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| <small><nowiki><ref>{{cite journal|last=Engel|first=BT|coauthors=Nikoomanesh, P; Schuster, MM|title=Operant conditioning of rectosphincteric responses in the treatment of fecal incontinence.|journal=The New England journal of medicine|date=1974 Mar 21|volume=290|issue=12|pages=646–9|pmid=4813725}}</ref></nowiki></small> |
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Reviewer: Jmh649 (talk · contribs) 18:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC)
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With Doc's permission, I'm going to help out to try to finish up and close out this GA review. Zad68
23:17, 29 January 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks...Lesion (talk) 23:30, 29 January 2013 (UTC)
- Sure... I am reviewing the older comments from Doc and Bios and seeing if they've been addressed. If they have, I'm going to leave them in the sections labeled for Doc and Bios; if not, I'll bring them forward to here. Then, I'll close off the older sections. This way, we'll all be working off of only this one review section.
Zad68
03:57, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
- Sure... I am reviewing the older comments from Doc and Bios and seeing if they've been addressed. If they have, I'm going to leave them in the sections labeled for Doc and Bios; if not, I'll bring them forward to here. Then, I'll close off the older sections. This way, we'll all be working off of only this one review section.
Did more tonight... will probably take a few more nights to get through the first thorough read. Generally looking good, however the article has a tendency to use what looks more like shorthand notes rather than spelling things out completely in words. This is mentioned in tonight's notes. Zad68
05:08, 31 January 2013 (UTC)
Started to do more tonight and I feel the article needs some more general reorganization, I am seeing a lot of cases where I'm reading sections and finding content I am not expecting to find in that section... Zad68
05:12, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
- no rush... if u can give specific details of this concern the next time u take this on, then maybe things could be changed... Lesion (talk) 10:57, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
- Yes I didn't provide details as I was too tired to go into it last night, but I am actually working on doing some of the re-arranging myself. I started last night but didn't finish... it'll be easier just to show you rather than explain. I'll commit the change to the article and then you can look at it, keep it if you like it or revert if you don't, or take pieces of it, etc.
Zad68
14:39, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
- Yes I didn't provide details as I was too tired to go into it last night, but I am actually working on doing some of the re-arranging myself. I started last night but didn't finish... it'll be easier just to show you rather than explain. I'll commit the change to the article and then you can look at it, keep it if you like it or revert if you don't, or take pieces of it, etc.
- no rush... if u can give specific details of this concern the next time u take this on, then maybe things could be changed... Lesion (talk) 10:57, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
Tepi, looking at it more tonight... Some questions about the Classification section:
- "There is no consensus about the best way to classify FI" - sourced to the ASCRS core subjects, but I do not see a discussion of classification in that source document, why am I missing it?
- I think was taken from "also in a striking absence of standardization of definitions and quantitation of fecal incontinence" and on re-reading, this does not really support the statement "There is no consensus about the best way to classify FI". Replaced with "NICE Guidelines" p.29 "There is no consensus on methods of classifying the symptoms and causes of faecal incontinence. The most common classifications include:" supports it better.
- Do you have the ASCRS textbook FI chapter? Is there any way I can review it?
- Yeah I often download pdfs of textbooks... sometimes this can be done "very cheaply". Alternatively, do you have dropbox or something?
- Also, the Classification section isn't being used for what it should be. In medical articles, the Classification section (if it exists) should be a short paragraph explaining how the symptom or disease ends up with its ICD coding, or if there's more than one coding for it, explanations of the different codings - for example, a disease that affects the small intestine or the large intestine may end up with two different codings. Read Medical classification, and take a look at Crohn's disease for the kind of thing we're looking for in the Classification section.
So tonight's request to you is to bring the Classification section in line with Medical classification. I am actually unsure of where all these different classifications are coming from: leakage character, age, gender... I'm expecting to look at one source document and see a list of these classification types but I'm not seeing it. Where did this list of classifications come from, did you develop it yourself by combining what was found in several sources? Thanks.... Zad68
00:41, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- Source was "NICE guielines" p.29. This is a symptom, or so the sources say, and so should comply with WP:MEDMOS#Symptoms or signs...and so should really ahve a classification seciton at all...currently we have a mix of recommended headings for "Diseases or disorders or syndromes", and also some in the wrong order I notice...this makes the bold sections undesirable, and ideally this content could be moved into the rest of the article somehow...
