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Reviewer: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 16:29, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

{{doing}} Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 16:29, 13 January 2016 (UTC) Overall, a solid article (and the first I've heard that they ever made a video for Bionicle—hadn't thought about those toys in years!) First pass comments below:[reply]

Prose:
- Its events are based on the latter half of the 2002–2003 storyline. — I assume this refers to the storyline of the LEGO toys, but it should be made explicit.
- Following Mask of Light, further films based on Bionicle have been released: a direct prequel, Bionicle 2: Legends of Metru Nui, was released in 2004. If this is the only follow-up, it seems weird that it’s not said so straight-forwardly. If it’s not the only followup, which in particular is this one mentioned?
Images:
- The fair use rationale of File:Bioniclemask.jpg could use a little more elaboration.
- I dunno if File:Buildingbionicle.jpg really fulfills its stated purpose. The internal structure of the 3D models doesn't mean much to me; it's without context. If you want to illustrate the differences and the redesign, it seems an image showing something like a side-by-side of one of the LEGO characters with their film equivalent would be far more effective.
References:
- Sources generally look reliable, with some exceptions that seem iffy or I’m unfamiliar with: BZPower.com, Sci Film, and Absolute Write.
- Did a spot-check on current refs 1, 11, 15, 21, 33, and didn't notice any issues with close paraphrasing or inaccurate statements.

—Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 16:23, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@David Fuchs: I've attempted to address the cover art fair use rational, and since it doesn't serve its purpose have removed the other image (it was just a hangover from the article's original form). I've also attended to those bits of prose you pointed out. As to the source: Absolute Write is a reuptable writer-dedicated blog run by professionals in the area, Sci Film is a defunct online magazine that I think is okay, and BZPower.com is a fan site dedicated to Bionicle. I only used them when the information could not be found elsewhere, and (in the case of Absolute Write and BZPower.com) when it was an original interview/behind the scenes look. --ProtoDrake (talk) 20:52, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ok. I'm not sure those sources would stand up to FA standards but for GA they're probably fine. Did a look through again and didn't see any other outstanding issues so I'll go ahead and pass this. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 23:56, 19 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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-{{tl|doing}} <font color="#cc6600">[[User:David Fuchs|Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs]]</font><sup><small>(<font color="#ff6600">[[User talk:David Fuchs|talk]]</font>)</small></sup> 16:29, 13 January 2016 (UTC)
+{{tl|doing}} [[User:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#cc6600;">Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs</span>]]<sup><small>([[User talk:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#ff6600;">talk</span>]])</small></sup> 16:29, 13 January 2016 (UTC)
 Overall, a solid article (and the first I've heard that they ever made a video for Bionicle—hadn't thought about those toys in years!) First pass comments below:
 *<u>Prose</u>:
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 **Sources generally look reliable, with some exceptions that seem iffy or I’m unfamiliar with: BZPower.com, Sci Film, and Absolute Write.
 **Did a spot-check on current refs 1, 11, 15, 21, 33, and didn't notice any issues with close paraphrasing or inaccurate statements.
-—<font color="#cc6600">[[User:David Fuchs|Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs]]</font><sup><small>(<font color="#ff6600">[[User talk:David Fuchs|talk]]</font>)</small></sup> 16:23, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
+—[[User:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#cc6600;">Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs</span>]]<sup><small>([[User talk:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#ff6600;">talk</span>]])</small></sup> 16:23, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
 :{{ping|David Fuchs}} I've attempted to address the cover art fair use rational, and since it doesn't serve its purpose have removed the other image (it was just a hangover from the article's original form). I've also attended to those bits of prose you pointed out. As to the source: Absolute Write is a reuptable writer-dedicated blog run by professionals in the area, Sci Film is a defunct online magazine that I think is okay, and BZPower.com is a fan site dedicated to Bionicle. I only used them when the information could not be found elsewhere, and (in the case of Absolute Write and BZPower.com) when it was an original interview/behind the scenes look.  --[[User:ProtoDrake|ProtoDrake]] ([[User talk:ProtoDrake|talk]]) 20:52, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
-::Ok. I'm not sure those sources would stand up to FA standards but for GA they're probably fine. Did a look through again and didn't see any other outstanding issues so I'll go ahead and pass this. <font color="#cc6600">[[User:David Fuchs|Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs]]</font><sup><small>(<font color="#ff6600">[[User talk:David Fuchs|talk]]</font>)</small></sup> 23:56, 19 January 2016 (UTC)
+::Ok. I'm not sure those sources would stand up to FA standards but for GA they're probably fine. Did a look through again and didn't see any other outstanding issues so I'll go ahead and pass this. [[User:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#cc6600;">Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs</span>]]<sup><small>([[User talk:David Fuchs|<span style="color:#ff6600;">talk</span>]])</small></sup> 23:56, 19 January 2016 (UTC)