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Conservation status?

Hey, uhhh....

 conservation status? Please check http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/science/nature/6990095.stm

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Assessed mid-importance for WikiProject Fishes due to conservation status. Neil916 (Talk) 04:06, 22 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Edits on 10.24.13

I'm editing this as a part of class assignment. As of October 24th, 2013, I have added Behavior section.

This article was the subject of an educational assignment in Fall 2013. Further details were available on the "Education Program:Washington University in St. Louis/Behavioral Ecology (Fall 2013)" page, which is now unavailable on the wiki.

Jyn0309 (talk) 17:14, 25 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

There was an extra space between the mating and courtship that I removed.

General:

I would try to create more links to other articles when possible.
Some sentences seem to run-on

Mating:

Grammar:
- "pairing tends to occur among individuals of similar size" instead of "individuals among similar size"
- add a comma before "so the male"

Courtship:

Grammar:
- add a comma after "then"
- add "which is" before when the male
- add an apostrophe "s" after male
- add a comma before which is the last sentence.

Selection of mates

Grammar:
- "initiates" instead of "initiate"
- vary sentences--"it is observed"
- "Females are" instead of "Female are"

Spawning

Grammar:
- Get rid of "only" in "only taking no more"
- don't need comma before "and confine"

Grouping

Grammar:
- don't need "also" if "in addition" is already in the sentence
- add comma before "especially because"
- consider changing to "prevents them from spreading"

VAleles (talk) 17:55, 31 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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 ====Courtship:====
 * Grammar:
-** add "a" before vigorous trembling motion
 ** add a comma after "then"
 ** add "which is" before when the male
-** add an apostrophe "s" after males
+** add an apostrophe "s" after male
+** add a comma before which is the last sentence.
+====Selection of mates====
+* Grammar:
+** "initiates" instead of "initiate"
+** vary sentences--"it is observed"
+** "Females are" instead of "Female are"
+====Spawning====
+*Grammar:
+** Get rid of "only" in "only taking no more"
+** don't need comma before "and confine"
+====Grouping====
+*Grammar:
+** don't need "also" if "in addition" is already in the sentence
+** add comma before "especially because"
+** consider changing to "prevents them from spreading"
 [[User:VAleles|VAleles]] ([[User talk:VAleles|talk]]) 17:55, 31 October 2013 (UTC)