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Picking this one up. Review to follow once the Bot checks in. [[User:Hawkeye7|<span style="color:#800082">Hawkeye7</span>]] [[User_talk:Hawkeye7|<span style="font-size:80%">(discuss)</span>]] 00:08, 30 November 2022 (UTC) |
Picking this one up. Review to follow once the Bot checks in. [[User:Hawkeye7|<span style="color:#800082">Hawkeye7</span>]] [[User_talk:Hawkeye7|<span style="font-size:80%">(discuss)</span>]] 00:08, 30 November 2022 (UTC) |
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Sigh. Article is okay. I wouldn't recommend taking it beyond GA though. |
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* Although his full name is mention ed in the lead, it should also be in the body. |
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* Similarly, his nickname of Bones is in the infobox, and is covered by ref 1, but should be in the body. |
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* MOS uses British rather than American ordinals ([[MOS:ORDINAL]]) so 32nd not 32nd, 93rd not 93d etc |
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* Link U.S. Readiness Command, MacDill Air Force Base, second lieutenant, P39, Soviet Union, Bendix Trophy (on first occurrence), Tripler Army Medical Center |
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* " 335th FS:" should be "335th FIS" but I'd prefer if it were not abbreviated. |
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* At the start of "Post war" and "Later life", replace "he" with his name. |
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* "30 to 200 miles" Add conversion template so readers will know how far this is |
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* Do we have to have so many paragraphs in a row starting with "In <date>"? |
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* Two different date formats used in the references. Recommend using mdy consistently (although US military bios should use dmy ([[WP:STRONGNAT]]) |
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[[User:Hawkeye7|<span style="color:#800082">Hawkeye7</span>]] [[User_talk:Hawkeye7|<span style="font-size:80%">(discuss)</span>]] 00:36, 30 November 2022 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 00:08, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
Picking this one up. Review to follow once the Bot checks in. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:08, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
Sigh. Article is okay. I wouldn't recommend taking it beyond GA though.
- Although his full name is mention ed in the lead, it should also be in the body.
- Similarly, his nickname of Bones is in the infobox, and is covered by ref 1, but should be in the body.
- MOS uses British rather than American ordinals (MOS:ORDINAL) so 32nd not 32nd, 93rd not 93d etc
- Link U.S. Readiness Command, MacDill Air Force Base, second lieutenant, P39, Soviet Union, Bendix Trophy (on first occurrence), Tripler Army Medical Center
- " 335th FS:" should be "335th FIS" but I'd prefer if it were not abbreviated.
- At the start of "Post war" and "Later life", replace "he" with his name.
- "30 to 200 miles" Add conversion template so readers will know how far this is
- Do we have to have so many paragraphs in a row starting with "In <date>"?
- Two different date formats used in the references. Recommend using mdy consistently (although US military bios should use dmy (WP:STRONGNAT)