- Suggest 1) merge "prognosis" to end of treatment, 2) possibly merge classification to definitions ? 3) Merge sings and symptoms to end of pathophysiology. I can do this if you are in agreement or maybe u can think of a better way to fit the content into the headings... Lesion (talk) 01:31, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
Template:Multicol-start Recommended:
- Definition
- Differential diagnosis
- Pathophysiology
- Diagnostic approach
- Treatment
- Epidemiology
- History
- Society and culture
- Research
- Other animals
Template:Multicol-break Current article:
- Definition
- Signs and symptoms
- Classification
- Differential diagnosis
- Pathophysiology
- Diagnostic approach
- Treatment
- Prognosis
- Epidemiology
- History
- Society and culture
- Research
Tepi, yes, that's the organization we need to be heading toward. For the source, I'll send you an email so that you can have my email address, will that work? We'll figure out something. Zad68
15:05, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- no problem... I think the rearranged version works fine... Lesion (talk) 17:31, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
Tepi, OK now that I have my hands on Wolff we can move this forward, it's a great resource. The reconfiguration you did earlier today was good. Here's what has to happen next:
- The content currently in Differential diagnosis is really all Causes. The current WP:MEDMOS doesn't recommend a Causes section for a sign/symptom. We have two choices: 1) Move all that content from Differential diagnosis into Pathophysiology or 2) Ignore all the rules and simply create a Causes section even though it's not recommended by WP:MEDMOS. I am kind of voting for #2, especially because that's exactly what Wolff does.
- After you move all that content, Differential diagnosis will be empty, and based on my reading of Wolff, it should be about one paragraph with this in it:
- Differential diagnosis: FI may present with signs similar to:
- Discharge due to fistule, proctitis, and prolapse
- Pseudoincontinence
- Encopresis
- IBS
- Differential diagnosis: FI may present with signs similar to:
and appropriate descriptions of each. Let's try that... Zad68
18:54, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- Confused...I queried what should go in the differential diagnosis section in the past, and was told slightly different by user:Jfdwolff, who stated, "If an article is primarily about a symptom or sign, the sections about differential and diagnostic approach should cover the possible causes (differential) and how physicians will normally distinguish between them (diagnostic approach). An article such as diplopia should contain a referenced list of differential causes, and a section on how diplopia is investigated in routine practice." As such, the section differential diagnosis is intended (or at least the above user thinks so) to be a list of causes, rather than the more strictly correct meaning of differential diagnosis. Please advise... Lesion (talk) 19:15, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- Unless, differential diagnosis is reduced to just a list, and the content moved towards end of pathophysiology... Lesion (talk) 19:20, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- I don't think what JFW is saying is different. There's two types of things we have to get the article to present here: 1) A list of the differential diagnoses of things that FI can look like but aren't FI, and 2) All the different causes of things that are actually FI. For 1) you should give the list of the DDx's and some explanation of their causes - the information a physician would find useful in trying to determine whether a complaint is actually FI or not. If I am understanding it right, soiling due to proctitis wouldn't be coded as FI, and so this should be explained in the DDx section. For 2), that's where your extensive list of causes of FI go. Please tell me if I'm getting the info wrong, all I know about FI is what you've written in this article and what I've read in the sources you've provided. Actually could you get JFDwolff to read this and comment here, just to be sure we get it right? Cheers....
Zad68
19:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)- The example article given for how a differential diagnosis is supposed to look is not very explanatory, diplopia contains a list of causes of diplopia in a "causes" section and doesn't have a diagnostic approach section so it doesn't clarify this at all... I think I understand that you think DDx section here should be a list of things that are similar to FI, but not FI. I can agree that is the meaning of DDX...and one source suggests already a differential, but these states really also fit the definitions of FI (involuntary loss of bowel contents, flatus, mucus, stool etc). With that vague definition, rectal discharge might be considered FI...Re soiling, in other sources, e.g. NICE guidelines, there is a suggestion that it is a subtype of FI. It's just a mess generally, no standardization of terminology from one source to the next... The article used to go into more detail about "subtypes" but I had to remove most of this due to reliance on 1o sources. Agree all content of current "differential diagnosis" section should be moved to "pathophysiology", probably near the end after the description of physiologic continence. Unsure if those conditions listed by ASRCS as differential are truly outside the definitions of FI. At the risk of original thought, we should probably follow the source... Lesion (talk) 19:52, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- I agree that the diplopia did not really seem to be a good example. Maybe JFDwolff was just saying how "it should be" but isn't? I'd actually like him to comment here if you can get him to... Is one of the sources you are using clearly more authoritative than the other? If so just go with how the most authoritative source does it. The Wolff source really seems to lay this out clearly. FI is a chronic problem with the neurological or muscular sensation and/or control of the anal plug area, caused by many possible things. FI isn't temporary loss of control due to terrible diarrhea, and FI isn't soiling due to proctitis, as far as I can tell from my reading of Wolff, are you not reading it the same way?
