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Reviewer: Whiteguru (talk · contribs) 05:11, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Starts GA Review; the review will follow the same sections of the Article. --Whiteguru (talk) 05:11, 13 March 2021 (UTC)Whiteguru (talk) 05:04, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Observations

Lede: Fuchs researched the cultures of ancient India, back to India's original inhabitants. (back to India's original inhabitants is superfluous; suggest dropping this) Early life and education: He joined the SVD in 1927 --> SVD's

appointed by the SVD to one of its missions that was opened in 1932 in Indore, Indore State (in the modern Madhya Pradesh), in India. In India, should be appointed by the SVD's to one of its missions that was opened in 1932 in Indore State (in modern Madhya Pradesh), India. There,

In 1947, SVD's general chapter --> In 1947, the SVD General Chapter

their ritual of sacrificing the horse --> sacrificing a horse

Research: Since he started to work, but specially after establishing the Anthropos Institute in Mumbai, (this part of the sentence is superfluous, suggest drop).

He spent several decades performing studies in India --> He spent several decades undertaking studies in India

Initial Research: wrote his first article in 1937 in Anthropos (journal) on the customs, marriage, and festivals of the Chamars where is the citation for this?

Later research: MOS gives PhD as the post-nominal.

The Children of Hari --> suppositious is not a common word. conjectural might be more readily comprehended and understood.

At the Bottom of Indian Society: Fuchs propounded that, "...untouchability is probably an ancient social trait from animal breeding culture which was brought to India by the Aryans and also the Dravidians." This needs a citation.

Structure of this article should lead to a summary or a reception.

Fuchs was a cultural anthropologist who excelled at field work and note taking. He is celebrated and honoured for his recording of the cultures of the peoples where he resided. He had an acute ear for language and history. It is clear that he formed his own method of anthropology and stayed away from the academic assumptions and cultural theories of the Vienna School. The references for this article cite many reviews of his books and monographs. He is both praised and criticised for the depth and simplicity of his work. He set strong boundaries which, to other anthropologists were richly rewarding yet frustrating. Then finish with his Golden Doctorate award and the Fetschrifts given for him. See Reference 3.

This article starts off with rather challenging grammar and gets much better as it goes on. Reading the revision history shows that the principal editor made many, many changes to satisfy later editors about good written English. It *just* meets reasonably well written criteria.

Final

Can we attend to the matters above? Thank you. --Whiteguru (talk) 10:43, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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+{{GAProgress| prose = fair| mos = good| reflayout = good| reliablesources = good | originalresearch = good| broadness = good | focus = good
+| neutral = good | stable = good| freeortaggedpics = good| picsrelevant = good}}
+===Observations===
+'''Lede:''' Fuchs researched the cultures of ancient India, back to India's original inhabitants.  (back to India's original inhabitants is superfluous; suggest dropping this)
+'''Early life and education:''' He joined the SVD in 1927 --> SVD's
+appointed by the SVD to one of its missions that was opened in 1932 in Indore, Indore State (in the modern Madhya Pradesh), in India. In India, ''should be''  appointed by the SVD's to one of its missions that was opened in 1932 in Indore State (in modern Madhya Pradesh), India. There,
+In 1947, SVD's general chapter --> In 1947, the SVD General Chapter
+their ritual of sacrificing the horse --> sacrificing a horse
+'''Research:'''  Since he started to work, but specially after establishing the Anthropos Institute in Mumbai, (this part of the sentence is superfluous, suggest drop).
+He spent several decades performing studies in India --> He spent several decades undertaking studies in India
+'''Initial Research:''' ''wrote his first article in 1937 in Anthropos (journal) on the customs, marriage, and festivals of the Chamars'' where is the citation for this?
+'''Later research:''' MOS gives PhD as the post-nominal.
+'''The Children of Hari''' --> suppositious is not a common word. conjectural might be more readily comprehended and understood.
+'''At the Bottom of Indian Society:''' Fuchs propounded that, "''...untouchability is probably an ancient social trait from animal breeding culture which was brought to India by the Aryans and also the Dravidians.''" This needs a citation.
+'''Structure of this article should lead to a summary or a reception.'''
+Fuchs was a cultural anthropologist who excelled at field work and note taking. He is celebrated and honoured for his recording of the cultures of the peoples where he resided. He had an acute ear for language and history. It is clear that he formed his own method of anthropology and stayed away from the academic assumptions and cultural theories of the Vienna School. The references for this article cite many reviews of his books and monographs. He is both praised and criticised for the depth and simplicity of his work. He set strong boundaries which, to other anthropologists were richly rewarding yet frustrating. Then finish with his Golden Doctorate award and the Fetschrifts given for him.  See Reference 3.
+This article starts off with rather challenging grammar and gets much better as it goes on. Reading the revision history shows that the principal editor made many, many changes to satisfy later editors about good written English. It *just* meets ''reasonably well written'' criteria.
+===Final===
+ Can we attend to the matters above? Thank you. --[[User:Whiteguru|Whiteguru]] ([[User talk:Whiteguru|talk]]) 10:43, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
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