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Battle of St. Michaels

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get it to Good Article.

Thanks, TwoScars (talk) 19:32, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

Comments from Gerald Waldo Luis

Looks like a decent GA-worthy article, with a couple of things to add and fix. Rarely go through war-related articles, so forgive any mistakes. This is one of the few war articles where I can actually follow through, so good job with this. On the other hand if you mind, can you also put suggestions in my PR of To Fly!? It'll help a lot. GeraldWL 07:52, 17 December 2021 (UTC)

Miscellania

• Not all images seem to have alt texts.
• Protip: use this tool to automatically archive references, did it for you here (although it doesn't always work).
• This article needs consistency on St. Michaels: St. Michaels or Saint Michaels?
• First mentions of city names should be followed by the state, e.g. "Baltimore, Maryland".
• "a.k.a." --> "also known as".
• Suggest removing the Refbegin template in Further reading, as there's only one source.

Lead

• "was a small skirmish"-- what determines "small" here?
• "(later named Miles)"-- there's no mention of this in the article body. I would suggest putting this next to "Saint Michaels River" at the "Disposition" section, then put a citation there to support the claim of renaming.

Background

• "Members of the Democratic-Republican Party" --> "On the other hand, members of the Democratic-Republican Party".
• "when ships were sent to close the port of New York" --> "when ships were sent to close the Port of New York and New Jersey".
  • Port of New York and New Jersey was created in 1921, while the date of this battle is 1813. Source does not mention New Jersey. TwoScars (talk) 17:45, 17 December 2021 (UTC)
• "Havre de Grace, Maryland"-- link Maryland.
• "Washington" --> "Washington, D.C."
• Link Siege of Washington and Burning of Washington, capitalize "s" "b" and "w".

Opposing forces

• Link West Indies.
• After "HMS Marlborough", move the ref 11 to the end of the next sentence ("regiment.[12]"), then remove the ref 12 at the Marlborough sentence.
• "Marlborough" "Chesapeake" and "Leopard" must be italicized.
• "Royal Navy"-- link to said Royal Navy?
• The paragraph states three batteries, but the bulleted list says two?
• "two regiments, cavalry"-- is that two calvary or one?

Disposition of forces and movement to battle

• Link Annapolis, Maryland.
• Link Maryland's Eastern Shore.
• Remove ref 24 after "Talbot County" as it's duplicate.
• Unitalicize "Saint Michaels Patriotic Blues".
• Link deserter.

Battle - Fighting Ends

• "where it could fire" --> "where it would fire".
• "less than half a mile"-- any specific number?
• "By 9:00 am"-- timezone?
• Benson or General Benson?

Aftermath

• "William Merchant's "Cannonball House" in 2021" --> "William Merchant's "Cannonball House" (pictured 2021)"
• "a failure—and the excuse given was that" --> "a failure, with the reason being that"
• "We know that Benson's report said"-- remove the "We know that" as unnecessary and first-person.
• "Cannon overlooking harbor at St. Michaels in 2021" --> "Cannon overlooking harbor at St. Michaels (pictured 2021)"