User:Allibsusss/Health equity/Jerichorajninger Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Allibsusss

Link to draft you're reviewing

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Allibsusss/Health_equity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Health equity

Evaluate the drafted changes

Content

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added relevant to the topic? The content looks like it is relevant to the topic. If the section isn't new, then the added context and information fleshes out existing content.
• Is the content added up-to-date? Seems up-to-date.
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I'm not sure because I don't the entire section of the article is included here. But I checked out the published Health Equity page, and section 7 is already quite fleshed out. So I think the author has done a good job of filling in some holes.
• Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? It does: health equity. The added content doesn't have too much of a focus on underrepresented populations, but the existing content already does a good job of addressing these disparities.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added neutral? Seems pretty neutral to me. This sentence gave me a little pause as perhaps being a little more commentary-based: "However, Marketplaces and their presentation of health insurances and their coverages do not completely guarantee that viewers comprehend the health insurance terms." Is there a way you might rephrase this?
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No, for the most part the article does a good job of presenting the facts without asserting a position. There may be some points where the voice isn't encyclopedic (for example, "Similar to those who lack health insurance, these underinsured individuals also deal with the numerous side effects that occur as a result of lack of care.") but then again, I'm not exactly sure.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? I think there are a decent number of citations, but there could be more. For example, this sentence — "While this mandate was aimed at increasing health insurance rates for Americans, it also led many individuals to sign up for relatively inexpensive health insurance plans that did not provide adequate health coverage in order to avoid the repercussions of the mandate." — could use a citation I think.
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? The use of government websites is effective I think, as that is the context through which health care is often found and received. I think a couple sources are from websites, which could be switched out for more official content/
• Are the sources current? They seem current enough. A few are from the 2000s or early 2010s, which is a bit ago, but for the most part the sources are from the last 4 years, which is good!
• Check a few links. Do they work? Yes!

Organization

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? The added content is clear and concise. I think the language could be a little more precise in terms of word choice. For example (bolded could be revisited):
  • "Private health insurance has numerous different forms, and includes things like Health Maintenance Organizations (HMO’s) and Preferred Provider Organization (PPO’s)."
  • "While health insurance increases the affordability of healthcare in the United States, issues of access along with additional related issues act as barriers to health equity."
  • "While there are many causes of underinsurance, a common a reason is due to low premiums, the up front yearly or monthly amount individuals pay for their insurance policy, and high deductibles, the amount paid out of pocket by the policy holder before an insurance provider will pay any expenses"
    • this sentence feels grammatically confusing to me (between the list and the appositives)
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? I've noticed a few grammatical errors:
  • "Funded through state and federal taxes, some common examples of taxpayer-funded health insurance Medicaid, Medicare, and CHIP."
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes! broken down into bullet points. I think the titles of each bullet could be a little more clearly labelled. Also, I wasn't aware that we were allowed to do bullet points — or that wiki did bullet points — so maybe check in on that?