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::Most of this can be found in the [[Australia Zoo]] article and on the [http://www.australiazoo.com.au Australia Zoo website]. [[User:ZooPro|<font color="#004730" face="Papyrus">'''Zoo'''</font>]][[User talk:ZooPro|<font color="#FFD200" face="Papyrus">'''Pro'''</font>]] 11:39, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
::Most of this can be found in the [[Australia Zoo]] article and on the [http://www.australiazoo.com.au Australia Zoo website]. [[User:ZooPro|<font color="#004730" face="Papyrus">'''Zoo'''</font>]][[User talk:ZooPro|<font color="#FFD200" face="Papyrus">'''Pro'''</font>]] 11:39, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
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:::Yeah, I know, although that article is pretty patchy too and light on the area that is relevant to Steve taking over. [[User:Casliber|Casliber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 11:43, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
:::Yeah, I know, although that article is pretty patchy too and light on the area that is relevant to Steve taking over. [[User:Casliber|Casliber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 11:43, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
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::::If only life experience counted as a reliable source I could give you a full run down of it all. [[User:ZooPro|<font color="#004730" face="Papyrus">'''Zoo'''</font>]][[User talk:ZooPro|<font color="#FFD200" face="Papyrus">'''Pro'''</font>]] 13:13, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
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All in all, a good start, but I think I have flung up a fair bit of material to cover (I was going to do more copyediting but I think we need to get the content right first). I often let these reviews hang around for a while so a good job is better than a slap-dash one. Cheers, [[User:Casliber|Casliber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 09:46, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
All in all, a good start, but I think I have flung up a fair bit of material to cover (I was going to do more copyediting but I think we need to get the content right first). I often let these reviews hang around for a while so a good job is better than a slap-dash one. Cheers, [[User:Casliber|Casliber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 09:46, 13 January 2011 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:12, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
Okay, I'll make straightforward copyedits and style improvements as I go. Please correct me if I guff the meaning. I'll jot notes below: Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:12, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
- If there's no chance the commented-out images can be used, why not just remove them?
- Refs need more information. I find using the various cite formats helps.
- Surely Marriage and family belongs in a biography rather than career section?
- Given The Crocodile Hunter was his main show, this is underrepresented in the article. A bit more about it would be good - potted summary of format (there is also a dead link in this section)
- Actually, I'd rename the The Crocodile Hunter section to The Crocodile Hunter and related work - this allows us to place some of the material of basically similar work (10 deadliest snakes and movie spinoff) into that section. The Other television and film work can also include the media campaign material really too.
- Streamlining these subsections allows us to place the material in a more chronological order - currently it jumps back and forth a bit which is a bit confusing.
- Also, the mention of Australia Zoo is pretty brief and a little confusing. A little more on how and when they assumed control, and when they renamed it, and if they impressed a change in direction from his father would be good to add.
- Most of this can be found in the Australia Zoo article and on the Australia Zoo website. ZooPro 11:39, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
- Yeah, I know, although that article is pretty patchy too and light on the area that is relevant to Steve taking over. Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:43, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
- If only life experience counted as a reliable source I could give you a full run down of it all. ZooPro 13:13, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
- Yeah, I know, although that article is pretty patchy too and light on the area that is relevant to Steve taking over. Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:43, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
- Most of this can be found in the Australia Zoo article and on the Australia Zoo website. ZooPro 11:39, 13 January 2011 (UTC)
All in all, a good start, but I think I have flung up a fair bit of material to cover (I was going to do more copyediting but I think we need to get the content right first). I often let these reviews hang around for a while so a good job is better than a slap-dash one. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:46, 13 January 2011 (UTC)