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Yu Kanda has been listed as one of the Language and literature good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: July 9, 2016. (Reviewed version).

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A fact from Yu Kanda appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 19 June 2016 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that the D.Gray-man character Yu Kanda was taken from an unpublished manga written by the same author?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2016/June. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Yu Kanda.

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Yu Kanda/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Omni Flames (talk · contribs) 01:09, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to take this. I should hopefully be able to get up a review in one or two days. Omni Flames (talk) 01:09, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Kanda is devoted to the Black Order and their fight against a group of enemies known as the Noah Family; however, he is cold and antisocial toward his teammates, often choosing to engage in fights with the series' protagonist, Allen Walker." This sentence is overly long in my opinion, perhaps break it into two sentences at the semicolon?
The image in the "appearances" section should be given alt text.
- Done.
Link Takuya Satō in the infobox.
- Can't do it. There are apparently two people with the same name. Kanda's Takuya Sato has an entire different carreer as seen here
"Kanda refuses to die until he finds a "certain person."" The quotes here should go before the punctuation.
- Done
Since Mugen is italicized, shouldn't Innocence be as well?
- Done
"Hoping Kanda would die with him, Alma attacked Kanda but he was instead sliced to pieces". By whom? Kanda? If so, this should be made clearer.
- Done
The last paragraph of the appearances section is very short. It should either be expanded with more information about the games Kanda appeared in, or merged into somewhere else.
- Done, but I'm not so sure about it.
"She paid most attention to his hair and eyes, especially...". The comma here should probably go after "especially".
- Done.
"It was originally much different during the series and had too many inconsistencies". Sounds clunky, and "much different" is poor grammar.
- Tried to fix it
List of D.Gray-man characters should be linked somewhere, in a see also section maybe?
- Done.@Omni Flames:

Overall

Overall, this looks pretty good to me. No disambiguation links and the only copyright violations detected are direct quotes. An excellent article in general, just a few minor prose issues. If you're able to address my concerns, then I'd be more than happy to pass this article. I'll place it on hold for now. Omni Flames (talk) 03:24, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: About the last paragraph that you merged. Those two don't really go well together. Perhaps a better spot to put it would be in the reception section? Omni Flames (talk) 22:58, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Omni Flames:Tintor2 (talk) 23:26, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Looks much better now! I'm happy to pass this article. Omni Flames (talk) 23:40, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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