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Per [[User:Val42|Val42]]'s criticism of my structure of the article:<br> |
Per [[User:Val42|Val42]]'s criticism of my structure of the article:<br> |
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The original structure was better thought out. The "Content" is really an extension of the basic description in the intro, and the section on "Detractors" relates to (and is therefore a subset of) the "Event" itself. <font style="background: lightblue" color="#000000"> '''GUÐSÞEGN''' </font> – <small>[[User:Guðsþegn|U]][[User talk:Guðsþegn|T]][[Special:Emailuser/Guðsþegn|E]][[WP:X|X]]</small> – 06:25, 3 March 2006 (UTC) |
The original structure was better thought out. The "Content" is really an extension of the basic description in the intro, and the section on "Detractors" relates to (and is therefore a subset of) the "Event" itself. <font style="background: lightblue" color="#000000"> '''GUÐSÞEGN''' </font> – <small>[[User:Guðsþegn|U]][[User talk:Guðsþegn|T]][[Special:Emailuser/Guðsþegn|E]][[WP:X|X]]</small> – 06:25, 3 March 2006 (UTC) |
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:I thought that the way that way that I'd restructured it read slightly better, but not enough to argue over. [[User:Val42|Val42]] 06:21, 5 March 2006 (UTC) |
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Per [[User:Val42|Val42]]'s so far cryptic mention of wanting to address POV in the article:<br> |
Per [[User:Val42|Val42]]'s so far cryptic mention of wanting to address POV in the article:<br> |
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I think I have been very fair in creating this article. If there is POV, it is perhaps that the section entitled "The Event" sounds too much like a tourism bureau advertisement (though it is original text, as is the whole thing). I'm interested in hearing your critique. I do not want the article to carry bias. <font style="background: lightblue" color="#000000"> '''GUÐSÞEGN''' </font> – <small>[[User:Guðsþegn|U]][[User talk:Guðsþegn|T]][[Special:Emailuser/Guðsþegn|E]][[WP:X|X]]</small> – 06:35, 3 March 2006 (UTC) |
I think I have been very fair in creating this article. If there is POV, it is perhaps that the section entitled "The Event" sounds too much like a tourism bureau advertisement (though it is original text, as is the whole thing). I'm interested in hearing your critique. I do not want the article to carry bias. <font style="background: lightblue" color="#000000"> '''GUÐSÞEGN''' </font> – <small>[[User:Guðsþegn|U]][[User talk:Guðsþegn|T]][[Special:Emailuser/Guðsþegn|E]][[WP:X|X]]</small> – 06:35, 3 March 2006 (UTC) |
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:Jade Knight has fixed some of the POV. The POV not yet fixed is the first sentence of "The Event"; it does read too pro-LDS Church. The "Content" section has the same problem, but not as much. [[User:Val42|Val42]] 06:21, 5 March 2006 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 06:21, 5 March 2006
Structure
Per Val42's criticism of my structure of the article:
The original structure was better thought out. The "Content" is really an extension of the basic description in the intro, and the section on "Detractors" relates to (and is therefore a subset of) the "Event" itself. GUÐSÞEGN – UTEX – 06:25, 3 March 2006 (UTC)
- I thought that the way that way that I'd restructured it read slightly better, but not enough to argue over. Val42 06:21, 5 March 2006 (UTC)
POV
Per Val42's so far cryptic mention of wanting to address POV in the article:
I think I have been very fair in creating this article. If there is POV, it is perhaps that the section entitled "The Event" sounds too much like a tourism bureau advertisement (though it is original text, as is the whole thing). I'm interested in hearing your critique. I do not want the article to carry bias. GUÐSÞEGN – UTEX – 06:35, 3 March 2006 (UTC)
- Jade Knight has fixed some of the POV. The POV not yet fixed is the first sentence of "The Event"; it does read too pro-LDS Church. The "Content" section has the same problem, but not as much. Val42 06:21, 5 March 2006 (UTC)