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All in all, this is very good and only needs these issues addressed to be GA. --[[User:Roisterer|Roisterer]] ([[User talk:Roisterer|talk]]) 06:06, 7 January 2008 (UTC) |
All in all, this is very good and only needs these issues addressed to be GA. --[[User:Roisterer|Roisterer]] ([[User talk:Roisterer|talk]]) 06:06, 7 January 2008 (UTC) |
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In his fourth match, he displayed his batting ability with 58 and 86 against the Clarrie Grimmett led South Australia.[1]
Ambigous line. One would think that Grimmett was the captain of SA
He played in his first Test series, against Wally Hammond's touring Englishmen in 1946-47, setting a record of twenty dismissals in a series.
Be more specific about what the record is. Strudwick took 21 against South Africa in 1913-14 (http://cricketarchive.com/Archive/Players/0/324/t_Batting_by_Season.html ). Tallon was the second to take 20 in a series.
This was highlighted by his 92 in the Third Test at Melbourne, in which he combined with Ray Lindwall in a 154 run partnership in just 92 minutes.
Don't know what is right but Wisden report has 87 minutes Tintin 02:05, 7 June 2007 (UTC)
Perry reference
Hi,
This article needs the full Perry reference somewhere. Just 'Perry (2001) p.167' isn't much help if you want more information. –MDCollins (talk) 17:40, 25 August 2007 (UTC)
Where to from here?
After a lead and new copy edit, does the article need PR or can it now be listed at WP:GAC? -- Mattinbgn\talk 04:07, 12 December 2007 (UTC)
- Having a dip. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:08, 12 December 2007 (UTC)
Good article nomination on hold
Hey there Blnguyen. Before reading this, please keep in mind that I can be a pedant and some of these suggestions could seem very minor. I have reviewed the article and have placed the promotion on hold. During the review, some issues were discovered that can be resolved without a major re-write. This is how the article, as of 6 January 2008, compares against the six good article criteria:
- 1. Well written?: There were a few minor grammar or spelling mistakes, some of which I have already dealt with. For example, there was the odd full stop missing and an excessive word or two. There are some others I should also mention but thought I shouldn't change myself in case other editors feel I have become too involved in the article. These include:
- italisicing Wisden throughout;
- capitalise "Bodyline" (The Invincables are capitalised)
- In the "Post-war resumption of career" section, you mention the "Clarrie Grimmett led South Australia." This makes Grimmett sound like the captain. Would "Grimmett led South Australian bowling attack be preferable?
- Under the "Invincibles Tour" section, there is a sentence that ends "McCool was not to play a Test on the tour, as Johnson was the only regular spinner." I think ..."leaving Johnson as the only regular spinner" would read better.
- At the end of "Later Career" you have the odd not quite sentence "continuing to play in Bundaberg for the next decade." Which needs to be fixed.
If these can be dealt with the article will go a long way towards being GA.
- 2. Factually accurate?: There are a number of unreferenced statements that need to be referenced:
Introduction
- "regarded as one of the finest glovemen in Test history...
First-class debut
- Sentence beginning "Bradman praised Tallon...particularly his ability to glove balls passing down the leg side.
Pre-War non-selection
- The first statement "Queensland was a weak cricketing state" and the rest of the statement claiming the Board of Control picked NSW, Vic and SA players ahead of others also needs one.
- In the next paragraph, the statement that Grimmett and O'Reilly were the world's best leg spinners.
- The unofficial reason of his non-selection being his unfamiliarity with Fleetwood Smith et al.
- Barnett dropping Leyland and Hutton.
- his appealing reaching new levels of sound.
- the fastest Australian to reach the mark (of 100 first-class dismissals).
Post-war resumption of career
- Barnett intended to retire in the near future.
- Walker killed in action
- possibility that selectors would choose younger wicket keepers like Langley or Saggers.
Test debut
- Tallon declaring to Bradman that he would dismiss Hutton down the legside and then the dismissal itself.
- Perry quote about Tallon's trapeze artist act.
- Wisden referring to Tallon's partnership with Lindwall as "hurricane".
- His prolific cutting before getting out to Wright.
- His keeping further lauded in the second innings of the 5th Test.
Invincibles Tour
- He did not wet his inner gloves as was his custom.
- bruised right finger due to Lindwall bouncer.
- new ball every 55 overs = favourable for fast bowling.
- His diving was estimated to have saved around 40 runs.
- Another dive to stop a leg glance resulted in severely bruised little finger.
Other Issues A few other non-references related issues:
- Tallon joining the army. This page lists a few extra details of Tallon's war service.
- Is there any further information on why he decided to retire one match into a season? Sounds like there could be an interesting story behind it.
- Any more info on his 1st marriage? Such as where she might have hailed from (not incredibly important but it seems the section on his life outside of cricket is a bit sparse).
- What did he die of? Any ideas?
- 3. Broad in coverage?: Yes.
- 4. Neutral point of view?: Yes.
- 5. Article stability? Yes.
- 6. Images?: Yes.
All in all, this is very good and only needs these issues addressed to be GA. --Roisterer (talk) 06:06, 7 January 2008 (UTC)
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