Zad68
20:02, 4 February 2013 (UTC)- Contacted him. That is a good point, and I see one of the definitions qualifies with a temporal component too: "the recurrent uncontrolled passage of fecal material in an individual ..." This could be considered to exclude discharge and even encopresis, as this I think mostly refers to overflow incontinence in childhood which is transient and not permanent. I'm not confident to say which source is most authoritative. Since ASCRS is the one that actually mentions a differential, and contradictions by other sources are only by extension and not explicitly implied, I've just gone ahead and moved the sections... Lesion (talk) 20:12, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- Great! I took a look at the reorg, and yeah, now it's making more sense to me... super! More later....
Zad68
20:15, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- Great! I took a look at the reorg, and yeah, now it's making more sense to me... super! More later....
- Contacted him. That is a good point, and I see one of the definitions qualifies with a temporal component too: "the recurrent uncontrolled passage of fecal material in an individual ..." This could be considered to exclude discharge and even encopresis, as this I think mostly refers to overflow incontinence in childhood which is transient and not permanent. I'm not confident to say which source is most authoritative. Since ASCRS is the one that actually mentions a differential, and contradictions by other sources are only by extension and not explicitly implied, I've just gone ahead and moved the sections... Lesion (talk) 20:12, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
- I agree that the diplopia did not really seem to be a good example. Maybe JFDwolff was just saying how "it should be" but isn't? I'd actually like him to comment here if you can get him to... Is one of the sources you are using clearly more authoritative than the other? If so just go with how the most authoritative source does it. The Wolff source really seems to lay this out clearly. FI is a chronic problem with the neurological or muscular sensation and/or control of the anal plug area, caused by many possible things. FI isn't temporary loss of control due to terrible diarrhea, and FI isn't soiling due to proctitis, as far as I can tell from my reading of Wolff, are you not reading it the same way?
- The example article given for how a differential diagnosis is supposed to look is not very explanatory, diplopia contains a list of causes of diplopia in a "causes" section and doesn't have a diagnostic approach section so it doesn't clarify this at all... I think I understand that you think DDx section here should be a list of things that are similar to FI, but not FI. I can agree that is the meaning of DDX...and one source suggests already a differential, but these states really also fit the definitions of FI (involuntary loss of bowel contents, flatus, mucus, stool etc). With that vague definition, rectal discharge might be considered FI...Re soiling, in other sources, e.g. NICE guidelines, there is a suggestion that it is a subtype of FI. It's just a mess generally, no standardization of terminology from one source to the next... The article used to go into more detail about "subtypes" but I had to remove most of this due to reliance on 1o sources. Agree all content of current "differential diagnosis" section should be moved to "pathophysiology", probably near the end after the description of physiologic continence. Unsure if those conditions listed by ASRCS as differential are truly outside the definitions of FI. At the risk of original thought, we should probably follow the source... Lesion (talk) 19:52, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
(←) The concept of "differential diagnosis" of symptoms is used in different ways: it could mean both alternative but similar symptoms ("the differential of angina could be oesophageal spasm"), but technically it should refer to the possible causes for these symptoms ("the differential of chest pain is angina, oesophageal spasm, acid reflux, costochondritis etc"). I'd say an article would need to cover both aspects to be complete. JFW | T@lk 13:27, 5 February 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for comment. Using this article as an example, does the ddx section contain the right kind of content? (currently symptoms/sings similar to FI but not technically FI) Or should all the "causes of FI" we just moved to pathophysiology be put back into ddx? Lesion (talk) 14:16, 5 February 2013 (UTC)
- I think differential diagnosis of a symptom compared to differential diagnosis of a specific condition was confusing us. The differential of a symptom is a list of its possible causes and how to separate them, whereas the differential of a specific condition is a list of other conditions which may be similar and need to be distinguished... Lesion (talk) 10:55, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
I've reviewed a bunch more sources and there are some issues to address, please check out the Sourcing section. Zad68
03:53, 22 February 2013 (UTC)
Review of all sources now complete, notes are in the Sources table. Plan to go over article prose again over next few. Also, Tepi, instead of only making notes here on the GA review page I have also made notes in-article about things that need sources, etc. Zad68
03:53, 13 March 2013 (UTC)
More from Biosthmors
- Shouldn't most stuff in Fecal_incontinence#Normal_physiology be moved elsewhere? Pathophysiology sections describe only what directly causes the topic of the article, in my opinion. Biosthmors (talk) 00:52, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
- Yeah I've been mulling that over in my mind... I generally like "backgrounder" information, especially in a general encyclopedia not targeted specifically to a medical audience, but that section is really very large. I was considering asking for it to be cut down by quite a bit. It might make a useful addition to another article. Unless you can think of another place where it could go here in this article?
