Talk:Call of Duty: Modern Warfare Remastered/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:20, 29 March 2017 (UTC)

I'll finish this by tomorrow. JAGUAR  18:20, 29 March 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I'm leaving a comment because it said they were welcomed. In the section developments and changes, the three middle paragraphs have no citations. Can we fix this? Thanks. UNSC Luke 1021 (talk) 12:14, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

The two citations for the last paragraph of that section are also used for the three you mentioned, but I thought I would avoid putting copies of the citations at the end of each one. Would it be best to do so? Wikibenboy94 (talk) 1:08, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Yes, it would be standard procedure to put copies of citations for each paragraph, as to prevent confusion. Each paragraph requires at least one citation, as a rule of thumb. If the citation covers it, it should be at the end of each specific paragraph, not just at the end of the section. UNSC Luke 1021 (talk) 17:28, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Yep each paragraph should have at least one citation—especially for GA. Sorry for the delay, I'll get to reviewing this now. JAGUAR  20:37, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Initial comments

Lead

• "and published by Activision" - link Activision
• "and published by Activision, and is a' remastered version of Call of Duty 4: Modern Warfare" - this could do with a split.
• Just to clarify - was this game released on the same date worldwide? Or was it released like a day after on another platform in another territory? If not, I would rephrase it to It was released worldwide on November 4, 2016 and also apply this in the infobox
• "lighting and rendering upgrades" - link Rendering (computer graphics)
• "new and remastered sound effects" - aren't remastered sound effects technically new anyway?
  • Comment When I say "new", I mean original sound effects created for the remaster/ not used in the original. Those I refer to as " remastered" are those used in both games. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
• "which were now considered dated" - I think it would sound better without the "now"
• I would recommend merging the latter two paragraphs of the lead into one so that it improves presentation

Gameplay

• "The multiplayer features 16 maps (10 of these maps having been released at launch)" - would it be easier to say that six maps were introduced via DLC?
  • Comment The maps were released as part of a free update to the game. Would this count as DLC? -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
• "" Gun Game"" - space after quotation mark
• "(introduced in past Call of Duty installments)" - which game modes were introduced in past instalments? All of them or just Gun Game?
• "and weapon camos" - 'camos' sounds a bit informal, how about camouflage
• "which can all be unlocked through experience points" - I thought they could be unlocked by progressing through levels?
  • Comment Same thing. I think the Modern Warfare article also refers to it as experience points. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
• "Pressing down on the controller's d-pad in multiplayer" - capital D needed

Plot

• Is this section necessary? I think it can be safely removed as an empty header seems awkward and breaks the flow. Not sure if there's a policy on this somewhere
  • Comment We need a link back to the original plot of the game. I'm not sure of a cleaner way to do this. It did have a short sentence stating there were no changes to the plot until recently. -- ferret (talk) 21:08, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
    • Comment I removed the sentence as I didn't think it was needed, and I'd also noticed in the editing screen that Ferret had warned editors not to include the entire Plot summary inside the article. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:56, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Comment I'll chime in and say that I think a short paragraph on the premise of the game or a condensed plot summary is probably more beneficial than an empty section. See Halo: Combat Evolved Anniversary which is a featured article and has a very short summary of the original game's plot. Wikipedia does allow readers to download .pdf version and view printable versions of articles; an empty section isn't helpful in those cases. --The1337gamer (talk) 16:45, 31 March 2017 (UTC)

Development

• "The remaster runs in full 1080p resolution at 60 frames per second, and uses the same engine featured in Call of Duty: Advanced Warfare." - unsourced, needs a citation
  • Comment I'd made a note of this previously. I've searched for a reliable source to cite but all I can find are forums. If it comes to it I'll just have to omit this part. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
• The second, third and fourth paragraphs are unsourced and will need some citations (or at least one at the end if appropriate)
• "The majority of Modern Warfare was rebuilt from the ground up" - reads a bit informal. It looks like this comes from a quote, so it should be quoted
• "as "Respecting the original game and gameplay experience was incredibly important for [them]"." - I think this can be safely paraphrased
• "As Raven explained" - personifying a company/publication should usually be avoided. Does the source mention who actually said this?
• "The AI of NPC's" - write out and link artificial intelligence for unfamiliar readers, and also do the same for "Non-player characters (NPCs)"
• "New animations were added to the game to further immerse the player and enhance the "body sense" (how the camera makes use of the player character's body)" - bracket seems a bit awkward; I think it could be rephrased
• "one example Raven made note of is that" - more personification

Marketing

• "News of Modern Warfare Remastered leaked on Reddit" - was leaked, and link Reddit
• "for the online store Target" - is this Target Australia? I'm not sure
• "as well as 10 Rare supply drops" - rare is capitalised here
  • Comment I was conflicted on this but thought it to best to capitalise it as this is what the game actually refers to them as. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Reception

• I think that the reception section is slightly lacking in broadness (a key aspect of the GA criteria). Mostly notably, IGN's review is missing, and a cursory search also reveals reviews from Destructoid and Hardcore Gamer—both reliable sources per WP:VG/S. I'd recommend adding these in to cover the broadness part
  • Comment Will do. I felt editing the section was difficult as there are really not that many reviews available (over 20 on Metacritic for the PS4 version), much less reviewers that are deemed reliable. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)
• " received "generally favorable reviews", according to review aggregator Metacritic" - no need for the comma, and link Metacritic
• Remove all scores from the reception section's prose and add them in the reception table. This is quite important for video game articles—especially GAs—and it also offers the readers quick access to scores themselves. If you need help with the template, just ask, or its documentation can be found at Template:Video game reviews
• The reviewer from Push Square is Joey Thurmond—add his name in the prose: Joey Thurmond from Push Square praised its graphical enhancements...
• "and that "Modern Warfare Remastered celebrates this legacy" - needs italicising
• The reception on could benefit from some paraphrasing as it seems to rely a bit much on quotes
• I think the fact that it received an award from IGN could be mentioned as prose in the first paragraph of the reception section

On hold

I think that this is a solid article and an excellent first effort. All in all the reception section could benefit from some expansion and paraphrasing, and the development section will need more citations. I'll leave this on hold and will take another look at this once progress has been made. If you have any questions or need any help, please just ask! JAGUAR  21:25, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

@Wikibenboy94: This may look like a lot, but most of it are minor tweaks and improvements. Please feel free to ask for any advice or help you may need. This is a pretty typical review and you're in a good place to finish up with just a bit more work. -- ferret (talk) 21:30, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Thanks. The work is something I'm sure I'll be able to manage on my own, but I'll notify you if I have any trouble. I've added comments to some of those improvements needed above to clarify further etc. -- Wikibenboy94 (talk) 22:47, 30 March 2017 (UTC)