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First, you need a lead! The lead should summarize the article. One sentence certainly will not do.

There were spelling errors scattered throughout the article. I believe I fixed them all, but could have missed a few. You may want to copy and paste the whole article into a word processor and run a spell check through it, then fix any mistakes.

I added some fact tags throughout the article. The most concerning section is the section where you are reviewing some songs. Wikipedia has a policy concerning no original research. You'll need to cite, via inline citation, a reviewer who has said these things. Reviews like this really don't belong in the artist's article any way. You should create pages for their two albums, and then include this information there.

Also, toward the end of the article, with the discography and further credits, the article gets very... listy. It isn't pretty down there. I would try to arrange it better so it's more pleasant to the eyes. -- Pepsi2786 21:06, 15 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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+First, you need a lead! The lead should summarize the article. One sentence certainly will not do.
+There were spelling errors scattered throughout the article. I believe I fixed them all, but could have missed a few. You may want to copy and paste the whole article into a word processor and run a spell check through it, then fix any mistakes.
+I added some fact tags throughout the article. The most concerning section is the section where you are reviewing some songs. Wikipedia has a policy concerning no original research. You'll need to cite, via inline citation, a reviewer who has said these things. Reviews like this really don't belong in the artist's article any way. You should create pages for their two albums, and then include this information there.
+Also, toward the end of the article, with the discography and further credits, the article gets very... listy. It isn't pretty down there. I would try to arrange it better so it's more pleasant to the eyes. -- [[User:Pepsi2786|Pepsi2786]] 21:06, 15 November 2006 (UTC)