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Hi everyone, I'm a student in a behavioral ecology class and one of my projects focuses on editing this Oreochromis mossambicus article. As such, I will be changing and editing this page alot, beginning with adding some major sections, removing unnecessary information, and moving information around so that it is organized more neatly. If anyone has questions, comments, or concerns, feel free to contact me! MLiu19 (talk) 01:13, 25 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

1) Organizing sections
→I think some of the sections can be made into subsections.
→Ex) Behavior: Social structure, communication, aggression
Breeding: Parental care, reproduction

2) Aggression
→On the last paragraph of this section, it might be nice to elaborate more on how aggression arises. One way of doing this might be to give examples.

3) Redundancy
→Mouthbrooding is both mentioned and explained in Reproduction and Parental Care sections. It might be more appropriate to only mention it in one section. (probably the section that appears first?)
Jyn0309 (talk) 05:01, 29 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Suggested edits

General edits

Hyperlinks! Add them.
Many sections are insubstantial.
The organization of sections probably needs improvement. Many can fit within others

Specific edits:

Summary paragraph

Needs much more information; specifically all the information listed below it.
Hyperlink "Mozanbique"

Description

Lack of citations is unacceptable
"Remarkably robust and fecund" seems to be subjective
Tolerance to varied salinities is "euryhaline," tolerance to varied temperatures is "eurythermal"

Home range

This section is tiny. Expand, if possible
The last sentence is irrelevant to this section

Invasiveness

the desert pupfish hates your fish
Hyperlink!

Social structure

Add hyperlinks
consider expanding this section or creating more paragraphs

Reproduction

See above

Parental care

somewhat "jargony"
Really needs hyperlinks

Bakerb4379 (talk) 00:16, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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Invasiveness: should link the Invasive Species Specialist Group to their Wikipedia page

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