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== Group Peer Review == |
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I definitely need to work on being able to cite as cleanly as you did to improve the overall legitimacy of my article! |
I definitely need to work on being able to cite as cleanly as you did to improve the overall legitimacy of my article! |
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Great Job though! |
Great Job though! |
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[[User:Aapro24|Aapro24]] ([[User talk:Aapro24|talk]]) 04:56, 28 February 2019 (UTC)aapro24 |
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[[Special:Contributions/2601:197:A7F:6D78:C57E:51BE:5E6E:3F89|2601:197:A7F:6D78:C57E:51BE:5E6E:3F89]] ([[User talk:2601:197:A7F:6D78:C57E:51BE:5E6E:3F89|talk]]) 04:54, 28 February 2019 (UTC)aapro24 |
Latest revision as of 04:56, 28 February 2019
What does the article (or section) do well? You did a great job simplifying Primary healthcare. It was very concise and easy to comprehend.
What changes would you suggest overall? I would be careful of just inputting quotation marks. On most Wikipedia pages, definitions are cited but not in quotes.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think you could elaborate a little more about mental health and PHC. It is a very interesting topic. Maybe go into a little more detail about diagnosis and maybe some issues with that.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? My classmate did a great job of citing her articles and making her work visually appealing. I will definitely use some of her techniques on my own article.
Really great job!
Julianadinardo (talk) 18:51, 27 February 2019 (UTC)
Group Peer Review
[edit]What does the article (or section) do well? The article does a great job of introducing the topic of primary healthcare. It also does an exceptional job at citing sources.
What changes would you suggest overall? I think it would be super interesting to dig deeper into PHC and mental health. I also noticed your section on SES and PHC just says needs research but anything you can find would also be super interesting to look at. Also (this is just a bit of overall editing) the spacing in a few places on the article was a bit off but that a very minor issue with a simple fix.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? As I mentioned, just digging deeper into PHC's connections with mental health and SES would be beneficial.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I definitely need to work on being able to cite as cleanly as you did to improve the overall legitimacy of my article! Great Job though! Aapro24 (talk) 04:56, 28 February 2019 (UTC)aapro24