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Finally, I noticed that some concepts that were discussed in each paragraph did not really tie together, for instance the part of paragraph three were u talked about Hippocrates, (Hippocrates, known as the "Father of Modern Medicine", established a medical school at Kos and is the most important figure in ancient Greek medicine. [3] Hippocrates and his students documented numerous illnesses in the Hippocratic Corpus, and developed the Hippocratic Oath for physicians, which is still in use today. The contributions to ancient Greek medicine of Hippocrates, Socrates and others had a lasting influence on Islamic medicine and Medieval European medicine until many of their findings eventually became obsolete in the 14th century.) may actually fit better into the paragraph beneath it.[[User:Mbar3466|Mbar3466]] ([[User talk:Mbar3466|talk]]) 01:20, 17 November 2013 (UTC) |
Finally, I noticed that some concepts that were discussed in each paragraph did not really tie together, for instance the part of paragraph three were u talked about Hippocrates, (Hippocrates, known as the "Father of Modern Medicine", established a medical school at Kos and is the most important figure in ancient Greek medicine. [3] Hippocrates and his students documented numerous illnesses in the Hippocratic Corpus, and developed the Hippocratic Oath for physicians, which is still in use today. The contributions to ancient Greek medicine of Hippocrates, Socrates and others had a lasting influence on Islamic medicine and Medieval European medicine until many of their findings eventually became obsolete in the 14th century.) may actually fit better into the paragraph beneath it.[[User:Mbar3466|Mbar3466]] ([[User talk:Mbar3466|talk]]) 01:20, 17 November 2013 (UTC) |
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I really enjoyed this article. I just have some minor adjustments for certain sections. |
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The introduction: There is a lot of information in this section. I would trim some of the beef in this section and add more to the other sections. It was very overwhelming when first opening the article up. |
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Hippocrates and Hippocratic Medicine: There is very accurate sources here. Very well written section. I also like the pictures in this section. Be careful with commas in this section. Some of the sentences were choppy. Other then that I have no major suggestions for this section. |
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Asclepieia: I like this article. Maybe explain the Rod of Asclepius and the Modern Depiction of Caduceus some. It would really tie well with the article. |
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The only other suggestions I would make is the article is very long with loads of information. Maybe at the start of the article create a timeline of the physicians and their works of medicine. Also, at the end of the article you can put in your sections of "external links" and "further reading" more information. This would clean up the bulk of the article so you are not explaining every little thing on the page. Citations were spot on. Grammar for the most part was very legible. |
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Recap: Clean up the article format and cut down on the beefy sections. This would really help the page stand out. |
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Zach - I really enjoyed your page. I learned a tremendous amount. Please just take my suggestions with a grain of salt. This article is very good, and it reflects it in its work. Also, The Wikipedia Gods have seemed to leave the page alone, so that is a major plus in knowing your article is very well done. Good Job! [[User:Mavorik1|Mavorik1]] ([[User talk:Mavorik1|talk]]) 21:16, 18 November 2013 (UTC) |
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Merge
Don't merge At this point I would prefer not to merge, unless every treatise in the Hippocratic Corpus is going to receive a multiparagraph summary in this article. Ancient Medicine describes one Greek author's fantasy of what s/he thinks the history of medicine is like. Maestlin 03:24, 7 May 2006 (UTC)
- Ok, I agree. But I leave open in the future for a possible merge once both articles are in better shape. I leave a See also section linking it with Ancient Medicine. --Francisco Valverde 14:19, 7 May 2006 (UTC)yes if you really think so then
parsimony and the export of some text
I found the account of Aristotles' biology to have lapsed into digression; consequently I shortened it. I found some of the content to be missing from the general article on Aristotle and hope to fit it in thereCAPONETC)
Good Source
There is an excellent account of the intellectual history of western medicine, from ancient Greece up to the end of the 19th century, in the online version of the Encyclopaedia Britannica [www.1911encyclopedia.org]. It is much longer than is customary for a Wikipedia article, but it makes the five main schools of ancient medical thought all the more understandable for that. In contrast, the Catholic encyclopedia (also available online) has a clearer "point of view," which sometimes boils down to "Arabs bad - dogmatics/scholastics good."
