Talk:Eberly College of Arts and Sciences: Difference between revisions
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Expand the lead paragraph to talk about research, current administration, perhaps include citations of the college mission. |
Expand the lead paragraph to talk about research, current administration, perhaps include citations of the college mission. |
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Be careful of statement that sound like bias. For example, you state that Eberly "remains at the very heart of the University." This feels like marketing for the college. Change it to facts backed up by reference. Facts could be citations of administrators/presidents/deans; it could also be statistics. |
Be careful of statement that sound like bias. For example, you state that Eberly "remains at the very heart of the University." This feels like marketing for the college. Change it to facts backed up by reference. Facts could be citations of administrators/presidents/deans; it could also be statistics. |
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Revision as of 15:24, 11 September 2009
This is a good start. However, take a look at the link to the deletion page discussion. You're being asked to add more substance.
Some thoughts:
Expand the lead paragraph to talk about research, current administration, perhaps include citations of the college mission.
Be careful of statement that sound like bias. For example, you state that Eberly "remains at the very heart of the University." This feels like marketing for the college. Change it to facts backed up by reference. Facts could be citations of administrators/presidents/deans; it could also be statistics.
Both would be a good idea. Be alert to other, similar marketing-speak statements.
I think you need sections on Research, Administration, and the College Mission.--Sandybaldwin (talk) 15:07, 11 September 2009 (UTC)