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The Epircureanism draft does a really good job of placing the information in the context of the debate around it. In the religion section especially, you do a good job of detailing the two positions and saying where the academic consensus is. The lead section for the ataraxia article could maybe use a bit more detail - something about how achieving ataraxia is the general goal of most philosophies would be a good point. A note that says the sections that follow are describing how ataraxia is portrayed in different schools of philosophy would also help the article flow. Overall, though, the information is detailed, seems to be well-sourced, and presented very clearly![[User:Talia298|Talia298]] ([[User talk:Talia298|talk]]) 01:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC) |
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The Epircureanism draft does a really good job of placing the information in the context of the debate around it. In the religion section especially, you do a good job of detailing the two positions and saying where the academic consensus is. The lead section for the ataraxia article could maybe use a bit more detail - something about how achieving ataraxia is the general goal of most philosophies would be a good point. A note that says the sections that follow are describing how ataraxia is portrayed in different schools of philosophy would also help the article flow. Overall, though, the information is detailed, seems to be well-sourced, and presented very clearly![[User:Talia298|Talia298]] ([[User talk:Talia298|talk]]) 01:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC) |
The Epircureanism draft does a really good job of placing the information in the context of the debate around it. In the religion section especially, you do a good job of detailing the two positions and saying where the academic consensus is. The lead section for the ataraxia article could maybe use a bit more detail - something about how achieving ataraxia is the general goal of most philosophies would be a good point. A note that says the sections that follow are describing how ataraxia is portrayed in different schools of philosophy would also help the article flow. Overall, though, the information is detailed, seems to be well-sourced, and presented very clearly![[User:Talia298|Talia298]] ([[User talk:Talia298|talk]]) 01:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC) |
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Peer Review The Epircureanism draft does a really good job of placing the information in the context of the debate around it. In the religion section especially, you do a good job of detailing the two positions and saying where the academic consensus is. The lead section for the ataraxia article could maybe use a bit more detail - something about how achieving ataraxia is the general goal of most philosophies would be a good point. A note that says the sections that follow are describing how ataraxia is portrayed in different schools of philosophy would also help the article flow. Overall, though, the information is detailed, seems to be well-sourced, and presented very clearly!Talia298 (talk) 01:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC)
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The Epircureanism draft does a really good job of placing the information in the context of the debate around it. In the religion section especially, you do a good job of detailing the two positions and saying where the academic consensus is. The lead section for the ataraxia article could maybe use a bit more detail - something about how achieving ataraxia is the general goal of most philosophies would be a good point. A note that says the sections that follow are describing how ataraxia is portrayed in different schools of philosophy would also help the article flow. Overall, though, the information is detailed, seems to be well-sourced, and presented very clearly!Talia298 (talk) 01:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC)