Wikipedia:Featured article review/Heavy metal music/archive1

Heavy metal music

Messages left at Metal and Music genres. LuciferMorgan 17:49, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

I'm nominating this because;

1. The article fails criterion 1. c. LuciferMorgan 09:21, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

• Comment I've only closely read the lead, which definitely needs an expansion, and skimmed through the rest. The lead suggests that the article may need a copyedit, as it starts out with a long, winding snake, and continues with an awkward "Out of heavy metal various subgenres later evolved". The two introductory grafs of the Characteristics section need help. Gzkn 12:34, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
• Comment — I am very familiar with this article for I have done a complete translation from English to French to use on the French Wikipedia. I have read all of it in depth and have looked through some of the book sources. I think it would be clearer if LuciferMorgan gave us greater description of how the article fails criterion 1C. Is it the verifiability, the reliable sources, or is it simply the fact that information could be considered factually inaccurate? Thanks in advance for clarifying that. Zouavman Le Zouave _{(Talk to me! • O))))} 16:56, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

It's verifiability and that uncited information could be considered factually inaccurate. Also POV is prevalent - Dio being "legendary" is a debatable opinion, and fails NPOV when uncited for example. The sources used for citations in the article so far seem reliable, but there is a lot of uncited info. LuciferMorgan 17:48, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

• Comment Okay this is definitely clearer ^^ Thanks. I'll see if I can help the article a bit by checking for uncited POV for example, it's not too hard... :) Zouavman Le Zouave _{(Talk to me! • O))))} 18:25, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

Cites could benefit from using citeweb - some don't have retrieval dates. There's also some embedded links in the article - if they're reliable sources which verify a point, convert them to inline citation, though if not, rid of them. LuciferMorgan 09:34, 28 February 2007 (UTC)

• Fails criteria 3 Fair use image Image:CNINJA.jpg does not contribute substantially to the text.
• Comment I've been meaning to work on this article in-depth for over a year, but I've always had other projects that I was more interested in completing. Simply put, this article is over two years out of date regarding current FA criteria and is missing vital contributions like inline citations, soundclips, and free images. An example of what needs to be done with this article is punk rock, which underwent an FAR not too long ago and came out vastly improved. I'm going to devote more of my time to this article to bring it up to code, but I'm going to need help. Lots of it. WesleyDodds 09:27, 2 March 2007 (UTC)

We should agree on a structure in advance, and then farm out sub sections to different editors. I'll volunteer for black and doom metal; was that age the time, and have the t-shirts, vinyl and posters to prove it, though luckly not the tats. Can also look after sound files if suggestions are made on talk. Ceoil 00:07, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

I'm most interested in early heavy metal (Yes, Zeppelin is metal. Of course we also have to mention revisionist tendencies to place Sabbath as the first "true" metal band) and New Wave of British Heavy Metal. I can help with the alternative/nu metal section, which is mostly in need of keeping out bias. I'm also keen on structuring the article. It's basically there, but we should probably make it more like punk rock, a rock genre similar in scope, breadth and longevity. WesleyDodds 01:33, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

Meh, Zeppelin. - Otherwise agree, but structure should be laid out on talk and agreed before overhaul. You work on this, I'll work on that. Ceoil 01:40, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

Looking at the page again we really need someone to focus on arranging and cleaning up the "Characteristics" section. Much of the expansion has occured in the last month or so, and it's become messy and unwieldy. WesleyDodds 03:27, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

Scissors needed. Ceoil 10:37, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

I'll start on ce and standardizing ref style after y'all do a couple more days work. Article filled with typos: obviously "Led Zeppelin" should be "Lead Zeppelin," "nu metal" must be "new metal" (unless when it's Yiddish metal, of course), and who ever heard of an oyster with an umlaut?! Öy, zoso much work to do on this one.—DCGeist 19:13, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

• Comment This is becoming difficult. See the talk page for more info. WesleyDodds 08:30, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
• Comment So, without trying to sound like I'm being critical, everyone is in disagreement over various aspects of heavy metal's evolution? LuciferMorgan 17:56, 6 March 2007 (UTC)

It's more that there's some differing interpretations among various editors that we're nevertheless willing to discuss and work out, except for one editor who is forcefully pushing his POV (incidentally, he's got a temp ban right now). WesleyDodds 04:10, 7 March 2007 (UTC)