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While the structure and content of the article appears sound enough, the quality and accuracy of the English, and hence the factual content and fine detail, is obscured in places by inapproprate vocabulary usage and grammatical errors. This simply not good enough: one expects a much higher standard of textual accuracy in Wiki articles. The prime author of this article is clearly not a native English speaker: as with many speakers of Slavonic and East European languages he/she has made numerous errors in the use of the definite and indefinite articles, and particularly, of the 'omitted' indefinite plural artcle.
While the structure of the article appears sound enough, the quality and accuracy of the English, and hence the factual content and fine detail, is obscured in places by inapproprate vocabulary usage and grammatical errors. This is simply not good enough: one expects a much higher standard of textual accuracy in Wiki articles. The prime author of this article is clearly not a native English speaker: as with many speakers of Slavonic and East European languages he/she has made, among other errors numerous mistakes in the use of the English definite and indefinite articles, and particularly, of the 'omitted' indefinite plural artcle.


Though I have studied European History, it was largely from a British rather than a European perspective. The nineteenth century is not my specialist area, and so I hesitate to intervene in correcting the text in case I should introduce factual errors. A competent native English speaker should undertake a complete revision of the article.
Though I have studied European history, it was largely from a British, rather than a European, perspective. The nineteenth century is not my specialist area, and so I hesitate to intervene in correcting the text, in case I should introduce factual errors. A competent native English speaking historian of the period needs to undertake a complete revision of the article.


I think that the content of the text might usefully be amplified by a timeline and maps to illustrate the main events. [[User:Geoff.powers|Geoff Powers]] ([[User talk:Geoff.powers|talk]]) 10:32, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
I think that the content of the text might usefully be amplified by a timeline and maps to illustrate the main events. [[User:Geoff.powers|Geoff Powers]] ([[User talk:Geoff.powers|talk]]) 10:38, 2 July 2009 (UTC)

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The first line reads Baron Josip Jelačić of Bužim. Shouldn't that be count? He was given the title five years before his untimely death which then passed onto his younger brother. The family is known as the Counts of Bužim or, in Croatian, the Counts Bužimski. It is standard on Wikipedia to use the highest titles. I say change it, but I won't do anything on my own without consensus because I don't want to start a revert war.

--193.198.128.156 18:40, 10 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

An edit concerning Jelačić's missed opportunity

I just added a sentence concerning the fact that Jelačić was, after all, the emperor's man. It is important, I believe all aspects of Jelačić's historical role should be shown clearly. There was a very strong historical opportunity for Croatia to become the first independent south slav state. That could have very well had a strong historical impact on the entire region etc... It has to be pointed out clearly that Jelačić had a choice during the revolution and it's reprecussions must be indicated. I hope you would at least look up the article on the battle of Pakozd (which states some of my wiews on the Count) before deleting the edit. DIREKTOR

One brief question that I had while reading this article. In it, it states that Jelačić largely discouraged the Illyrian Movement but most of the literature I have read on him makes it fairly clear that he was highly sympathetic to the movement's pan-South Slav aims. Certainly, statements like "We are all one people, putting aside [differentiation between] the Serbs and the Croats" / "Mi smo svi jedan narod, ostavimo i Srblje i Hrvate" which he made in front of the Sabor in May 1848 (Jaroslav Šidak, Jugoslavenska enciklopedija) and his enthronement by the Serbian Orthodox Patriarch Rajačić would seem to strongly indicate this. Could someone clarify this?


@ Direktor

That sentence you added is pure fiction. Jelacic had negotiatons with Batthyany last one on July 29. These were pure falior because Batthyany said famous sentence: " where is this Croatia and who are these croats. I don't see nither on the map" As for Jelacic missing the opportunity I agree. His greatest falior was that he accepted everything that Bach orderd.

Petar Kružić

Great leader

Fought western oppression from Croatia, much like Josip Broz Tito

Did he? He supported the Habsburg absolute rule against a liberal revolution. That seems odd enough for a man who fights Western oppression. Nevertheless, I cannot see the point of your remark or its relevance to the article. 84.1.190.103 20:41, 1 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Subjective moral judgement of Jelačić

Subjective opinion should be attributed to a source rather than simply stated, and it should be avoided in the article head. I removed the nice nationalist comment "when he saved Croatia from Hungarian hegemony", it may be put back in some form with appropriate reference. 84.1.190.103 20:47, 1 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Magyar forces?

The use of the word Magyar, an artificial one in an English context, should be limited to applications when it is essential to differentiate between Hungarian nationality ("Magyar") and residence/citizenship in the Kingdom of Hungary ("Hungarian"). The liberal revolution and war of independence in 1848-49 had a distinct international flavour about it, just read the names of the The 13 Martyrs of Arad to get the idea.

I suggest using the less vague words "Revolutionary" and "Imperial" forces or something like that. 84.1.190.103 20:54, 1 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ban

Shouldn't Ban be capitalized since it is a title? 144.89.180.225 (talk) 15:22, 6 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Article reassessed and graded as start class. --dashiellx (talk) 16:56, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

National hero

In all the history books I've read Jelacic is given more as a Habsburg collaborator than a national hero -- this is the first I've heard of it. Subjective view needed? --81.109.192.190 (talk) 11:22, 3 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

What date are those history books? I've found the older they are, i.e. published during Yugoslavia, they tend to portray the Austrian collaborator view. "Newer" books written after the war tend to portray him heroically. Also, I found people that grew up with Yugoslav schooling (i.e. my father) view Jelacic negatively, while the younger generation don't. Can anyone else clarify this? --Jesuislafete (talk) 17:07, 3 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Language

While the structure of the article appears sound enough, the quality and accuracy of the English, and hence the factual content and fine detail, is obscured in places by inapproprate vocabulary usage and grammatical errors. This is simply not good enough: one expects a much higher standard of textual accuracy in Wiki articles. The prime author of this article is clearly not a native English speaker: as with many speakers of Slavonic and East European languages he/she has made, among other errors numerous mistakes in the use of the English definite and indefinite articles, and particularly, of the 'omitted' indefinite plural artcle.

Though I have studied European history, it was largely from a British, rather than a European, perspective. The nineteenth century is not my specialist area, and so I hesitate to intervene in correcting the text, in case I should introduce factual errors. A competent native English speaking historian of the period needs to undertake a complete revision of the article.

I think that the content of the text might usefully be amplified by a timeline and maps to illustrate the main events. Geoff Powers (talk) 10:38, 2 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]