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'''Sray13 Review:''' The electrical activity we see on an EEG are called brain waves. The four waves: alpha, beta, theta, and delta are all seen in the different stages of sleep. Alpha waves are seen when a person is in a resting state, but is still awake. Their eyes may be closed and all of their body is taking a break (I would suggest re-wording this). Beta waves take over alpha waves when a person is at attention, completing a task, or concentrating on something. Theta waves occur during the period of a person being awake to them transaction into Stage 1 of sleep (grammatic corrections). Delta waves are seen in stage 3 and 4 of sleep, when a person is in there deepest of sleep. |
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'''Chodges8 review:''' So far I am not really sure if what you uploaded was just what you added or there are tiny changes you forgot to indicate. Either way there are a few grammatical errors you can fix such as this sentence: "Delta waves are seen in stage 3 and 4 of sleep, when a person is in '''there''' deepest of sleep." This is grammatically incorrect and it should be "their" instead of "there." There is always room for growth since we are just starting reviewing and contributing to these articles. Overall this is a great topic and I hope to see whatever interesting information you add to this particular article! |
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Review response: I have changed the grammatical error that was brought to my attention in the review. I changed "there" to "their" to meet the grammatical requirements for this sentence. I also made the grammatical correct in the sentence above in the review. I made so changes to the sentence suggested to reword. I think these changes have improved my draft. |
'''Review response''': I have changed the grammatical error that was brought to my attention in the review. I changed "there" to "their" to meet the grammatical requirements for this sentence. I also made the grammatical correct in the sentence above in the review. I made so changes to the sentence suggested to reword. I think these changes have improved my draft. |
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Sray13 Review: The electrical activity we see on an EEG are called brain waves. The four waves: alpha, beta, theta, and delta are all seen in the different stages of sleep. Alpha waves are seen when a person is in a resting state, but is still awake. Their eyes may be closed and all of their body is taking a break (I would suggest re-wording this). Beta waves take over alpha waves when a person is at attention, completing a task, or concentrating on something. Theta waves occur during the period of a person being awake to them transaction into Stage 1 of sleep (grammatic corrections). Delta waves are seen in stage 3 and 4 of sleep, when a person is in there deepest of sleep.
Chodges8 review: So far I am not really sure if what you uploaded was just what you added or there are tiny changes you forgot to indicate. Either way there are a few grammatical errors you can fix such as this sentence: "Delta waves are seen in stage 3 and 4 of sleep, when a person is in there deepest of sleep." This is grammatically incorrect and it should be "their" instead of "there." There is always room for growth since we are just starting reviewing and contributing to these articles. Overall this is a great topic and I hope to see whatever interesting information you add to this particular article!
Review response: I have changed the grammatical error that was brought to my attention in the review. I changed "there" to "their" to meet the grammatical requirements for this sentence. I also made the grammatical correct in the sentence above in the review. I made so changes to the sentence suggested to reword. I think these changes have improved my draft.
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Article portion: During slow-wave sleep, humans secrete bursts of growth hormone. All sleep, even during the day, is associated with secretion of prolactin.
Key physiological methods for monitoring and measuring changes during sleep include electroencephalography (EEG) of brain waves, electrooculography (EOG) of eye movements, and electromyography (EMG) of skeletal muscle activity. Simultaneous collection of these measurements is called polysomnography, and can be performed in a specialized sleep laboratory. Sleep researchers also use simplified electrocardiography (EKG) for cardiac activity and actigraphy for motor movements.
My contribution: The electrical activity we see on an EEG are called brain waves. The Four waves seen are; Alpha waves, beta waves, theta waves, and delta waves are all seen in the different stages of sleep. Alpha waves are seen when a person is resting, but are still awake. Their eyes may be closed and all of their body is taking a break, where the body is starting to slow down. Beta waves take over alpha waves when a person is at attention as they might be completing a task or concentrating on something. Theta waves occur during the period of a person being awake, and continue they transition into Stage 1 of sleep. Delta waves are seen in stage 3 and 4 of sleep, when a person is in their deepest of sleep. (~~~~)
References
Richard B. Berry, Mary H. Wagner, Patient 2 - Alpha Rhythm and Sleep Spindles in a 20-Year-Old Man, Editor(s): Richard B. Berry, Mary H. Wagner, Sleep Medicine Pearls (Third Edition), W.B. Saunders, 2015, Pages 14-16, ISBN 9781455770519, https://doi.org/10.1016/B978-1-4557-7051-9.00055-3. (https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/B9781455770519000553)
Can you bring over a portion of the existing article and then highlight your changes (bold, italics, or underline)? That will make it clear how much of this is new content and how it will fit in with the existing article. I am not sure I would use the phrase "their body is taking a break"? This feels vague and I am not sure what you mean. The following statement "Theta waves occur during the period of a person being awake to them transaction into Stage 1 of sleep" needs some grammatical correction. I am not sure what "to them transaction into Stage 1 of sleep" means. Are you trying to convey information about transitions? Finally, how does your citation fit into the information above? Can you use Wikipedia to add the citation in as you did during the assigned exercise? (LIZ)