Zad68
00:55, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
- Yeah I've been mulling that over in my mind... I generally like "backgrounder" information, especially in a general encyclopedia not targeted specifically to a medical audience, but that section is really very large. I was considering asking for it to be cut down by quite a bit. It might make a useful addition to another article. Unless you can think of another place where it could go here in this article?
- It is maybe excessive detail when we could just nest defecation for this subsection? Much of the content is about defecation generally, rather than continence, if that makes sense. Lesion (talk) 01:45, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
- Tepi can you consider, for this article, cutting down that large discussion into like maybe 3-4 sentences of backgrounder? Pull just the information most relevant to the causes of FI. But that was a lot of good work you put into that section, see if there's another article you can merge it into. Adding -- defecation is in terrible shape, please use the content you developed here in that article, it would really help it.
Zad68
04:10, 6 February 2013 (UTC)
- Tepi can you consider, for this article, cutting down that large discussion into like maybe 3-4 sentences of backgrounder? Pull just the information most relevant to the causes of FI. But that was a lot of good work you put into that section, see if there's another article you can merge it into. Adding -- defecation is in terrible shape, please use the content you developed here in that article, it would really help it.
GA table
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Close paraphrase issue, verifiability issue | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | ||
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | References section exists | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | ||
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | ||
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Infobox image is normal function and does not depict FI, I know you're working on getting permission for a FI one, but the one that's there is adequate | |
7. Overall assessment. |
Notes
Note -- the number in parentheses before each item corresponds with the numbering of the GA requirement listed in the GA Table above.
MOS compliance
- (1b) Duplicate links: trauma(tically), rectal discharge, fistulae, obstetric, fistulotomy, anal fistula, rectal prolapse, obstructed defecation, IBS, fecal loading, stroke, MS, dementia, SSRI, antacids, trycyclic antidepressants, piles, abnormal perineal descent, Pudendal nerve terminal motor latency, Endoanal ultrasound, functional, laxative, olestra, loperamide, impaction, dyanmic graciloplasty, sphincterotomy, fistulotomy, hemorrhoidectomy, low anterior rectal resection, colectomy
- fixed... Lesion (talk) 14:29, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
General
- Avoid doing things like "symptom(s)" when you mean "symptom or symptoms", it's not encyclopedic, you can generally just use the plural.
- Done
Lead
- (1a) FI is not untreatable and almost all people can be helped. -- consider: FI is generally treatable.
- Done
- (1) Lead currently appears unbalanced, as there is too much about the social stigma relative to the proportion of coverage of this in the article.
- Removed sent "Topics relating to feces are taboo" or something, wasn't contributing much.
- (1) Lead should be 3-4 paragraphs, reorganize
- Done
- (1) "which is described as devastating" -- if you semi-quote something here (which is described as... who is describing?) you have to name where it's coming from. But, "devastating" is an emotive rather than informative word, can you describe in exactly what ways it is devastating?
- It was from Yamada's Textbook of Gastroenterology, p1728 "Unfortunately, physicians may not always appreciate the devastating consequences of FI because patients are often embarrassed to discuss their symptoms." Removed devastating and replaced with less emotive description from society and culture section "one of the most psychologically and socially debilitating conditions in an otherwise healthy individual". Lesion (talk) 14:53, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
- (1) FI is generally treatable.[2] There are many different treatments available and management is related to the specific cause(s). Management may be an individualized mix of dietary, pharmacologic and surgical measures. It has been suggested that health care professionals are often poorly informed about treatment options.[2] They may fail to recognize the impact of FI, which is described as one of the most psychologically and socially debilitating conditions in an otherwise healthy individual.[3] -- consider replacing this whole lead paragraph with: FI is one of the most psychologically and socially debilitating conditions in an otherwise healthy individual, but it is generally treatable. Management can be achieved through an individualized mix of dietary, pharmacologic and surgical measures. Health care professionals are often poorly informed about treatment options, and may fail to recognize the impact of FI.
