a safe landing, with more points earned for choosing a more difficult landing zone? The article implies the former, but I believe it is the latter. Probably change this to something like "earning points based on the skillfulness and difficulty of the landing."

Gameplay

"Lunar Lander is a single-player Lunar Lander game" - Same as above. Even if this is technically correct, it just reads strangely.

I think that does it. Once these changes are made, I think we will be good to go. I'll go ahead and place this On hold. Indrian (talk) 18:23, 4 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Indrian: All three done; thanks for the much-needed copyedit! --Pres N 22:31, 4 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I gave the article one more round of polish, and I think we are good to go. Well done! Indrian (talk) 18:38, 6 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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 There was a clone for earlier Amiga OS versions as well. I remember playing it often back in the day :)  Unfortunately I can't source it.  It's probably on aminet though.  <small class="autosigned">—&nbsp;Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[Special:Contributions/2001:56A:751A:FF00:E4A7:EE46:CF0B:82D6|2001:56A:751A:FF00:E4A7:EE46:CF0B:82D6]] ([[User talk:2001:56A:751A:FF00:E4A7:EE46:CF0B:82D6|talk]]) 00:54, 15 January 2016 (UTC)</small><!-- Template:Unsigned IP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
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