Talk:Otto Frederick Hunziker/GA1

GA Review

It's difficult to discern from a brief reading of the article what makes Hunziker notable. The genealogy is very detailed and perhaps submerges the relevant information. There is WP:PEA in the section on his Professorship "It is difficult to overstate the importance..." Ning ning (talk) 07:38, 19 August 2008 (UTC)

Based on your comment, I minimized much of the family discussion by creating a separate stub for the father. Professor Hunziker is notable due to the critical work he performed in the dairy business. His contributions in that industry and hence to the general public's welfare were significant.--Rpclod (talk) 16:53, 22 August 2008 (UTC)

In "Family and Early Life" it is stated that he might have been influenced by Gerber; this is followed by a short resume of part of Gerber's career, the Gerber method for testing fat and the comment "This was one focal area for O.F. Hunzicker". In "Professorship at Purdue" Hunzicker is described as chairing the Committee on Methods of testing Butterfat (excuse the contraction), which seems to be where Gerber's influence was expressed- but the connection is not made there. It night be better to move the Gerber section to the part where Hunziker's chairmanship is mentioned, and find some way of getting rid of the "might" and the "one focal area". Ning ning (talk) 20:31, 27 August 2008 (UTC)

First paragraph of Professorship at Purdue- I think linking the word Dairy to an external site should be avoided, and the link shown separately. Last line of this section says that the Prof O.F. Hunzicker House thereafter housed the Chi Omega sorority- presumably the University named a building after Hunzicker when he left, but this isn't mentioned.

In Professional Life there is a reference to the U.S. Dept of Agriculture selecting Hunzicker to head the "industry and economics" division- these quotes should be removed and the proper title of the division given (it gives the impression that the division was called something else, but was referred to as the "i & e"). Patent numbers are given without specifying whether these are U.S. patents. I think it's den Haag or the Hague, not den Hague; that needs to be checked.

In Death and posthumous honours, what's 46.9% of 283 ? It's probably better to use a whole number, rather than a percentage here. Also the polling method is a bit unclear- I read it as being that they were asked to list significant contributors; Hunzicker was named on 47% of lists. Otherwise it's a puzzle how someone can get 47% of the vote and come third. Ning ning (talk) 20:17, 28 August 2008 (UTC)