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{{AFC submission|d|reason|Way too many of your footnotes are to the OLC itself; we can't just take their word for it for all the facts about them, the bulk of footnotes should be to ''outside'' commentators. |
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The good news is, when I search GoogleBooks, there appear to be a number of serious works which discuss the OWC: [https://www.google.com/search?q=%22Oconomowoc+Lake+Club%22&btnG=Search+Books&tbm=bks&tbo=1&gws_rd=ssl]. Please flesh-out your sourcing by finding proof of ''specific facts/claims'' in serious books or news articles, and applying those as footnotes within this draft. Note, you can ''instantly'' turn GoogleBooks URLs into full citations using http://reftag.appspot.com |
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{{AFC comment|1=Requires more significant mentions in books and magazines - I'm afraid it can't be considered quite notable. [[User:Darylgolden|<font color="orange">'''Darylgolden'''</font>]]<sup>([[User talk:Darylgolden|<span style="color:red">'''talk'''</span>]])</sup> 02:05, 18 June 2014 (UTC)}} |
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{{AFC comment|1=Encyclopedias don't say "you", please change the phrasing. Also, the intro paragraph should be a who-what-why-when-where, not an advertisement for whatever generic services they offer. We need to see what's ''significant'' about the OLC; to be frank, why on earth would our readers in Tokyo or London care in the slightest if people can have a business meeting there? But they and posterity ''would'' like to know how old the club is, what famous people were members, any exciting/tragic/famous incidents that occurred there, etc. [[User:MatthewVanitas|MatthewVanitas]] ([[User talk:MatthewVanitas|talk]]) 07:34, 6 June 2014 (UTC)}} |
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Revision as of 03:07, 6 October 2014
I have left comments on improving your draft, embedded throughout the article below. Please review, and you can remove my individual comments once you address each issue. Overall good concept, but this needs to be made less advertisement and more serious encyclopedic article.
The Oconomowoc Lake Club is a lakeside country club found in 1890 by George P. Gifford in on Oconomwoc Lake in Oconomowoc Wisonsin, United States. It is one of the countries oldest yacht clubs. It was built and design by Architects Ferry and Clas from Milwaukee, Wisconsin.[1]
History
The Oconomowoc Lake Club was founded in 1890.[2] It was originally involved with a improvement association that had a goal to maintain the lake levels and water traffic coming through the river connected to the lake. The Oconomowoc Lake Cub were the ones who ended up installing the Danforth Lock.[citation needed] A local Oconomowc mail boat was able to travel through this lock and twice a week they would deliver peoples mail to their piers.[3] But that lock was eventually cemented shut[when?] and now a damn is used to control the water levels.[4]
The history of the Lake Club is directly connected the Villa Gifford or also known as the Gifford Hotel. This hotel was originally a home located just west of the current Lake Club. George P. Gifford was the center of attention in the late 1800s in the Oconomowoc area. He had guests over often and they loved his food and all the recreational activities they did on Oconomowc Lake. Eventually in the late 1860s Gifford opened his home to selected guests or members. After some construction to his home he had created a simple lakeside hotel. The hotel predated the founding of the OLC. All the meeting for the next 19 years were held at the Gifford Hotel. Then finally the current OLC building was built in 1909. The OLC actually made a section in Life Magazine when metalworking magnate Ralph Robinson, was elected as Commodore of the OLC.[5]
The OLC served members until 1994 when a fire broke out and its 1908-built building was burnt to the ground.[6] After two years of negotiating the OLC was rebuilt in 1996, and as of 2014 it is still in business.[7][8]
References
- ^ Concrete. Concrete Publishing Company. 1909. p. 122.
- ^ Barbara Barquist; David Barquist (1 November 1999). Oconomowoc: barons to bootleggers. Barbara and David Barquist. pp. 18–20. ISBN 978-0-9675179-0-2.
- ^ Mary A. Kane (2006). Oconomowoc. Arcadia Publishing. pp. 107–. ISBN 978-0-7385-4089-4.
- ^ http://www.americancanals.org/Data_Sheets/Wisconsin/Danforth%20Lock.pdf
- ^ Inc, Time (1954-09-27). Life Magazine.
{{cite book}}:|author1=has generic name (help) - ^ Exclusively Yours. Patten Co. 2002. p. 111.
- ^ "OLC History Page". http://www.oconomowoclakeclub.org/#!about-the-olc/c1ztv.
{{cite web}}: External link in|website=|url=(help) - ^ "Statement about History from Owner". http://wisn.cityvoter.com/oconomowoc-lake-club/biz/489894.
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