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This article underwent a GA review by {{u|Sturmvogel 66}}, who helped to reduce the amount of jargon used, or at least reminded me to explain it or wikilink it. {{u|Relentlessly}} very kindly copy-edited the article, both improving the quality of the prose, and identifying a number of areas where the referencing fell short. {{u|Crisco 1492}} took a quick look at the images. [[User:Harrias|<b style="color:#00cc33">Harrias</b>]] <sup>[[User_talk:Harrias|<span style="color:#009900">talk</span>]]</sup> 09:27, 2 November 2015 (UTC) |
This article underwent a GA review by {{u|Sturmvogel 66}}, who helped to reduce the amount of jargon used, or at least reminded me to explain it or wikilink it. {{u|Relentlessly}} very kindly copy-edited the article, both improving the quality of the prose, and identifying a number of areas where the referencing fell short. {{u|Crisco 1492}} took a quick look at the images. [[User:Harrias|<b style="color:#00cc33">Harrias</b>]] <sup>[[User_talk:Harrias|<span style="color:#009900">talk</span>]]</sup> 09:27, 2 November 2015 (UTC) |
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*Significant omission: description of his batting style and keeping abilities, and his role (opener, etc) |
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*[[Cricket helmet]] says "grill". This article uses "grille". Which? |
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*What's he doing now? |
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*What's his vision like now? |
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*If he was 18 when he went to Millfield, was he 2 years older than all the other kids? |
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*Family? Interests? |
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More to come, perhaps --[[User:Dweller|Dweller]] ([[User talk:Dweller|talk]]) 15:39, 3 November 2015 (UTC) |
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- Nominator(s): Harrias talk 09:27, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
Craig Kieswetter was one of those England cricketers who bounced in and out of the team. He had a good run in one-day cricket early in his career, and was man of the match in the final when England won the World Twenty20, the first one-day trophy won by the team. He later lost his England place to one of his Somerset team-mates. At domestic level, he was one of Somerset's star players until he was struck in the eye by the ball, ending his career prematurely.
This article underwent a GA review by Sturmvogel 66, who helped to reduce the amount of jargon used, or at least reminded me to explain it or wikilink it. Relentlessly very kindly copy-edited the article, both improving the quality of the prose, and identifying a number of areas where the referencing fell short. Crisco 1492 took a quick look at the images. Harrias talk 09:27, 2 November 2015 (UTC) Comments from Dweller
- Significant omission: description of his batting style and keeping abilities, and his role (opener, etc)
- Cricket helmet says "grill". This article uses "grille". Which?
- What's he doing now?
- What's his vision like now?
- If he was 18 when he went to Millfield, was he 2 years older than all the other kids?
- Family? Interests?
More to come, perhaps --Dweller (talk) 15:39, 3 November 2015 (UTC)