These accounts must both be a century or so old, so it may not be appropriate to transfer their contents here wholesale: anyway most people who can access Wikipedia could look at them directly. NRPanikker (talk) 14:26, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
Male and Female doctors in Ancient Greek
There are good primary sources listed here (as obtained from epigraphic records as well as ancient sourced records) of the role of women and women doctors in particular for child-bearing. Here's the link: http://www.ajol.info/index.php/actat/article/viewfile/52571/41177
Anyboyd bold and brave to make a section of the role of women doctors in Ancient Greek societies? 124.180.192.113 (talk) 23:59, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the link. I don't quite know what would be "bold and brave" about writing this up, but the discussion would need to be guided by reliable modern secondary sources. I'll dig around a bit. davidiad.: 02:51, 10 September 2012 (UTC)
reference 3 (father of modern medicine) is not working, it seems to be a dead end. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 149.241.43.50 (talk) 16:08, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
Dioscorides
- I think that adding some more information on Dioscorides would be beneficial to this article. Unfortunately I do not know of any good places to get information on him but I know he was a huge figure to medicine all the way through the middle ages. I just feel like it would be a good addition to the overall article to have some more history on him. I think it is a great informative article overall though! Bakeore (talk) 22:11, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
Minor edits
A lot of great information, and I love the fact that you have pictures as well. I only have some minor edits that I think might add to the quality of your already great work.
Early on, Ancient Greeks believed that illnesses were “divine punishments” and that healing was a “gift from the Gods.” the "g" in "gods" should not be capitalized.
In your second paragraph at the beginning of your article, I feel like you could take " Humorism refers to blood, yellow bile, black bile and phlegm" out completely, as paragraph 3 seems to treat better discuss the concept of humorism.
Diet was thought to be an issue as well and might be affected by a lack of access to adequate nourishment. You could rephrase this to "poor diet was thought to be an issue as well." and you could also rephrase "availability of clean drinking water" to "lack of clean water". I think it sounds better this way. ( all of this edits are from paragraph two).
Finally, I noticed that some concepts that were discussed in each paragraph did not really tie together, for instance the part of paragraph three were u talked about Hippocrates, (Hippocrates, known as the "Father of Modern Medicine", established a medical school at Kos and is the most important figure in ancient Greek medicine. [3] Hippocrates and his students documented numerous illnesses in the Hippocratic Corpus, and developed the Hippocratic Oath for physicians, which is still in use today. The contributions to ancient Greek medicine of Hippocrates, Socrates and others had a lasting influence on Islamic medicine and Medieval European medicine until many of their findings eventually became obsolete in the 14th century.) may actually fit better into the paragraph beneath it.Mbar3466 (talk) 01:20, 17 November 2013 (UTC)
history of science edits
I really enjoyed this article. I just have some minor adjustments for certain sections.
The introduction: There is a lot of information in this section. I would trim some of the beef in this section and add more to the other sections. It was very overwhelming when first opening the article up.
Hippocrates and Hippocratic Medicine: There is very accurate sources here. Very well written section. I also like the pictures in this section. Be careful with commas in this section. Some of the sentences were choppy. Other then that I have no major suggestions for this section.
Asclepieia: I like this article. Maybe explain the Rod of Asclepius and the Modern Depiction of Caduceus some. It would really tie well with the article.
The only other suggestions I would make is the article is very long with loads of information. Maybe at the start of the article create a timeline of the physicians and their works of medicine. Also, at the end of the article you can put in your sections of "external links" and "further reading" more information. This would clean up the bulk of the article so you are not explaining every little thing on the page. Citations were spot on. Grammar for the most part was very legible.
Recap: Clean up the article format and cut down on the beefy sections. This would really help the page stand out.
Zach - I really enjoyed your page. I learned a tremendous amount. Please just take my suggestions with a grain of salt. This article is very good, and it reflects it in its work. Also, The Wikipedia Gods have seemed to leave the page alone, so that is a major plus in knowing your article is very well done. Good Job! Mavorik1 (talk) 21:16, 18 November 2013 (UTC)
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