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::Yes, it would be standard procedure to put copies of citations for each paragraph, as to prevent confusion. Each paragraph requires at least one citation, as a rule of thumb. If the citation covers it, it should be at the end of each specific paragraph, not just at the end of the section. [[User:UNSC Luke 1021|UNSC Luke 1021]] ([[User talk:UNSC Luke 1021|talk]]) 17:28, 30 March 2017 (UTC) |
::Yes, it would be standard procedure to put copies of citations for each paragraph, as to prevent confusion. Each paragraph requires at least one citation, as a rule of thumb. If the citation covers it, it should be at the end of each specific paragraph, not just at the end of the section. [[User:UNSC Luke 1021|UNSC Luke 1021]] ([[User talk:UNSC Luke 1021|talk]]) 17:28, 30 March 2017 (UTC) |
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:::Yep each paragraph should have at least one citation—especially for GA. Sorry for the delay, I'll get to reviewing this now. <span style='font:bold small-caps 0.94em "Nimbus Mono L";color:#000000'>[[User:Jaguar|<font color="black">'''JAG'''</font>]][[User talk:Jaguar|<font color="black">'''UAR'''</font>]]</span> 20:37, 30 March 2017 (UTC) |
:::Yep each paragraph should have at least one citation—especially for GA. Sorry for the delay, I'll get to reviewing this now. <span style='font:bold small-caps 0.94em "Nimbus Mono L";color:#000000'>[[User:Jaguar|<font color="black">'''JAG'''</font>]][[User talk:Jaguar|<font color="black">'''UAR'''</font>]]</span> 20:37, 30 March 2017 (UTC) |
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===Initial comments=== |
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====Lead==== |
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*"and published by Activision" - link [[Activision]] |
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*"and '''published by Activision, and is a'''' remastered version of Call of Duty 4: Modern Warfare" - this could do with a split. |
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*Just to clarify - was this game released on the same date worldwide? Or was it released like a day after on another platform in another territory? If not, I would rephrase it to {{xt|It was released '''worldwide''' on November 4, 2016}} and also apply this in the infobox |
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*"lighting and rendering upgrades" - link [[Rendering (computer graphics)]] |
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*"new and remastered sound effects" - aren't remastered sound effects technically new anyway? |
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*"which were '''now''' considered dated" - I think it would sound better without the "now" |
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*I would recommend merging the latter two paragraphs of the lead into one so that it improves presentation |
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===Gameplay=== |
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*"The multiplayer features 16 maps (10 of these maps having been released at launch)" - would it be easier to say that six maps were introduced via DLC? |
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:20, 29 March 2017 (UTC)
I'll finish this by tomorrow. JAGUAR 18:20, 29 March 2017 (UTC)
Hi, I'm leaving a comment because it said they were welcomed. In the section developments and changes, the three middle paragraphs have no citations. Can we fix this? Thanks. UNSC Luke 1021 (talk) 12:14, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
- The two citations for the last paragraph of that section are also used for the three you mentioned, but I thought I would avoid putting copies of the citations at the end of each one. Would it be best to do so? Wikibenboy94 (talk) Wikibenboy94 (talk) 17:08, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
- Yes, it would be standard procedure to put copies of citations for each paragraph, as to prevent confusion. Each paragraph requires at least one citation, as a rule of thumb. If the citation covers it, it should be at the end of each specific paragraph, not just at the end of the section. UNSC Luke 1021 (talk) 17:28, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
- Yep each paragraph should have at least one citation—especially for GA. Sorry for the delay, I'll get to reviewing this now. JAGUAR 20:37, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
- Yes, it would be standard procedure to put copies of citations for each paragraph, as to prevent confusion. Each paragraph requires at least one citation, as a rule of thumb. If the citation covers it, it should be at the end of each specific paragraph, not just at the end of the section. UNSC Luke 1021 (talk) 17:28, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
Initial comments
Lead
- "and published by Activision" - link Activision
- "and published by Activision, and is a' remastered version of Call of Duty 4: Modern Warfare" - this could do with a split.
- Just to clarify - was this game released on the same date worldwide? Or was it released like a day after on another platform in another territory? If not, I would rephrase it to It was released worldwide on November 4, 2016 and also apply this in the infobox
- "lighting and rendering upgrades" - link Rendering (computer graphics)
- "new and remastered sound effects" - aren't remastered sound effects technically new anyway?
- "which were now considered dated" - I think it would sound better without the "now"
- I would recommend merging the latter two paragraphs of the lead into one so that it improves presentation
Gameplay
- "The multiplayer features 16 maps (10 of these maps having been released at launch)" - would it be easier to say that six maps were introduced via DLC?