User talk:Cpara2/sandbox: Difference between revisions
Content deleted Content added
→Keyri's Peer Review: new section |
m Signing comment by Keyriambrocio - "→Keyri's Peer Review: new section" |
||
| Line 8: | Line 8: | ||
#1 The edit does not sound biased at all. It shows different perspectives surrounding feminism in Disney movies, particularly with the Disney princesses. #2 Some citations are included, but more can be added to show that this information comes from various reliable sources and not just one. I would add more citations where they are missing from a variety of sources. |
#1 The edit does not sound biased at all. It shows different perspectives surrounding feminism in Disney movies, particularly with the Disney princesses. #2 Some citations are included, but more can be added to show that this information comes from various reliable sources and not just one. I would add more citations where they are missing from a variety of sources. |
||
#3 The edit feels substantial because every sentence is informational, but some citations may be missing where the article section talks about others' perspectives about Disney princesses. |
#3 The edit feels substantial because every sentence is informational, but some citations may be missing where the article section talks about others' perspectives about Disney princesses. |
||
#4 Every sentence is worded well and there is no passive sentence structure. No wording is awkward and everything is clear and easy to understand. |
#4 Every sentence is worded well and there is no passive sentence structure. No wording is awkward and everything is clear and easy to understand. <!-- Template:Unsigned --><small class="autosigned">— Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[User:Keyriambrocio|Keyriambrocio]] ([[User talk:Keyriambrocio#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/Keyriambrocio|contribs]]) 16:39, 1 May 2018 (UTC)</small> <!--Autosigned by SineBot--> |
||
Revision as of 16:40, 1 May 2018
1. yes uses biased sources how Walt Disney companies use sexism in princess movies 2. there are citations included in the end of the article. but there should be citations in the information that you put. 3. yes every edit is substantial 4. yes every thing is clear and well written.
Keyri's Peer Review
- 1 The edit does not sound biased at all. It shows different perspectives surrounding feminism in Disney movies, particularly with the Disney princesses. #2 Some citations are included, but more can be added to show that this information comes from various reliable sources and not just one. I would add more citations where they are missing from a variety of sources.
- 3 The edit feels substantial because every sentence is informational, but some citations may be missing where the article section talks about others' perspectives about Disney princesses.
- 4 Every sentence is worded well and there is no passive sentence structure. No wording is awkward and everything is clear and easy to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Keyriambrocio (talk • contribs) 16:39, 1 May 2018 (UTC)