- Done
Definition
- Can you combine the five separate definitions into one general one, something like, "Fecal incontience is generally defined as the inability to voluntarily control the passage of bowel contents through the anal canal and expel it at a socially acceptable location and time." I think it'd be better to combine the imporatant features common to the definitions rather than to just give an unorganized list.
- FI can be divided into those people who experience a defecation urge before leakage, termed urge incontinence, and those who experience no sensation before leakage, termed passive incontinence or soiling. -- I can't find this in the cited NICE source, I don't see "urge incontinence" in the text at all, can you help me find this? ... oh wait maybe I have to search for "urge faecal incontinence"
- It has been suggested that once continence to flatus is lost, it is rarely restored. -- Why "it has been suggested", can you just say "Once continence to flatus is lost..."? Why not if not?
- reworded, but not particularly able to explain why since our source does not either ... "Identification of which symptoms trouble the patient and what can be achieved by repair is essential. Thus continence to flatus can rarely be restored once lost and dietary modification with medication may be more helpful."
- Fecal leakage is a related topic to rectal discharge... fecal mass to be retained in the rectum. -- Is this whole part still on the topic of FI?
- Having studied both FI and rectal discharge a little bit, I feel there is some overlap here and a link to the (currently poor) rectal discharge page is necessary. E.g. both topics tend to list lesions that mechanically prevent anal canal closure, such as fissures. With regards "fecal leakage" this is a subtype of FI...
- Several severity scales have been suggested. the most commonly used are mentioned below. -- can you just get rid of "the most commonly used are mentioned below.", again "below" isn't desired
- Done
- over the age of 4 -- 4 should be spelled out "four" here per WP:MOSNUM
- Done
- (+/- urgency) -- do you mean "with or without"? Use words
- Done
- The Park's incontinence score uses 4 categories, -- it says 4 here but then goes on to list 6 things; 4 --> "four"
- Done I can see why you thought this, it was v confusing before, reworded now.
- This Severity scales section is confusing and needs clarifying
- Done
- Other severity scales include... -- how common are the Wexner and Park's scales relative to all these others?
- Kaiser and the ASCRS textbook seem to suggest that are more commonly used than those listed at the end of the section.
- Requested citation for "Solid stool incontinence may be called complete (or major) incontinence, and anything less as partial (or minor) incontinence" partially supported by ASCRS textbook, p.653 "Partial incontinence may be defined as uncontrolled passage of gas and/or liquids and complete incontinence as the uncontrolled passage of solid feces." Done Lesion (talk) 15:42, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
Differential diagnosis
- symptoms(s) --> symptoms
- Done
- "prtorusion" -- is protrusion meant?
- Done
- If there is a major underlying cause, this may also give rise to specific signs and symptoms in addition to the ones above (e.g. prtorusion of mucosa in external rectal prolapse). -- avoid using page-relative directions like "to the ones above"; consider rewording this as, Any major underlying cause will produce additional signs and symptoms, such as protrusion of mucosa in external rectal prolapse.
- Done
- (1a) Possible close paraphrase/plagiarism problem:
- Source = Focal defects (e.g. keyhole deformity after previous anorectal surgery) can therefore result in significant symptoms despite a seemingly normal pressure profile.
- Article = Focal defects (e.g. keyhole deformity) can therefore result in significant symptoms despite a seemingly normal anal canal pressures.
- Reword "This means that even with normal anal canal pressure, focal defects such as the keyhole deformity can be the cause of substantial symptoms"
- (1a) FI (and urinary incontinence) may also occur during seizures. -- sourced to Kaiser but can't find "seizures" in the source.
- Added supporting citation for FI during seizure.
- (1a) Nontraumatic conditions interfering with anal canal function include scleroderma... - the source is more specific and says these are causes of anal sphincter weakness, can this be made more specific?
- Reword "Nontraumatic conditions which may cause anal sphincter weakness include scleroderma ..." Lesion (talk) 13:52, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
Pathophysiology
- (1b) Some believe the anorectal angle is one of the most important contributors to continence. -- "Some believe" is WP:WEASEL. I'm not quite seeing this in the source... it talks about the angle but I'm not seeing it stating "one of the most important important contributors", can you help me find where it says this?
