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T30 Howitzer Motor Carriage is currently a Warfare good article nominee. Nominated by Tomandjerry211 (talk) at 15:55, 22 February 2015 (UTC)

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Too close to source text

I found one section where the sentences were word-for-word match with Zaloga. And nearby sentences had phrases that were very close. I think the whole article should be checked to make sure that the text is not just Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing and that there can't be any allegations of copyvio. GraemeLeggett (talk) 07:38, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 14:02, 18 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:02, 18 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry about the delay, RL got in the way... Here we go:

No DAB links - no attention required
Checklinks reports no problems with external links - no attention required
No duplicate links - no attention required
The first paragraph of the "Development" section is unreferenced - please provide references for the claims stated there.
Citation "Green (2000)" should read "Green & Green (2000)" - two authors
The lead lists 1951 as the last year when the T30 was used, and so does the infobox, but the year is not found in the body prose. Both lead and infobox should repeat cited material from the body (condensed appropriately), so please add that bit.
Ditto for the manufacturer - appears only in the infobox
Likewise, infobox does not specify France as operator of the T30 - please add that bit too.
There is a discrepancy between length specified in the prose (6.28 m) and the infobox (6.32 m). Which one is it?
The article employs a mix of imperial an metric measurements. I assume, imperial ones should come first, and then be converted in metric - it is possible to flip measurements in the convert template by adding order=flip parameter to the template.
Conversions of 75mm (at the first instance) and 0.375 inch are missing
Personally, I would spell out the measurement units (using spell=in parameter) but I don't think that's a dealbreaker here.
No referencing issues other than ones indicated above.
Image is suitable, with a suitable licence - no action required.
The article seems reasonably comprehensive and neutral - no action required.
- All are finished.--Tomandjerry211 (talk) 22:16, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Not quite - the infobox still omits France.

That's about it... Nice work.--Tomobe03 (talk) 19:22, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The final passage says the vehicle was retired in 1941, but also that it was used in the First Indochina War which makes no sense - I assume there's a typo somewhere.
There are now three "clarification needed" tags in the article - please address them.
The above infobox issue (users) is not addressed yet.

@Tomobe03:I have fixed all of the issues mentioned above. Thanks, Tomandjerry211 (talk) 14:09, 28 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Indeed. Good work.--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:11, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I watchlisted this page, so just ping me here when there's some progress. Cheers--Tomobe03 (talk) 22:47, 27 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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 I found one section where the sentences were word-for-word match with Zaloga. And nearby sentences had phrases that were very close. I think the whole article should be checked to make sure that the text is not just [[Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing]] and that there can't be any allegations of copyvio. [[User:GraemeLeggett|GraemeLeggett]] ([[User talk:GraemeLeggett|talk]]) 07:38, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
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