Talk:Tanyus Shahin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 11:56, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• What have we here, I'll take this one. FunkMonk (talk) 11:56, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
• It seems the caption to the infobox image is redundant,
• "sermon-like speeches at village meetings" About what?
• " to a Maronite family" I'd say Maronite Christian, not everyone knows what it is.
• "burdens of corvée" Explain briefly?
• "power had been significantly rolled back" Diminished might be clearer here?
• "Double Qaimaqmate" Explain.
• "as the qaimaqam" Explain.
• "a group of Keserwani peasants" Saying "keserwani" seems a bit esoteric (only people familiar with Arabic will know this form), maybe say Keserwan peasants or peasants from Keserwan?
• "the governor of Beirut." Maybe add Ottoman governor.
• "The Maronite patriarch" Some person this could link to?
• "with Shahin declaring a republic (jumhuriyya)" What was the name of the republic? Could be named in the title there as well.
• "Shahin, who by this point oversaw a 1,000-strong militia,[7] exercised power through seizing arms, ensuring the upholding of the law and establishing security on the roads." Grammar seems odd, shouldn't it be "ensured the upholding" and "established security"?
• "through both peaceful and coercive means that they were all a part of single" Sentence seems to be missing something,