- Couldn't find it. Upon rereading parts of The ASCRS textbook, it seems that opinions are divided as to how important the anorectal angle is in continence. Removed this sentence.Lesion (talk) 14:09, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
Diagnostic approach
Please could you go into more detail about the undue tag on the functional FI section and the comment in the sourcing table about the Rome criteria ref not being notable? Lesion (talk) 13:42, 14 March 2013 (UTC)
- Basically my question is: Is "Rome" all that overwhelmingly important and essential to the general topic of FI that it deserves its own section in the article? Is it like the undisputed international standards group regarding the condition? In reviewing the sources I did not get the impression that it was.
Zad68
21:13, 14 March 2013 (UTC)- I think functional causes should be discussed (and is already in the article in the causes section, just not in its own section). According to that UK NICE guidelines doc, "Irritable bowel syndrome" is one of the 9 main subtypes (another is idiopathic cases), and some of the other subtypes could have functional causes too (e.g. fecal loading). This section that is tagged with undue is in the "diagnostic approach" part of the article, and therefore should only include that kind of info... Rome process is fairly authoritative on internationally agreed diagnostic criteria, mostly for research purposes (my impression), and so is potentially a good source to include. Considering that functional causes of FI are notable to discuss in the causes section, I feel it would be good to include this precise set of diagnostic criteria for functional FI. Would it seem less undue without its own section? i.e. it could be merged with the rest of the parent section? Lesion (talk) 21:59, 14 March 2013 (UTC)
- I will look. Agree Rome is a good source, but my WP:UNDUE concern was, they appear to be the only ones talking about "Functional FI", they have their 'own section'. Does nobody else cover Functional FI?
Zad68
03:42, 15 March 2013 (UTC)- Other functional causes/exacerbating factors for FI like IBS and anismus are discussed already in the article's other sections. My understanding is that you want the term "functional" to be supported by another source? This should not be hard to find, but it would probably go to source content in the "causes" section rather than this diagnostic approach section... Lesion (talk) 19:41, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
- I will look. Agree Rome is a good source, but my WP:UNDUE concern was, they appear to be the only ones talking about "Functional FI", they have their 'own section'. Does nobody else cover Functional FI?
- I think functional causes should be discussed (and is already in the article in the causes section, just not in its own section). According to that UK NICE guidelines doc, "Irritable bowel syndrome" is one of the 9 main subtypes (another is idiopathic cases), and some of the other subtypes could have functional causes too (e.g. fecal loading). This section that is tagged with undue is in the "diagnostic approach" part of the article, and therefore should only include that kind of info... Rome process is fairly authoritative on internationally agreed diagnostic criteria, mostly for research purposes (my impression), and so is potentially a good source to include. Considering that functional causes of FI are notable to discuss in the causes section, I feel it would be good to include this precise set of diagnostic criteria for functional FI. Would it seem less undue without its own section? i.e. it could be merged with the rest of the parent section? Lesion (talk) 21:59, 14 March 2013 (UTC)
Treatment
- (1a) Table - four blank lines under Solid, should these cells be merged?
- I'll find out how to do this...
- Done
- Other measures - Doc's concern about too much content regarding pelvic floor exercises
- this issue was resolved and the section rewritten?
- (1a) Dietary modification may be central to successful management -- "may be central": "may be" is a hedge, "central" is emphatic, and together they clash. For which people is it central? Qualify
- This sent used to read "some believe that dietary modificiation is central..." but this was weasel... I could change central -> important.
- A surgical treatment algorithm has been proposed. -- Is this just Wexner's own proposal? Has this proposal been endorsed or mentioned anywhere else? If it's just Wexner's idea and isn't generally accepted, and Wexner isn't a particularly notable leader in the field, it's probably undue to mention it.
- This is based on the diagram on p 116 of "Coloproctology". The text refers to the diagram with "Depending on the underlying condition, various surgical treatment modalities can be offered and a new treatment alogrithm has evolved (Fig. 9.1)." with no reference. Even if it was just Wexner's idea, I think there is an eponymous severity scale, so maybe they are a notable person. This reads badly due to conversion from list to prose, and may be out of date since it does not include some options. Does it contribute significantly to warrant inclusion? Lesion (talk) 15:11, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
- (1a) Symptoms may worsen over time, but is not untreatable and almost all people are helped with conservative management, surgery or both. -- I thought FI itself was a symptom, can a symptom have symptoms? also verb agreement and double-negative, I do not see how "worsen over time" is connected to "treaments and management are available", and the wording here sounds vaguely non-encyclopedic and more "So you have fecal incontinence" brochure; consider something like: FI may worsen over time. Conservative management strategies and surgical treatments are effective and have high rates of success.
