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Humpback Whale

Message left at WikiProject Cetaceans cheers, Casliber | talk | contribs 12:31, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Some issues that need to be fixed: 1a/2a) The lead is not brilliant, and the excess of numbers and parentheses makes the section hard to read. 1c) The article is severely short of references; there are only two inline citations. 2b) The sections are a bit out of order, in my opinion. For example, the "Threats Beyond Hunting" section could follow "Whaling" in order to establish a smoother flow. King of ♥ ♦ ♣ ♠ 05:02, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I do see some issues here, lack of comprehensiveness first and foremost. Information about the species itself (reproduction, taxonomy...) is underweighted compared to its interactions with humans (whalewatching, whaling, trivia). MOS problems include external jumps, too many external links, unnecessary redlinks, and unitalicized species name(s). Also contains a burgeoning and useless trivia section. These can be fixed easily, but comprehensiveness is a biggie. –Outriggr § 06:44, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The good thing is that Blue Whale, Sei Whale and Fin Whale are all featured and provide a good model to re-format the Humpback Whale page. cheers, Casliber | talk | contribs 11:32, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

OK - the article needs a description of the animal as a priority. Pretty basic really. The other 3 articles have a taxonomy section too. cheers, Casliber | talk | contribs 11:39, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Problems with WP:LEAD, WP:MSH, and external links (WP:EL, WP:NOT, pruning needed). Footnotes aren't formatted (see WP:CITE/ES). Popular culture has stubby sentences. Is this a citation, or what? The ingestion of saxitoxin, a PSP (paralytic shellfish poison) from contaminated mackerel has been implicated in humpback whale deaths.[Marine Mammal Medicine, 2001] External jumps—examples A photographic catalogue of all known whales in the North Atlantic was developed over this period and is today maintained by Wheelock College (here). and Some scientists (see Mercado). Lots to be done here. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:17, 1 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I got the LEAD into two paras now and it sorta summarises the article, though it desperately needs a description subsection...cheers, Casliber | talk | contribs 00:59, 1 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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	*'''Comments''' Problems with [[WP:LEAD]], [[WP:MSH]], and external links ([[WP:EL]], [[WP:NOT]], pruning needed). Footnotes aren't formatted (see [[WP:CITE/ES]]). Popular culture has stubby sentences. Is this a citation, or what? The ingestion of saxitoxin, a PSP (paralytic shellfish poison) from contaminated mackerel has been implicated in humpback whale deaths.[Marine Mammal Medicine, 2001] External jumps—examples A photographic catalogue of all known whales in the North Atlantic was developed over this period and is today maintained by Wheelock College (here). and Some scientists (see Mercado). Lots to be done here. [[User:SandyGeorgia\|Sandy<font color="green">Georgia</font>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia\|Talk]]) 00:17, 1 April 2007 (UTC)		*'''Comments''' Problems with [[WP:LEAD]], [[WP:MSH]], and external links ([[WP:EL]], [[WP:NOT]], pruning needed). Footnotes aren't formatted (see [[WP:CITE/ES]]). Popular culture has stubby sentences. Is this a citation, or what? The ingestion of saxitoxin, a PSP (paralytic shellfish poison) from contaminated mackerel has been implicated in humpback whale deaths.[Marine Mammal Medicine, 2001] External jumps—examples A photographic catalogue of all known whales in the North Atlantic was developed over this period and is today maintained by Wheelock College (here). and Some scientists (see Mercado). Lots to be done here. [[User:SandyGeorgia\|Sandy<font color="green">Georgia</font>]] ([[User talk:SandyGeorgia\|Talk]]) 00:17, 1 April 2007 (UTC)

			:Well, I got the LEAD into two paras now and it sorta summarises the article, though it desperately needs a '''description''' subsection...cheers, [[User:Casliber\|Casliber]] \| [[User talk:Casliber\|talk]] \| [[Special:Contributions/Casliber\|contribs]] 00:59, 1 April 2007 (UTC)