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Hi Kate, I really like your cutting edge article on "Chinese Dama". |
Hi Kate, I really like your cutting edge article on "Chinese Dama". |
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It is interesting to see that newspapers are directly quoting "Dama". My suggestions are as followers. |
It is interesting to see that newspapers are directly quoting "Dama". My suggestions are as followers. |
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1. it would be interesting and vivid if you could include some images about "Dama" buying gold. |
1. it would be interesting and vivid if you could include some images about "Dama" buying gold. |
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the website you have cited may be a good source for the images: |
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You may find some interesting resources from this website: |
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http://www.chinadaily.com.cn/business/2014-01/01/content_17208703.htm |
http://www.chinadaily.com.cn/business/2014-01/01/content_17208703.htm |
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2. I like the section "analysts' points of view". It would be great if you do not use numbers such as 1. 2. 3...to |
2. I like the section "analysts' points of view". It would be great if you do not use numbers such as 1. 2. 3...to |
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separate your paragraph as you are writing an "article". But it is clear while you are writing your draft now. |
separate your paragraph as you are writing an "article". But it is clear while you are writing your draft now. |
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3. as "Chinese Dama" is a biased term referring to a certain group of women, it would be nice to explain more about |
3. as "Chinese Dama" is a biased term referring to a certain group of women, it would be nice to explain more about |
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this phenomenon and how it happens (i.e most of them stay at home and do not have a regular job. they spend their time chatting with others and etc.) |
this phenomenon and how it happens (i.e most of them stay at home and do not have a regular job. they spend their time chatting with others and etc.) |
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other sources: |
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http://english.cntv.cn/20140217/103572.shtml |
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Cheers --[[User:Zhengya3|Zhengya3]] ([[User talk:Zhengya3|talk]]) 19:42, 27 February 2014 (UTC) |
Cheers --[[User:Zhengya3|Zhengya3]] ([[User talk:Zhengya3|talk]]) 19:42, 27 February 2014 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 19:45, 27 February 2014
Feedback on your article
Hi Kate, I really like your cutting edge article on "Chinese Dama". It is interesting to see that newspapers are directly quoting "Dama". My suggestions are as followers.
1. it would be interesting and vivid if you could include some images about "Dama" buying gold. the website you have cited may be a good source for the images: http://www.chinadaily.com.cn/business/2014-01/01/content_17208703.htm
2. I like the section "analysts' points of view". It would be great if you do not use numbers such as 1. 2. 3...to separate your paragraph as you are writing an "article". But it is clear while you are writing your draft now.
3. as "Chinese Dama" is a biased term referring to a certain group of women, it would be nice to explain more about this phenomenon and how it happens (i.e most of them stay at home and do not have a regular job. they spend their time chatting with others and etc.) other sources: http://english.cntv.cn/20140217/103572.shtml
Cheers --Zhengya3 (talk) 19:42, 27 February 2014 (UTC)