- Um... as per WP:MEDMOS#Symptoms or signs it is not recommended to have a section called "signs and symptoms". This section was largely taken from the section "symptoms" on Kaiser. I don't really think this is a problem, but it could potentially be merged with classification by symptom ? I think worsen over time refers to the symptom worsening without treatment. The sentence used to qualify "without treatment" but it was a bit clumsy sounding so I think someone took it out. Lesion (talk) 15:02, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
Epidemiology
History
Society and culture
Research
References
External links
- Doc to review the ones left
- Remaining link is to International Continence Society, international in scope and notable with its own page. I think this is fine... Lesion (talk) 14:35, 31 January 2013 (UTC)
Media
- Copyright status OK
Sourcing
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Are we near an end here?
- Are we near an end here? The page is 90kb and it's been open nearly three months. Any GA criteria surely would've been met by now given all the detail the review has. Wizardman 17:01, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
- Just a few references left to check I think... Lesion (talk) 18:01, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
- It's been slow moving but we're still working on it, if it's not causing any trouble would you mind us leaving it open to work on it? This is an article which is hard to find editors to work on or do GA reviews for...
Zad68
22:33, 7 March 2013 (UTC)- Yes would like to thank Zad68 for all his excellent comments. There is no time limit really. And taking an article from stub to GA is a major undertaking. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 03:11, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
- I'm fine leaving it open a bit longer. Just not used to reviews going into so much detail. Not that I'm complaining, clearly that's going to make the article that much better. Wizardman 05:17, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- Yes we have high standards at WP:MED :-) Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 16:08, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- I was thinking about this myself, simply because this page is a little bit long (which just shows progress)! What if we all decided to close this review, but immediately open another to have a fresh start and a clean GA review to get messy again? =) It may sound silly, but I know I am more willing to leave comments somewhere clean rather than onto a review that is long like this one. Lesion, do you mind withdrawing and starting another GA review, or does that sound de-motivating? For me, it sounds motivating but opinions could easily differ. I'd also like to prevent more random people from popping up and griping about the duration of the review, depsite the article improvement, which should always be the main goal. (That happened to Sasata and I over at Talk:Malaria/GA2.) Or maybe this is a bad suggestion of mine because maybe we really are that close and detailed review is no longer necessary. Biosthmors (talk) 20:13, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- I would be ok with either scenario...would prefer to finish this as I started it...the user who started this thread is also not out of order by commenting - I think it says somewhere GA reviews should only last 1 week? As to whether this RV is near completion, there is a suggestion that zad is going to work through every source. Issues are being raised by this thorough process, so it could be argued that this is worth while, and also probably reflects the guidelines for how to review, see WP:GACN#(1) Well written: "Mistakes to avoid Not checking at least a substantial proportion of sources to make sure that they actually support the statements they're purported to support. (Sources should not be "accepted in good faith": for example, nominators may themselves have left prior material unchecked by assuming good faith."
- The only other RV I saw being done was (Talk:Hemorrhoid/GA1), which I was barely involved in, but did seem to be less thorough. Perhaps because it was written from the start by an experienced editor, and here the article started off mostly based on primary sources... Lesion (talk) 22:07, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- I am committed to moving this GAR forward, and I apologize for having gotten side-tracked. There will be progress this week.
Zad68
03:17, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
- I am committed to moving this GAR forward, and I apologize for having gotten side-tracked. There will be progress this week.
