Talk:The Unraveling (Rise Against album)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: DannyMusicEditor (talk · contribs) 19:58, 21 November 2016 (UTC)

As part of a review deal, I'd be happy to review this, but I'm going to start on Thursday, possibly Wednesday. Hope to see another wonderful passing article! dannymusiceditor ^{Speak up!} 19:58, 21 November 2016 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Cites reliable sources, where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   It seems Wikipedia doesn't have an appropriate one available.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Toolbox checks

Everything in the GA toolbox checks out fine.

Lead & Infobox

• Album cover needs alt text, something I neglected to catch in "Give It All" (oops!)
• As a result of their newfound exposure... What exposure? Elaborate on that in or before the current sentence.
• Recording took place over the course of five weeks...
• Link "critics" to music journalism
• who praised the hardcore music
• Why were the liner notes updated? Just cause it's 2005 and the band's lineup changed, or what? Elaborate, but don't overdo it for the lead.
• Might want to indicate that it was out of print at one point (that's why it was reissued, right?)
• A flatlist or hlist template is preferable for multiple genres, highly suggest even though not totally necessary.

Background and recording

• No comma necessary with Toni & Tim.
• Might want to indicate that Tim was fresh out of leaving the bass position in Arma Angelus (possibly because of Rise Against), a metalcore band which featured all of Fall Out Boy's members at one point or another. Who knew, right?
• Possibly indicate Fat Mike is the NOFX vocalist? They did have notable success.
• Again with the exposure thing.
• No need to spell out Sonic Iguana Studios twice so soon.

Style and composition

• Jack Black isn't just an actor. He was in the process of making music and had become a musician at this point.
• fast pace fast-paced
• Is "harder in sound" the best description you can possibly give?
• more punk rock inspired more inspired by punk rock
• "Everchaning" ???
• The eleventh track, "Everchaning", is a tune-oriented song, What's a tune-oriented song?

Release and reception

• I don't think you're allowed to cite Wikipedia as a source even in this case. That being said, I don't think it needs sourced anyway. That'd be a WP:BLUE thing, I think. An FAC can correct me on that if I'm wrong.
• No comma necessary after "My Life Inside Your Heart"
• Add the Exclaim! review to the review box

Events after the album's release

I've never seen a post-release section in a GA album article. The first paragraph I think should be moved to the background section, the second to release.

Alright, that's everything! Go! dannymusiceditor ^{Speak up!} 02:56, 26 November 2016 (UTC)

After-comment: Looked at the review, and saw most of the work in this edit. I have to say, there were some things there that I liked that we don't have now. Some of those reviews I see are okay. I'd like you to restore the AltSounds review, both Punknews reviews (as it is reliable) and the second Sputnikmusic review. Only the initial reviews need to be put in the box, but please do mention the re-issue comments in the critical reception section. I am not positive if Punkbands.org is reliable, I've never seen it. Safe to keep out for now. dannymusiceditor ^{Speak up!} 03:54, 27 November 2016 (UTC)