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I would add the date of the Motor City Nine event since you mention the year of the 1969 march. [[User:Italianviolets|Italianviolets]] ([[User talk:Italianviolets|talk]]) 01:34, 24 May 2010 (UTC) |
I would add the date of the Motor City Nine event since you mention the year of the 1969 march. [[User:Italianviolets|Italianviolets]] ([[User talk:Italianviolets|talk]]) 01:34, 24 May 2010 (UTC) |
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Also, maybe elaborate a little bit more when you say "she declared the school a prison" since it seems a bit abrupt. [[User:Italianviolets|Italianviolets]] ([[User talk:Italianviolets|talk]]) 01:37, 24 May 2010 (UTC) |
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Sections
Do you think that it might enhance readability/ease of use to split the entry into sections? For example, you could split each of the specific cases that you cite into sections, so that users can easily find what they're looking for. Wrih (talk) 03:50, 22 May 2010 (UTC)
Possible enhancements
Some suggestions that I think will enhance your post are describing or putting a link to “Motor City Nine.” As well as giving an overview or providing a link for the Weather statement. Something I think could use clarification is when you state that a “handful of students followed the women as they marched” what women are you referring to because only Eleanor Raskin is mentioned, if possible maybe add more participants names. Jlh42 (talk)
I would add the date of the Motor City Nine event since you mention the year of the 1969 march. Italianviolets (talk) 01:34, 24 May 2010 (UTC)
Also, maybe elaborate a little bit more when you say "she declared the school a prison" since it seems a bit abrupt. Italianviolets (talk) 01:37, 24 May 2010 (UTC)