- I was thinking about this myself, simply because this page is a little bit long (which just shows progress)! What if we all decided to close this review, but immediately open another to have a fresh start and a clean GA review to get messy again? =) It may sound silly, but I know I am more willing to leave comments somewhere clean rather than onto a review that is long like this one. Lesion, do you mind withdrawing and starting another GA review, or does that sound de-motivating? For me, it sounds motivating but opinions could easily differ. I'd also like to prevent more random people from popping up and griping about the duration of the review, depsite the article improvement, which should always be the main goal. (That happened to Sasata and I over at Talk:Malaria/GA2.) Or maybe this is a bad suggestion of mine because maybe we really are that close and detailed review is no longer necessary. Biosthmors (talk) 20:13, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- Yes we have high standards at WP:MED :-) Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 16:08, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- I'm fine leaving it open a bit longer. Just not used to reviews going into so much detail. Not that I'm complaining, clearly that's going to make the article that much better. Wizardman 05:17, 10 March 2013 (UTC)
- Yes would like to thank Zad68 for all his excellent comments. There is no time limit really. And taking an article from stub to GA is a major undertaking. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 03:11, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
Archived previous review items
Archived previous review items from Doc James and Biosthmors, mostly addressed, anything not addressed brought foward
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Review started by Doc JamesInitial comments
This is a start. While write more once these are addressed. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 18:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC) Primary sources in this articleBy my count, there are 38/61 references that are primary. Having said that:
I guess there is nothing to do but look at how each primary is used, and see if it can be replaced by a secondary or assess whether it is needed at all. lesion (talk) 19:44, 21 December 2012 (UTC)
Lead
Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 12:04, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
Classification
Differential diagnosisWould be interesting to know how often different surgeries cause FI. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 12:04, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
Treatment
Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 12:28, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
Additional sectionsWhat about section on history of the disease and it treatment? And a section on society and culture which could go into greater depth about economics and stigma. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 12:31, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
TENSI am not seeing this as properly reflecting the sources. We should also state the main conclusions first:
What do you think about the following? Details on how TENS works can be found in the subarticle on the topic.
Medications
Reference densityA number of sentences do not have direct references after them. For example in the first section we have
Does that file ref support all the sentences before it? And if so maybe we can add <!--<ref name="ASCRS core subjects FI" /></blockquote> --> after each one Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 14:02, 4 January 2013 (UTC) We also have large blocks of text that are unreferenced such as
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Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 14:22, 4 January 2013 (UTC)
DelaySorry for the delay. I am currently on the road. Will finish up the review next week. One thing is we write FI a lot. As the article is about this topic it can often just be implied rather than stated much of the time. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 05:33, 11 January 2013 (UTC)
A few more
Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 10:29, 17 January 2013 (UTC)
From Biosthmors
MoreEncyclopedic?The source it is cited to is PMID 20011265, from 2004. Aside from WP:MEDDATE being a concern, since it is from 2004, why say all this to essentially say not much? Biosthmors (talk) 22:21, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
Does pelvic floor exercises work?We have this paragraph
I am reading it and want to know if pelvic floor exercises are useful for FI. I come to this bit after reading a bunch of sentences which say little about effectiveness "therefore be of benefit in FI " but it is unreferenced. I learn that it is good for urinary incontincece but that is not what this section should be about. I finally come to the conclusions at the end "A systematic review on the efficacy of anal sphincter exercises stated that there is a suggestion that sphincter exercises may have a therapeutic effect, but this is not certain. The researchers were unable to make any firm conclusions due to lack of available strong evidence" This should go first and most of the rest should be shortened / moved to the article on pelvic floor exercises. We also just state the facts of the best available literature. Rather than "A systematic review on the efficacy of anal sphincter exercises stated that there is a suggestion that sphincter exercises may have a therapeutic effect, but this is not certain. The researchers were unable to make any firm conclusions due to lack of available strong evidence" How about "The role of pelvic floor exercises in fecal incontinence is poorly determined. While there may be some benefit they appear less useful than implanted sacral nerve stimulators." With the Cochrane review supporting both. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 08:35, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
Images in the leadWould be good to move one of the images to the lead. What about the stylized diagram? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 08:47, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
The first I think is Gray's, so it's already uploaded. I prefer the second image as it is relevant to FI and not just a diagram of normal anatomy. Not sure if they would release it into public domain for this purpose... lesion (talk) 14:22, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
History sectionWhich refs support which line of text? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 08:48, 21 January 2013 (UTC) Same for the prognosis section. Does ref 5 support all the sentences in question? If so could you add <!--<ref name="NICE guidelines" /> --> This will keep people from coming and adding cn tags.Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 08:50, 21 January 2013 (UTC)
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- ^ a b c d e f g h Hosker, G (2007 Jul 18). "Electrical stimulation for faecal incontinence in adults". Cochrane database of systematic reviews (Online) (3): CD001310. doi:10.1002/14651858.CD001310.pub2. PMID 17636665.
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