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So far, this entry is off to a great start! This is a very interesting species. I enjoyed learning about their nocturnal behavior, as well as their gynandromorphy abilities. For the Taxonomy section, does ''M. genalis'' have any close relatives? I also made some sentence revisions in the Distribution, Colony, and Parasite sections. For the Distribution section, I simply changed "this species" to ''"M. genalis"'' for clarification. In the Colony section, I thought that "two or a few" was an odd way to write the amount of bees in a nest, so I changed it to "about two or three". There was also one mess up in this section with present and past tense which I fixed, as well as one other sentence for ease of flow. I also revised one more sentence in the Parasite section. But besides these few changes, the entry looked great! [[User:Liz.yucknut|Liz.yucknut]] ([[User talk:Liz.yucknut|talk]]) 20:44, 20 October 2015 (UTC) |
So far, this entry is off to a great start! This is a very interesting species. I enjoyed learning about their nocturnal behavior, as well as their gynandromorphy abilities. For the Taxonomy section, does ''M. genalis'' have any close relatives? I also made some sentence revisions in the Distribution, Colony, and Parasite sections. For the Distribution section, I simply changed "this species" to ''"M. genalis"'' for clarification. In the Colony section, I thought that "two or a few" was an odd way to write the amount of bees in a nest, so I changed it to "about two or three". There was also one mess up in this section with present and past tense which I fixed, as well as one other sentence for ease of flow. I also revised one more sentence in the Parasite section. But besides these few changes, the entry looked great! [[User:Liz.yucknut|Liz.yucknut]] ([[User talk:Liz.yucknut|talk]]) 20:44, 20 October 2015 (UTC) |
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I really enjoyed your thorough article, especially the great detail of the dominance hierarchy--I found it very unique that the ''M. genalis'' females will bash into others in order to assert dominance! I went through the article making grammatical changes. For example, I changed many past tense verbs to the present as these bees still do act in the ways you describe. Furthermore, I tried to minimize the number of times you used the phrase "has been shown to" as that seemed to imply uncertainty rather than reviewed journal article evidence. Other than these grammatical changes and adding in links throughout your sections, I had trouble finding areas of improvement in content. You really did go into great detail about the subjects you discussed. Great work! [[User:mira.tbaum|mira.tbaum]] )[[User talk:mira.tbaum\talk]]) 09:46, 22 October 2015 (UTC) |
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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Sayabery (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Mira.tbaum, Cratermann, Liz.yucknut.
Working on this page for class
Hi! I will be adding to this page in the next few weeks for a class project. Please keep everything up if you don't mind, but I would love feedback if you have any suggestions! Sayabery (talk) 22:19, 5 October 2015 (UTC)
Comments and Revisions
So far, this entry is off to a great start! This is a very interesting species. I enjoyed learning about their nocturnal behavior, as well as their gynandromorphy abilities. For the Taxonomy section, does M. genalis have any close relatives? I also made some sentence revisions in the Distribution, Colony, and Parasite sections. For the Distribution section, I simply changed "this species" to "M. genalis" for clarification. In the Colony section, I thought that "two or a few" was an odd way to write the amount of bees in a nest, so I changed it to "about two or three". There was also one mess up in this section with present and past tense which I fixed, as well as one other sentence for ease of flow. I also revised one more sentence in the Parasite section. But besides these few changes, the entry looked great! Liz.yucknut (talk) 20:44, 20 October 2015 (UTC)
Article Review
I really enjoyed your thorough article, especially the great detail of the dominance hierarchy--I found it very unique that the M. genalis females will bash into others in order to assert dominance! I went through the article making grammatical changes. For example, I changed many past tense verbs to the present as these bees still do act in the ways you describe. Furthermore, I tried to minimize the number of times you used the phrase "has been shown to" as that seemed to imply uncertainty rather than reviewed journal article evidence. Other than these grammatical changes and adding in links throughout your sections, I had trouble finding areas of improvement in content. You really did go into great detail about the subjects you discussed. Great work! mira.tbaum )User talk:mira.tbaum\talk) 09:46, 22 October 2015 (UTC)