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*Both home and away kits are blue and white. What happened when they played away at teams like Carlisle? Is there a ref for those shirts by the way? |
*Both home and away kits are blue and white. What happened when they played away at teams like Carlisle? Is there a ref for those shirts by the way? |
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**''The away kit only had a bit of blue on it, not enough to cause an issue when playing Carlisle. Where would a ref for the shirts go.....?'' |
**''The away kit only had a bit of blue on it, not enough to cause an issue when playing Carlisle. Where would a ref for the shirts go.....?'' |
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***Amazing. You could easily have a description of the kit in the prose and ref it there. [[User:The Rambling Man|The Rambling Man]] <small>([[User talk:The Rambling Man|Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!]])</small> 21:33, 9 July 2021 (UTC) |
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*"voted back" could be link, I assume, to [[Re-election (Football League)]]? |
*"voted back" could be link, I assume, to [[Re-election (Football League)]]? |
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*"the play-offs for" link those. |
*"the play-offs for" link those. |
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1986–87 Gillingham F.C. season (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)
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- Nominator(s): ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:24, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
Here is a full and detailed account of the exploits of the English football (soccer) club Gillingham during the 1986-87 season. I was 14 years old at the time and followed the team's ups and downs with the passion which only a 14-year-old fan can exhibit :-) I actually created this article way back in 2011 but then didn't really touch it again until, inspired by the excellent work done by Kosack with current FAC nom 1921–22 Cardiff City F.C. season, I decided to expand this article and managed to take it from 2K to 58K. Your comments will be very gratefully received and acted upon as swiftly as possible...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:24, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
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This is very outside of my comfort zone, but since I have worked with ChrisTheDude in the past, I would like to review this and at least try to broaden my Wikipedia horizons somewhat. Hopefully a completely unfamiliar perspective will be helpful. Please ping me in a week if for whatever reason I have not posted any comments. Have a great day! Aoba47 (talk) 05:17, 5 July 2021 (UTC)
I hope that my comments are helpful. Again, I am completely unfamiliar with this subject as I do not think I have watched any sports game all the way through. Despite that, I still found the article to be engaging and I did not have any trouble following the actual information. A majority of my comments are focused on the prose, with a few about the citations at the end. Once everything is addressed, I will be more than happy to support the FAC for promotion. If possible, I would greatly appreciate any feedback on my current FAC. I hope you are having a great start of your week! Aoba47 (talk) 01:31, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
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Thank you for addressing everything and for your patience with the review. I support this FAC for promotion. I think you have done a wonderful job with the article. Everything is very clear and engaging even to someone like myself who is not really knowledgable about sports at all. If possible, I would greatly appreciate any help with my current FAC, but I understand if you do not have the time or interest. I am just glad that I could look at something outside of my comfort zone to at least try and help. Have a great week! Aoba47 (talk) 18:34, 7 July 2021 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: - many thanks for your support, and I will certainly endeavour to take a look at your FAC over the next few days -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:18, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you. I am just glad that I could help at least a little. Aoba47 (talk) 18:44, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
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- Both home and away kits are blue and white. What happened when they played away at teams like Carlisle? Is there a ref for those shirts by the way?
- The away kit only had a bit of blue on it, not enough to cause an issue when playing Carlisle. Where would a ref for the shirts go.....?
- Amazing. You could easily have a description of the kit in the prose and ref it there. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:33, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- The away kit only had a bit of blue on it, not enough to cause an issue when playing Carlisle. Where would a ref for the shirts go.....?
- "voted back" could be link, I assume, to Re-election (Football League)?
- "the play-offs for" link those.
- 'and hope that two" well, that actually had to not win, not just Gillingham "hoped" they'd not win. You know what I mean, this just seems a little unecyclopedic.
- "both rival teams", "two other teams" enigmatic, any reason?
- "in the final." there's an article for that.
- "replay at a neutral venue," link both replay and neutral venue.
- "Gillingham also reached" Perhaps go back to "During the season" or something as we're firmly parked at the end following the previous para.
- "the highest number of appearances" -> "the most appearances".
- Cascarino scored 14 goals in 17 non-Division Three appearances? That's remarkable.
- He was a legend, and no mistake :-)
- "southern section" but the table says "Semi-final (southern region)" was it section or region?
- "1986–87 season " put season inside the pipe.
- Done as far as here. More tomorrow...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- All those suggestions I made for links, do them all in the main prose too.
- "team gained promotion from the Fourth Division in 1974.[1] " maybe add "as runners-up"?
- "In the preceding 12 seasons" preceding which season?
- "and 1984–85 seasons" again, seasons inside pipe.
- Apply that hereafter...
- "Gillingham had finished fifth and missed out on promotion by two places." I wonder, it may be worth noting why fifth missed out on promotion that season yet fifth got them into the play-offs in the subject season...
- Is "winding-up order" something all our English-speaking brethren understand?
- "win the championship of the Second Division" curious phrasing, I'd just have said "win Second Division" or worst case "win the Second Division title"
- "team warmed up for " touch colloquial, maybe "prepared"?
- "for which Tottenham Hotspur of the First Division provided the opposition" -> "against First Division side Tottenham Hotspur".
- Newport is an AFC btw.
- "the Welsh team" many readers won't know Newport is in Wales. Indeed, there's a Newport not a million miles from me.
- "against Bristol City in" overlinked.
- "scored in a 1–1 draw and then scored" scored scored... repetitive.
- "came at the hands of" maybe just remove "the hands of" as that's a bit unencyclopedic and a shade anthropomorphic.
- "another Saturday off" -> "another Saturday without a game" and here's a question, do our readers all know games mainly take place on Saturdays?
- "100% home record in the league, having won every game played at" saying almost the same thing twice, I'd just say they won every game played at home at Dean Court in the league thus far.
- Link sent off.
- "consecutive days, but a draw " but?
- Fulham is overlinked.
- "in 3rd place" third?
- "more than 4,000 more than" repetitive.
- "to this point" that point.
- Link hat-trick.
- "against Brentford on " overlinked.
- "to 6th in the" sixth?
- "sustained an injury" any information on that?
- "before returning" only a month loan? Did Shearer recover in that time?
- "out of favour again" was he out of favour before? Is that why the time between signing and his debut was extended? Sounds odd to sign someone and them immediately be out of favour?
- Ah, Shearer came back in March, that's only four weeks, not such an "extended period"?
- "score a hat-trick, scoring three goals" maybe replace "scoring" with "with"?
- "on Easter Monday, drew" interesting, you avoided "Boxing Day" and "New Year's Day" but Easter Monday is a thing...
- "from Brighton & Hove Albion during" overlinked.
- "began the month of April" no real need for "the month of" is there?
- Link foul.
- "against Bristol Rovers on 25 April" overlinked.
- "the league table, " you link that here?
- "teams finishing third, fourth, and fifth in the final league table" what about the team from the league above playing to stay in their division?
- "defeat Bolton Wanderers on the last day of the league season and hope that both Bristol City and Notts County failed " all three overlinked, and again "hope" isn't what needed to happen.
- Avoid semi-colons for bold text/pseudo-headers.
- Partial league table needs WP:ACCESS code, e.g. col/row scopes.
- Indeed, I would copy one of the magic tables from the playoff final articles as it has hover-over abbreviation explanation and is fully screen-reader savvy.
That takes me to "Play-offs" which is obviously my favourite bit, so I'm saving that and subsequent sections. I think there's enough to be getting on with. Cheers for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:07, 9 July 2021 (UTC)