User talk:Fahmad007: Difference between revisions

Content deleted Content added

Inline

Revision as of 23:58, 4 December 2017

Welcome!

Hello, Fahmad007, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are a few links to pages you might find helpful:

You may also want to complete the Wikipedia Adventure, an interactive tour that will help you learn the basics of editing Wikipedia. You can visit the Teahouse to ask questions or seek help.

Please remember to sign your messages on talk pages by typing four tildes (~~~~); this will automatically insert your username and the date. If you need help, check out Wikipedia:Questions, ask me on my talk page, or ask for help on your talk page, and a volunteer should respond shortly. Again, welcome! -★- PlyrStar93. _{→Message me. ←} 02:48, 25 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Welcome!

Hello, Fahmad007, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing.

Handouts
Choosing an article to edit Editing an article • Add images to articles Citing sources on Wikipedia
Additional Resources
You can find answers to many student questions on our Q&A site, ask.wikiedu.org

If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:37, 27 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Review from Yuya

Mexico–United States border

Lead section (beginning)

The paragraph “There are twenty-three … sovereignty of both countries” should not be in the lead section. You may create other sections such as population and economy. You can also give recent statistics that show the increase in population along the border.

History

What is “another treaty in 1884”? Specify it if possible.

"… due mostly to close ties to the United States, (delete comma) and the Mexican government's support"

Newly Proposed Wall Along the U.S. Mexico Border

This section should go under the section “In context of Trump administration.”

Impacts of Border Wall on Wildlife

This section should be under the section “environment.”

“$2.2 billion was allocated to building (delete "ing") this wall”

The paragraph starting with “In 2006, during the presidency…” has no verification.

Make the paragraph starting with “According to a delegation of Arizona park …” shorter. I think the main idea is that a border wall will affect wildlife because it restricts the movement of animals.

Yuya.As (talk) 05:10, 29 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Yuya!

Thank you for your review, I appreciate it. I have questions:

1. Could you please specify the sections (maybe copy and paste them) because I do not understand when you say LINE?

2. "… due mostly to close ties to the United States, (delete comma) and the Mexican government's support" These are not my edits, I did not write this so please comment on my edits which will help me improve it?

Thank you. Fahmad007 (talk) 05:32, 29 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Fahim!

1. I specified the sections. I hope you will figure out what I refer to.

2. I think I was looking at parts you kept from original, but I am sure I reviewed all of what you added.

3. I should have said "in" a section instead of "under" a section. For example, I wanted you to make the section "proposed wall" as the section 3.5.1.

Yuya.As (talk) 23:58, 4 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Culture of Afghanistan

Line 127: Remove bullets in the section “traditional” because both paragraphs are about the holiday called Nowruz.

Add space between “weather good.” and “On the day of Nowruz.”

Place a period between “before Nowruz to prepare Samanak” and “They pour the ingredients.”

@@ Line 38: / Line 38: @@
 ===Mexico–United States border===
+====Lead section (beginning)====
-Line 8: The paragraph “There are twenty-three … sovereignty of both countries” should not be in the lead section. You may create other sections such as population and economy. You can also give recent statistics that show the increase in population along the border.
+The paragraph “There are twenty-three … sovereignty of both countries” should not be in the lead section. You may create other sections such as population and economy. You can also give recent statistics that show the increase in population along the border.
-Line 102: What is “another treaty in 1884”? Specify it if possible.
+====History====
+What is “another treaty in 1884”? Specify it if possible.
 "… due mostly to close ties to the United States, (delete comma) and the Mexican government's support"
-Line 154: The section “Newly Proposed Wall Along the U.S. Mexico Border” should go under the section “In context of Trump administration.”
+====Newly Proposed Wall Along the U.S. Mexico Border====
+This section should go under the section “In context of Trump administration.”
-Line 210: The section “Impacts of Border Wall on Wildlife” should be under the section “environment.”
+====Impacts of Border Wall on Wildlife====
+This section should be under the section “environment.”
 “$2.2 billion was allocated to building (delete "ing") this wall”
@@ Line 55: / Line 63: @@
 [[User:Yuya.As|Yuya.As]] ([[User talk:Yuya.As|talk]]) 05:10, 29 November 2017 (UTC)
 Hi Yuya!
@@ Line 65: / Line 74: @@
 Thank you. [[User:Fahmad007|Fahmad007]] ([[User talk:Fahmad007#top|talk]]) 05:32, 29 November 2017 (UTC)
+Hi Fahim!
+. I specified the sections. I hope you will figure out what I refer to.
+. I think I was looking at parts you kept from original, but I am sure I reviewed all of what you added.
+. I should have said "in" a section instead of "under" a section. For example, I wanted you to make the section "proposed wall" as the section 3.5.1.
+[[User:Yuya.As|Yuya.As]] ([[User talk:Yuya.As|talk]]) 23:58, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
 ===Culture of Afghanistan===