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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:54, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Feels that the lead is a little light for this article, consider beefing up the existing para.
"and the amount of Bofors" the number of
"Washington under" comma after Washington.
"under lend-lease" our article seems to call this Lend-Lease, a formal title for that policy.
"Navy.. As a " one too many full stops.
Check image captions. They mainly seem to be fragments, not sentences, so they don't need a full stop.
"Virginia on 16" comma after Virginia.
"without much luck" not particularly encyclopedic tone.
"BuNo 24295" what is that?
"Lt. Cdr. H." this rank is abbreviated, no others seem to be.
What is LTJG?
And FKpt. ?
"Martin PBM Mariner flying boat that" flying boat is overlinked.
"External links" fix font size.

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+'''Comments'''
+*Feels that the lead is a little light for this article, consider beefing up the existing para.
+*"and the amount of Bofors" the number of
+*"Washington under" comma after Washington.
+*"under lend-lease" our article seems to call this Lend-Lease, a formal title for that policy.
+*"Navy.. As a " one too many full stops.
+*Check image captions.  They mainly seem to be fragments, not sentences, so they don't need a full stop.
+*"Virginia on 16" comma after Virginia.
+*"without much luck" not particularly encyclopedic tone.
+*"BuNo 24295" what is that?
+*"Lt. Cdr. H." this rank is abbreviated, no others seem to be.
+*What is LTJG?
+*And FKpt. ?
+*"Martin PBM Mariner flying boat that" flying boat is overlinked.
+*"External links" fix font size.
+That's all I have right now. [[User:The Rambling Man|The Rambling Man]] <small>([[User talk:The Rambling Man|Keep wearing the mask...]])</small> 08:38, 6 September 2021 (UTC)